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Every Nightmare Night a timid little ghost of a long deceased filly comes out to celebrate the holiday which she cherished most when she was alive. Often she kept to the sidelines, never being noticed for hundreds of years. This was until three little fillies, and their group of rag-tag friends, caught her attention.
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AAAALL THE OTHER KIDS
This was sweet.
listen guy dat ass
I have a feeling this was inspired by that animation google had recently?
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Nope, actually. Did they have animation based around a little ghost?
Sorry I disappeared on you. Laptop had 10% left and shut down.
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No prob. You did so much work, and I love you for it.
8557180 That they did. It was of a ghost trying on different costumes to go out with to look like a regular kid. Ended up going...as a ghost, who actually had a ghost costume xD
Was a nice read, though.
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Thanks, dude! Means a lot.
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finishing up now. also, the line
dark man.. dark. implied suicide? correct me if i'm wrong though.
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It's left out what happened, since it wasn't important to the story as a whole. All that is known is that she's gone from the world, and is now at peace.
8557230 It was bittersweet. Nice she found friends, but had to die to save said friends, but at least she rests in peace, now :)
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Yeah, was a bit bittersweet, yet I think it's more on the side of sweet, rather than bitter.
"Bree, bree, bree, snort snort, BLEGH!" Said the emo to the edgy. "And great story, too."
They all lived happily ever after.
A little late for Halloween, but still good.
*Clicks the thumbs-up icon.*
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Finished the story on Halloween, but just finally finished editing. Better late than never, and better now than after Christmas.
LOL Grammarly says that there are 461 errors in this. Thank goodness there is Thanksgiving break! XD
Well, I suppose for Lily it was...
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Fixed, thanks for the catch. Was supposed to be "There's this pond just outside of Ponyville."
8557339 Totally <3
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She did not die. She was a ghost more she got what she wanted in life as passed on
But yeah still a little bittersweet
Such a sweet, sad tale. I loved it though! Totally had a few tears falling at the end.
damn you for making me cry
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I know she didn't. My brain wasn't working at the moment and settled with a dead being dying xD
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Ah ok
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:3
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Its good to see your still around tho i miss your stories like the mother nightmare moon one
Your writing needs to be strengthened!!!
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I have a job and I work heavy over time...I have like no time to write. As it is, I have to go to work in an hour.
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Oh I understand im just saying i miss your stories
It's so sad the way Lily died. Drowning is one of the worst ways for a young child to go
.
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Indeed it is, drowning in general sounds like one of the worst ways to go.
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Hell yeah it is. I've seen it being acted out well by Kurt Ruseel in the film, Poseidon. It's horrible that you're trying to get air but get nothing but water
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I'm beginning to wonder where Lily's parents or guardians were so they could supervise her? My guess is that she probably snuck away from home before heading to the pond.
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Left it up to the reader to decide. Figured the specifics of her passing were unneeded to the story as a whole.
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That's a good call to make
Great story, perhaps a prequel on Lily's life before she died and how she managed to die? If she needed friendship to pass on, does that mean her ultimately dying in the pond was a result of not having friends or friends who betrayed her?
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With the pumped up kicks
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Either way it is the worlds saddest anime death
8559865 Her parents threw her in for begging for another bowl of gruel.
I can relate. (Too bad for them, I SURVIVED! HA!)
Uh-oh...
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This story has now been 'Bleach'-ed.
Hey for a relatively new writer, that was a really good story. Good job and you earned my follow.
Ps Vinyl > Tavi ;p
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Thanks.
Them's fightin' words!
This was a beautiful story, and I am happy to have read it. It's a shame this wasn't written during Nightmare Night, because it would have been PERFECT! <3
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Thanks! Finished it November first, but needed to be edited. To be fair, though, Halloween was a pretty dead day on the site, so publishing this when I did was probably for the better.
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I can see that. But I meant more the days leading up to Nightmare Night.
Still this story was great and I am glad that I got to read it ^_^
Shame though that there can't really be a sequel with how things ended
Should be 'A' instead of 'An'.
I feel like the 'If' isn't needed in this sentence.
The 'and' here isn't needed as well, and the comma after [took off] if you decide to remove the 'and'.
I believe this should be 'Her tear-covered eyes'.
This sentence feels weird to me. Maybe try rewriting it? Probably something like...
As the door creaked open, she felt excited inside her being for the first time in forever.
'I' should be 'a'.
'our'.
Double 'the'.
Huh?
we're
Remove the first 'before'.
Change 'found' to 'find', and this line is missing an end quote.
What? No argument or question as to why they suddenly just wanted to go right even though the majority vote was to go left?
...huh?
Even though you ended that with a question mark, that isn't a question, in my opinion.
While this here should end with a question mark, since Dinky was asking.
Not a correction, but a comment or reaction from a reader like me. If whoever owned the place didn't want anypony entering the house, a warning sign on the front door would have been nice, instead of on a journal located deep within the house itself, where it may or may not be too late to get out.
The first 'to' should be a 'too'.
'On his flank was an inkwell'
I think 'Dinky blushed' would have been just fine.
Should add a question mark there.
There should be an "I'm" in there.
'your' should be "you're".
...And that's where I end. The story doesn't seem like my cup of tea as I hoped it would. I couldn't push myself further to at least finish it. Apologies. I leave with a thumbs up, at least.
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Sorry to hear it wasn't you're cup of tea, but I really appreciate the honesty, and the list of grammatical errors. I'm going through to correct them now, and the thumbs up you gave me just makes me feel good inside. You're a real awesome person, my dude.
Ow...
My heart
so that's what true sadness tastes like.
Damn dude, that was sad, bittersweet...
I'm sad now, poor Lily
She's at peace now of course, and I couldn't be happier, I suppose.
Good work, Coffee, good work
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You thought this was gonna be a happy, adventure story with a ghost filly? This is me we're talking about, I can't even write a comedy without some tear-jerking scene.
That said, thanks for taking the time to read this, friend-o. I put a lot of work into this, and to see it affect you, and others in such a way means the world to me.
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I suppose this is what happens when you don't get any coffee in the morning
And no problem man, I was happy to read this, it was enjoyable and (aside from a typo here and there) it was very well done. So good job man, good job
Keep it up, friend.
I always thought it was"giggle at the ghosties" but it turns out she said "ghostly".
...
Also holy cow this fic