I've been looking like Rainbow Dash for little over two months now, not sure how, but it happened randomly, overnight in my sleep, like a bad fanfic. Being from the "one percent' group of wealthy people my parent's didn't notice or care that I wasn't, well, me. I sent all orders for food and such to servants in detailed instructions via text app my parents usually use because the "do no commune with the laborers", yeah, they're that stuck up. Then I took a nap, woke up on a cloud in Equestria, thrown in jail on accusations of being an imposter, then taken in by the Skittle pony herself... *Sigh* Just why can't she leave me alone? I want Sandra back!
Special Thanks to Xinrick for co-writting this with me to keep it alive.
Chapters (10)
Nice so far. I do like the wide range of characters you do.
My only real complaint is that his character development was slightly rushed, but that can be fixed in later chapters.
The description is confusing
8084964 I was gonna ask what you are referring to, but your username just made me laugh, perfect username.
8084967 .... your description of the story
interesting beginning i can't wait for the next chapter.
Also, try to comb through the chapter with a spellchecker or find an editor.
Otherwise, nice start.
The story sounds interesting, but the plot synopsis makes my head sad.
What exactly is that meant to say, anyway?
8085287 has meaning when character gets to Equestria. Basically a short sum-up of that chapter, which has yet to come out, but soon.
This story is somehow strange, but the second chapter had something that made me curious at least, so I guess I give it a chance.
pretty decent story,
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Reading that, I assumed this story has the Human possess Rainbow Dash's body like some kind of Freaky Friday body swap.
Reading the rest of the description makes no sense. It sounds like the Human gets arrested for being an imposter (if he is indeed stuck in Rainbow's body), and is later released. After which the real Rainbow takes him into her home.
Now if the description said "I've been WITH Rainbow Dash for little over two months now" instead. That'd make much more sense.
I should probably try reading the actual story now.
OH boy, I can't wait to see what happens to "Sound Dash" when the Mane 6 find out that isn't really Rainbow Dash, so I'm guessing Sound ended up in Equestria looking like Rainbow, but Rainbow is on a Different cloud still asleep then.
.....What could possibly go wrong
Memoryspell,,, that is bad. I only hope that she try to unlock memorys and not add them
Partial?
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8103206 ... Grammar Nazi, but thanks.
keep up there story i love it i just cant wait for the next chap
Unless Spike or the real Rainbow are there, it should be four ponies with her.
8103184 *Images of rainbow and friends having fun and bonding flash by*
"Well, that was nice I guess; still not Rainbow Dash though."
I really hope Twilight isn't accidently fixing his memories in a way that makes him believe he is someone else and that he can stay there in the end.
Maybe just take that Sarah girl there too if she should be that important for the story.
I always think of this type of story somewhat strange, but pretty interessting.
8103388 I can't help it. It's something I do instinctively.
Ugh, Sound Dash? Sorry, that just doesn't roll off the toung well.
8104146 Sound Wave would have been too easy.
Sound dash ehhhh not very original.
Maybe Sound Trail, Rainbow Beat, Rainbow Music/Muse, Rainbow Tune, Rainbow Bass-Drop, Rainbow Raver or Reaver maybe Weaver?
Eh but it finally starts with the MLP episodes.......
Sometimes I don't like it that those spells exist. However in some stories if they are somewhat sure that the main char isn't evil, they don't even use those spells.
I don't know, I just dislike everything that can give them a quick solution and that could take away some suprising moments in stories sometimes.
I really prefer the stories where they have to ask her and when it looks like they think about trusting her or not and where Celestia hates those mind spells.
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They don't even ask the main char anymore in such stories. They could still try to ask the now harmless main char for their opinion instead of deciting his life again.
I know he knows nothing about the world, but there are probably a few solutions.
I don't know why I feel weird about that, maybe because it mentions how helpless the main char is right now?
I always say I don't need an OP main char, but I often enough dislike a weak idiot either, but with that I don't mean anything right now.
At the same time this is somehow an interessting situation.
Well the story is really nice and even if I have my own stuff that I don't like to read or not everytime, I really like the direction this story is going. Maybe this would have looked slightly better if you would make him a little bit younger too? I don't know exactly why, but that was probably one of my problems with that.
Well if I say problem here, I more mean stuff that maybe would look better in a different way.
nice chapter I thoroughly enjoyed it.
#brocode
Good job I like the story so far keep it up see you next chapter
I have read the first chapter and was hooked on the story. Keep the good work up.
It was short but good but still short
Donovin, the copyright dodger.
I probably said it already, but if he is supposed to be younger, I hope he actually got a younger body, I just remember there was something I didn't liked about that in the last chapter.
Yes well I'm not sure where the point was that I hated about it last time, but I love the irony right now.
Please give him a younger body, I kind of hate to see him being practically the same age at least in Equestria and being treaten like a child.
How did she figured out she was the other one?, just because she asked for a job? what if Rainbow wants to try something new?
I prefer it if they don't know about the world or at least not about fanfictions that he is talking about existing fanfictions to his situation.
However I love it if the others find out that he is kind of taking care of Rainbow, mostly because he has the exact same body and is treaten like a child a bit.
Link doesn't work for me
8088557 the only problem is that that is not what the author was trying to say.
Basically the description says that, after being rainbow for two months, Donovan gets sent to equestria after falling asleep in the human world.
The authorities then arrest Donovan for impersonation, but skittles bails him out.
Kapiche?
Is the Barkeep Milano Mash (Button's mom)?
8146759 yus.
Lies! Lies and trickery!
How does she repr—oh I read it wrong.
OH BOY KETTLE YOU SURE ARE BLACK YOU ARE
wreck
This is getting pretty silly.
masturbating
"Well, you could start by leaving me in the hall, and hiding, so that when I wake up I just think it was some crazy dream. Oh wait..."
forgot a space
“I" before "E" except after "C" and when sounding like "A" as in neighbor and weigh, and on weekends and holidays and all throughout May, and YOU'LL ALWAYS BE WRONG NO MATTER WHAT YOU SAY!!!!
Bite
packaged
This story is kinda neat! Rainbow Dash vs Totally-Not-Rainbow-Dash-Shut-Up is an interesting pairing. She's definitely not a narcissist. She gets on her own nerves!
8148342 love that guy
This fic be very good
Wow, bad timing for that interdenominational shift to happen. Poor Donny
At least he's no longer bored.
I wonder if Sandra got thrown in to Equestria with sound dash?
Yeah I'm definitely hooked on this story. Well then there goes my theory.
More please.
I wonder how it is that 'A Dash of Clockwork Origins' didn't cross your mind as a title? I mean the elements of an homage to a Clockwork Orange are already present. Embrace it. . .
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