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Merry clopmas everypony!

This story idea was a silly one: every important decision and event that happened during A Canterlot Wedding is replaced with "porn logic."

In short, Cadance hires Chrysalis to clean the pool. Hope you enjoyed!

8615855 The main issue I had was this is about the 10th time I have written events surrounding A Canterlot Wedding. I know for a fact you can't afford to go too far into the plot unless you are changing things massively. I included the scenes I did because those are the only ones that vary wildly from the actual episode, and because they were the ones that were going to be cloppy.

NGL, I thought Polyamory got updated without me for a moment. You almost gave me a heart attack LOL.

What, we can have a mariachi band?

Dude, I love when authors make Shining kinda stupidly oblivious. Not too much, just enough that you think he might not be joking.

Nail your princess, Shiny!

Dude, your comedy is on point.

Good fic, I hope to see more from you.
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8616335 Clop needs support from something to keep it real. No matter if it is comedy, storyline, or drama, it must have something. Thanks for the fix! :twilightsmile:

Really like the idea of Cadance asking Chrysalis to kidnap her for some weird sex game. Have you consider a sequel in which she is the one that helped Chrysalis kidnap the other princesses and mane 6?

Or how about a story based off that one comic by Kanashiipanda in which Chrysalis invasion succeeds, to her dismay as Twilight failed to thwarted her plans like she planned. I don't remember why she did in the first place but she basically told Twilight or Luna that the ponies were pretty much the changelings cattle. Or something. Anyway Chrysalis rolls with it and the ponies pretty submit/thrown themselves onto their new masters, freaking out Chrysalis and her changelings at how perverted and horny the ponies could be.

8616633 I was using Kanashiipanda's stuff as inspiration, but didn't want to tell the story exactly. The basis for this was: "What if A Canterlot Wedding worked by porn logic?"

There's a lot that could go into a sequel, including Cadance laying all those eggs, new laws going into place that let princesses have continued access to recently married stallions, and a very inquisitive Twilight stumbling in on her brother, sister-in-law, and Chrysalis again, and steadily building a voyeur fetish.

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And wouldn't the ponies outright accepting/embracing their enslavement be another result of the CW working by porn logic?

And sounds like you have a three part possible sequel. Or have Chrysalis get called up by Twilight and others to fulfill a sex game.

8616691 I would rather keep such harsh topics as slavery out of my porn. One of the golden rules was: "If drama threatens, insert clop."

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Oh right I forgot to add the "" marks to the world enslavement. Chrysalis was't planning to win but decides to play the role of the evil queen and the ponies decide to do as their 'masters' expect them too. Unfortunately they are basing their assumptions on rumors and raunchy stories.

I'm basing this on a comic about elf wanting to do it with a orc due to rumors but said orc doesn't have any interest. And honestly I can picture Celestia present herself to Chrysalis and begs her to spare Luna and the Mane 6 from the Queen's sexual desires. Chrysalis is freaked the hell out and rejects her only to feel extremely guilty when she see Celestia's eyes at being shot down. After a brief and funny exchange in which she tries to reassure Celestia she is attractive Chrysalis snaps and ruts her.

Pretty much a comedy clop story in which it is the 'evil' changelings that get dragged down into the depths of debauchery by their pony 'victims'.

NOTE: It was a comic by Vavacung, sorry for some reason I thought it was Kanishii

8616721 Ah well, that's cool. I got a ton of projects on the boil right now, and there are some other one-shots I want to make before I poke back at this one. :twilightsmile:

That was quite a messy train wreck they made there.

8616773 And yet nopony complained. Maybe these themed weddings will catch on... :pinkiegasp:

Dude, this was hilarious. Specially Cadence flying towing a licking Twily, that made me lose it.

I would like to see a sequel with the laying and Twilight getting her own batch, though :pinkiehappy:

A very clppy fic i do say so. Enough to entice but the porn logic makes it comedic to a degree.

Now to wait for a sequel where Shining Armor "earns" his Stallion title by rutting NOT only Cadance but Celestia, Luna and Chrysalis. I mean Celestia has gotten a taste what is to say she won't deny another or permanent go at it?

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I look forward to it if you ever do decide to write it. After reading this story I can see you writing a story in which one of the Mane 6 or the princess give themselves to their captors even though they had no intention of doing anything sexual to them only to be guilt-tripped into it. That is really an awkward and funny situation, like in both Family (Meg with burglars/Louis with Mel Gibson) and the Venture Brothers (Dr. Girlfriend with Brock- I lost it when she asked him "and why not?").

Hmm now that I think about it, it would be funny for all the main villains to give up because they couldn't take the spoils they got for defeating Equestria.

8617393 I'll definitely think about it. Besides, Luna will be upset she slept through the most exciting wedding ever.

8617406 :rainbowwild:

8617434 We'll see.

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Now to wait for a sequel where Shining Armor "earns" his Stallion title by rutting NOT only Cadance but Celestia, Luna and Chrysalis.

Don't forget Twilight.:twilightblush:

8618715 Silly, she just likes to watch! :twilightoops:

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Aw, poor Twilight. Can't even get a piece of her own brother.:fluttershyouch:

8618725 Well, she does seem really good at stroking him off. Maybe she will spend some time in Ponyville practicing (and experimenting), then come back and offer him another attempt?

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Clopmas?!? I didn’t know tha was a thing! Why wasn’t I told this is a thing! So much to do, so little time! I have to finish that chapter of Cost, and I need another Fate chapter, maybe with...diamond dogs? No, not dogs, we can go bigger. Better. We can add...thank you, I think I know where to go with Twisted Fate now :3

8618739 I may have just invented it... Anyway, glad you have some inspiration. Clop well! :pinkiehappy:

Even for porn logic, this story felt a little bit rushed. Clop itself was pretty good, though.

Pure, shameless clop. LOVE it.

8619186 It is what it is. Thanks!

8619291 Shame takes too much of the fun out of life.

This was fun! So many rails were forgotten quite quickly.
Keep going! ;)

8625671 Where we're going we don't need rails! :facehoof:

Snrk, that was fun. Especially the 'pussy leech' Twilight.

8618729 I can just picture Twilight hanging out ads like that: 'Hiring: changeling drones to impersonate brother for completely scientific purposes'.

8652752 Of course the changelings know what she means by "scientific," but it is free food! :twilightblush:

That was crazy but awesome

That was adorable, I'm a big fan of the artist that drew the cover art and I think your story lines up well with their comics.

8720578 KanashiiPanda is awesome, indeed. :twilightsmile:

Bravo, Bravo!! For an amazing Erotic story of the best Wedding of Princess Cadance & Shining Armor. 😃👏

I just loved how everyone was controlled by Chrysalis will all thanks to her cum & to laying eggs.

Wow, nice chapter name!:rainbowlaugh:

This story was Goddamned amazing and hilarious.

8825195 Thanks! That was what I was aiming for. :rainbowwild:

Well, smut or not, 'make love not war' REALLY applies a LOT to Chrysalis/Cadance/Shining Armor thing. And the artist you picked for cover art really nailed it too, in their own quirky way.

This was good. (although, much like last time, I don't have time to finish it yet)

To be fair, I'm suprised to see... this (and Miss Hiss stuff), coming from the same author as 'brain bug' thing and a slew of other infestation/permanent harm stuff. I guess it's sort of the same thing, like a rock and a feather are subjects to physics...

8910519 The closest thing to permanent harm in stories was Continued Exposure and Given Shape. Continued Exposure actually took a lighter path than the original (mine was an unofficial sequel), and in Given Shape all the bad stuff happening was purported by bad ponies. Oh, and Black Flash, but that barely got a chapter before the project went south.

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Well, I suppose first impressions can be wrong once in a while, then. The copious amounts of scary-looking triggers were doing maybe a bit too good of a job for me.

8911968 I try to keep my stories consensual (between thinking beings, obviously). Adventure stories, however, can lead ponies to be in situations they don't want to be in (which is the very nature of adventure). Any time sexual activities are explored, they are explored with the consent of all involved. :twilightsmile:

I avoid bait-and-switch with my stories, so if what you read in the first chapter is not too shocking, and the triggers don't look too bad, it's likely okay to read.

Just re-read this, and it SO needs more stories in this world.

… What kind of hot fever dream did I just experience? :twilightblush:

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