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DanishDash


Why do I write? Because it's fun! :D

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Colt Detective is the story of Clue Chaser.

After his father committed suicide, he was taken in by his uncle Time Turner and now lives in Ponyville, trying to adjust to his new life there. But Clue is convinced that his father was murdered, even though no one believes him, which weighs down on him considerably.

Thankfully, with the help of some friends--including the imaginary voice of his hero, Phillip Finder, protagonist of A.K. Yearling's Equestria Noire series--he'll find his way and gain the experience and knowledge he needs to become a true detective and maybe even find his father's killer.


Inspired by: Case Closed

Note: This is my first detective story, and I will try to make the cases make sense and work on them in fine detail. But this is my first detective story, so be gentle as you read it. And please don't read a chapter, then comment about a mistake, then keep reading the chapter, then comment again. Please read the whole chapter first, then comment, please.

Editors:
PonyJosiah13

Big thanks to PonyJosiah13 for letting me use Phillip Finder as a character mention and tribute in my story. If you're looking for an amazing detective story, be sure you check out his profile and have a look at his stories about Phillip Finder and Daring Do which was the first time I got introduced to the character. But there is a lot of great detective stories there, so go check him out! :eeyup:

And also big thanks to Hoodwinked MCShelster for the amazing cover art! Really love how it turned out! ^^

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 68 )

its never easy to process such things. But, i really liked how respectful Dinky was despite her young age

Very nice! it kinda reminded me of L.A. Noire, ah, good times!

Though, something I noticed

"Oh, yeah, here you!"

Was this meant to be "here you go"?

Scootaloo was still in the bathroom. She what? Unlocked the door only to throw the key out next to the main entrance?" No one answered, so Chaser continued. "No, the thief was already in the classroom when Scootaloo went to the bathroom."

I could be wrong but that She what looks kinda out of place

Detective Conan, eh? Loved that show! and I always like a good story with Dinky! How old is she here?

"Whoa!!" He fell back onto his flank, surrounded by these three giggling fillies. "I didn't ask for a group hug!"

Pray you don’t realize how many colts would like to have your situation...

Very well done so far my friend! You’ve surprised me with the rating to be sure, but I can only assume the details of that will come later in the story.

Either way I wish you luck and creative thoughts in this endeavor. :raritywink:

There's only one truth! Is Time Turner going to be like Prof agasa? Hmm, would be funny if he uses Twilight as his voice for deduction since adult ponies don't really listen to foals.

Hiding behind a wall after putting Twilight to sleep to use her mouth with his voice changer lol. Would he need powered horseshoes though to buck balls into culprit's faces?

I never expected to see this, and it's going quite well! A cool start, can't wait to see what shenanigans Clue Chaser gets up to in the future!

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Hahahaha yesss, a wrist watch blowgun that can make Twilight fall asleep. If they asked, the reason is: Twilight can solve this case with her eyes closed.

Also, I can’t wait for the next chapter! ^_^

I saw the words “Colt Detective” and thought immediately of an Encyclopedia Brown in Equestria crossover. To my disappointment, it’s just Time Turner’s nephew. :rainbowlaugh:

Still, nice concept! May read it when my backlog is gone. :twilightsmile:

So ...
Chaser - Conan
Time Turner - Prof Agasa
Dinky - Ai Haibara/Ran
CMC - the Detective Boys
Twilight - a more competent Kogoro

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While I like the comparison, you are off the mark with some of them. Twilight don't have a major part in this, and Chaser won't be using other ponies to pretend to solve the crimes. He will do it himself, even if he is not allowed to, and get into a lot of trouble afterwards. :P

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ah, dang. Sorry it is your story. I do hope Doc still contribute with gadgets for him

Okay, got my attention. Carry on.

Can't have a detective story without a Sherlock Holmes moment. Nice work.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k41t3wDovj0 During intense action scenes when Chaser tries subduing culprits. You're welcome

This is off to a great start. But first off. I am mad. Not at you writer. You are doing great. I am mad at the police! It doesn't matter if you already put it down as a suicide! Even if there is a small sliver of a chance that it could be something else then you have a right to investigate! Even if it's coming from a kid. The kid is his son! He'd know more about his father and how he was off the clock more then anyone else. If he says he wouldn't kill himself then he wouldn't!

Also I love Detective Conan it's my fave anime and manga of all time. This is gonna be a wild ride.

Chase.. Damn. I hope you overcome this hump.

So whatever happened to this?

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It is being worked on. But as a I wrote, this is my first detective story, and I've been preparing this story for a long time, so I am taking my time with it.

There is also art that needs to be completed, and I have other chapters for other stories to write too.

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Unless they were in on setting it up as a suicide. Then they would do everything to avoid it. Betting that books he has are tails of his father's cases.

Great beginning and love the detective conan

"Stories I'm focusing on writing (this one)"

*Hasn't been updated since April*

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The intro of this chapter is almost 4.000 words long. I am also adding art. It is well on the way.

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Oh.

I was, uh, making a joke dude.

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Oh?

I thought you wanted to know the progress of the chapter? I was hoping to excite you with the news, and the likely length of the chapter as a whole. I'm sorry if it came off as defensive or harsh, that wasn't my intend.

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I actually haven't read this story. I simply found it odd how this was a story you were supposedly focusing on, when it hasn't been updated since April.

But hey, good to know you haven't put yet another story on that Forever Hiatus.

Mmm enjoyable so far. I hope to see more of this soon!

Great to see another chapter of this story. It was a calming one with Chaser still being the Sherlock Holmes he is. Love it. Also the art work is noice. The picture of the police ponies was my fave out of the two. Can't wait for more

What was the worst that could happen?

Gas Explosion? Grease Fire? Pinkie shooting you point blank with the Party Cannon? Slip in something and fall on the floor? Burn yourself on something? Do I need to go on?

nicely done and great pics too!

Scootaloo laughed. "Relax, will you? What's the worst that can happen?"

No no no no no no no no no no no no no no no.
(Commenters Note: every no is me hitting my head on my pillow.)

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Maybe something from the recent Little Rascals movie?

Case Closed? Ugh. I won’t hold it against this story, but I dropped Case Closed cause it had too many errors which made solving the mystery bullshit.

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No problem. This is my first detective story, so I'm experimenting a bit with the cases, hoping to make them bigger and better the more experience I get. It is why the chapters are a bit slow, because I try to really plan out each case. So I hope you won't be disappointed, if you are, then thank you for giving it a chance nonetheless. :twilightsmile:

Still, great job! Loved the firework refernce with time Turner. And chaser should see it from the bright side about dinky, better ensure she won't be victim, right?

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You know I can't say anything about it. Spoiler. :derpytongue2:

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I just mean, if he watches her, less risk she could be victim.

Though...harm one hair on her and you get to know me and a royal guard oc of mine

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Sorry, did not mean to actually scare you. Dinky's just my Favorite background foal. The guard oc, is her uncle in a Story of mine.

But, if you don't mind me asking a what if question, how do you think it would go if chaser meets sharp shooter?

Welp, he's dead. And just as he saw ponified Megeru Keibu

First thing first, Chaser need to look around the school, the pathway out and towards the Rich mansion. Silver Spoon's testimony could help. There are possible places where she could be taken too, the White Tail Woods, Everfree Castle or who knows. Maybe Rich Manor itself but not where she should be.

Yawning one final time, Chaser shook his body, trying to wake up, and clear his head. It didn't do much, but at least it gave him enough focus to go to the bathroom and brush his teeth. He'd never been a morning pony, but he knew it was his own fault for reading until so late. He made a mental note of keeping better bedtime schedules for himself in the future.

I would like to know what kind of toothbrush he was using. Perhaps a toothbrush that has bristles on all sides so that you can just chew it to brush your teeth? I do not think it is possible to pick up a human-style toothbrush with hooves.

Time Turner coughed a few more times, but otherwise seemed unhurt. He ran a hoof over his eyes, clearing away the soot so he could see better. "Yes, I'm quite, erugh, quite alright, lad." He smiled, seeming to jitter with excitement. "I've been experimenting with fireless fireworks, so far my efforts have been less than successful." His uncle admitted, shaking his body free from the soot, and looked at Chaser. "It is good that you're home, my boy. We have something to talk to you about."

FiReLesS FirEWoRKs sounds kinda stupid, but I already figured out how to make fireless fireworks. They would be very uneconomical, but doable. Just take mini LED lightbulbs, attach them to a power source that is programmed to turn on and off rapidly, put these contraptions in a contraption that could use springs to launch them into the air randomly, launch the launcher thingy in the air, and you have something resembling a firework, although a huge waste of money, unless you plan to hunt around for the LEDs.

You know digging around in the backstory of Granny Smith I've been trying to find out what was her brother's name as well as the other extra hands name I have looked everywhere.

The reason why I was digging around in Granny Smith backstory is on working on a Oregon Trail campaign for 5th edition and I cannot find these two ponies names.

If you need to borrow an OC, let me know.

If you'd like to borrow an OC for later, just let me know.

(Sent repeatedly because I don't know if you got the others)

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