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As days go in the EQG world, this one takes the cake. Rarity and Applejack find themselves in prison, Sunset, Twilight, and Pinkie Pie end up getting torn to bits, and Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy wind up in a surprising situation.
How did it come to this? See for yourself!
Inspired by "The Betrayal" of "Seinfeld".
Now includes 'Forwards' chapter.
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Now where's the aftermath?!
Wait... how was this posted on 10th of April when it is at the "Most Recent" list?
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That's when I started work on it. Don't know why it hasn't updated.
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You saw it at the beginning, remember?
Hot damn! This story is great!
8148935 I mean the rest of the aftermath.
8149020
There wasn't any. We don't need to see what happens after the group encounters the newlyweds.
8149079 There are still more unanswered questions:
Did Rarity finally get fashion justice on Suri?
Are Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash officially going out?
Did Pinkie Pie win the bet with witnesses?
Will Applejack beat up someone who was taking pictures?
Is SciSet a thing?
What Spike does when he's at home?
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In this order:
No.
They're married.
Yes.
Huh?
What's that got to do with anything?
Does that really matter?
8148935 oh, hm, weird :P
8148935 You probably published the chapter on that day, before submitting the story. Happened to me once too.
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Guess that did happen.
Anyway, since you went to the trouble of replying to me, what are your thoughts on the story?
i could only read half this story then stopped the constantly going backwards made it way to confusing to read
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Well, if you prefer, you can read it backwards.
8155090
Alright, I've posted a chapter with a 'Forward' version, so you can try again.
'Bwaa!
Best. Line. Ever.
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Uh, thanks, but what do you mean exactly?
Thank you for the reverse-reverse forward story version!
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Thank you.
What were your feelings about the story?
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It was good
Alright, since the two pages got mixed up, when Twilight said she'd used an "infatuation" spell, she would be mistaken, because the sheet she'd used came from the wrong folder. So that would mean Flutters and Dash would have been hit by the honesty spell. Which means that it isn't a temporary infatuation that would end after 24 hours, but how they actually feel about each other but were unable to voice before. Am I right with my conclusion?
Otherwise, a temporary infatuation that ended 24 hours after their marriage would be sad for the both of them.
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They were hit by the honesty spell. That was one of the nerve-wracking things about my story's reverse chronology: to make people think they were just under a temporary infatuation spell until it was revealed that the notes were mixed up.
Don't worry.
In other words, you can rest assure that their marriage is for completely genuine reasons.
Feel relieved?
The problem with this kind of story is the interesting stuff is all front-loaded and resolved and I lacked interest in the fine details of how they got to that spot. It's really really hard to write in this format. Also the lack of chapter breaks does hurt the story.
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Well, sorry. I thought I had gotten writing that way locked down. It looked so simple on television.
Still, despite what some may say, I still consider it one of my best works.
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Kinda disappointed that Rarity didn't get any revenge or compensation for all the crap she went through, especially since Suri basically stole from her.
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Hey, the same thing happened in "Rarity Takes Manehatten" where Suri got away with ripping off Rarity's dress designs.
Oh, and in case you didn't realize it, there's also an added insult to injury: Where do you think Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy got those wedding gowns?
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To be fair, Rarity actually (unintentionally) got her vengeance since she still won. We just never get to see Suri's onscreen reaction.
That kinda makes it worse. Since we know they basically (unknowingly) supported something that was stolen and Suri got off scott-free.
I personally wanna see a sequel/epilogue dealing with an aftermath for everything, including Suri gets her own comeuppance. If only for the catharsis factor.
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Well, I'd gladly write a sequel, especially if it'd help get this story more views, but I'm drawing a blank for a plot at the moment. If I ever come up with anything, I'll write it.
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Well that'd be easy, the group basically dealing with the aftermath of this story, with some friends from Equestria getting involved, hell I've got the perfect ideas for them!
Princess Twilight and Starlight get called in by Sunset and Sci-Twi to make sure no other portals to Equestria were opened and no creatures managed to slip under their radar... however when they're not looking Princess Twi ends up sneaking off to reconnect with Flash, and Sunset suspects that the Dazzlings are hiding something...
Fluttershy and RD start to wonder if they moved too fast when they got married, so the two decide to get some advice... from their pony selves who have been married for a while now.
Rarity enlists her pony self's help to expose Suri for the fruad she is... with her pony self donning her "Detective Rarity" persona once more, with dragon Spike and Coco acting as their assistants!
Pinkie challenges​ her pony self to an ice-cream eating contest. Both AJ's just stay for damage control.
TAH-DAHHH!
What do you think?
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Uh, how about you write that? You have my permission. If I ever come up with my own plot, I'll write it, okay?
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Unfortunately​ I've got a ton of stories on my plate already, what wrote out was just a one-off idea I wanted to share since you said you were drawing blank on the plot.
That being said, I'm not opposed to co-writing...
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You'll be happy to know that I managed to come up with a plot for a sequel and have recently posted it. I hope you'll read it soon, and like what you'll see.
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There's more aftermath now. Hope you'll enjoy.
8174741
Hey, I've posted a sequel to this story, and I think it might satisfy your questions. Hope you'll read it soon.
Ok, this was hilarious and yet sweet at certain points. I love how it all worked out and the style was quiet unique.
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Thanks.
I've always been a fan of back to front format. And I figured that you'd like the subplot regarding Rainbow and Fluttershy. So, would you say it warrants a reading?
I'll be honest, sir. At first, I thought this story was going to be pretty boring. But you did end up capturing my fascination about 1/4 of the way through. I think your plot ideas were creative, and the flutterdash plot line was sweet and satisfying. The Rarity plotline ended with a villain's victory, but I suppose Rarity's reactions were entertaining enough to get past my dislike for suri. Usually I'm not at all into chimeras, but I applaud your characterization, nonetheless
This was hilarious. I had to stop to giggle at several points. I love the way you kept on changing the meaning of things that had come "before"...
In particular, I had thought the argument between Fluttershy and Dash resolved itself a bit suddenly and the romantic confession seemed rather forced. So I burst into uncontrollable laughter when I read
Excellent way to take what looked like excessively sudden shipping and justify it.
And I feel silly for not realising the implication of the spell mixup - I think Beanzoboy must be right, which makes for yet another subversion of the same. Awesome. I'll be heading on to the epilogue/sequel very shortly...
I love the implication revealed right at the end that FlutterDash completely coincidentally got married in wedding dresses that Rarity had designed.
Also, my congratulations on the turn of phrase "Rarity was throwing a fit, along with everything else in the room". Can't beat a good syllepsis :)
Probably the 5th time I read this this month...
What voodoo is this? This is too cute
"well you can stuff your sorrries in a sack!" Rainbow ranted over the line
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Oh, you're familiar with the inspiration source!
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yep, I expected this to be more related to the original story, which could work. pinkie, rarity, and dash attend the wedding of saffron masala. or either pinkie or dash could try to break a wish from someone to drop dead