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Banshee531


I've always been a lover and writer of fanfiction, but it wasn't until I got into MLP that I really found something I loved writing about. Hope you all enjoy.

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Over a thousand years ago, ten Elements of Harmony were lost in another world. Now a group of young teens must come together, to protect this world form the evil that threatens it. With the help of the mane seven, they must become the Guardian Power Rangers.

Takes place after Legend of Everfree and in place of the next film.

Chapters (21)
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Comments ( 263 )

I would like more, great job with this, cannot wait! :pinkiehappy:

Would have gone with a different AU, ie, not unlike your Yugioh fanfic, but hey, beggers cannot be choosers. Looking forward to the rest of the Rangers.

Oh BTW, Love the Red Zoid design (bit of Digimon fan... the animated series)

Comment posted by MJP deleted Dec 22nd, 2017

Well then....this is in intro.

"I get the feeling," Flash said, "that I just stepped into something big."

Okay, first you make him adorable, then you make him awesome. You get a like. Also, red, Flash, and dragons are a great combo.

Is the morpher like the ones used in Dino Charge because that's the one I keep picturing? Also, like with your other Flash-centric stories, this kind of needs an editor. I enjoyed it all the same though. :pinkiesmile:

7966738 The morpher is based on the Nerf Stockade, but will be black and the Rangers main colour.

7966790 Well, the Nerf Stockade looks pretty similar to the Dino Charge morphers except that the spinning part is positioned differently. :trollestia:

This is going to be fun. I wonder what are the ten heroic traits the elements represent? I can't wait to see more of this.

Hold on. Which Celestia and Luna? :pinkiegasp: Are the Rangers going to actually meet the princesses?

This is wonderful start so far. I am guessing that Flash's Heritage Trait is Bravery, maybe? Good job making Flash likeable here. I hope to see how the rest are handled character wise.

Calling it now Derpy/Ditsy Do/Muffins becomes the sixth ranger. I mean she is the only one other character that has interacted with Lyra & Bon-Bon and Flash several times. Silver is a Grey like color too. So it is not too out there in pluasibility. Other guesses would include Vinyl Scratch as Purple, Octavia Melody as Graphite, Sonata as Aqua, Timber Spruce as Black. Bulk Biceps/Snowflake as Gold. Pink I have no idea who.

7971735 I've already selected whose going to be a ranger along with their colours and Elements. These include two characters from the movies, two OC and a MLP character who hasn't been shown in the movies yet.

7971778 Oh okay. I was mostly speculating. Sorry. Still sounds very interesting. Wish you luck then!

7971778 Will there be any temporary "evil rangers" before they join the group? I kinda doubt that would happen since the rangers represent heroic traits but it is still fun.

By the way, your choice of intro is great. It just screams "Flash Sentry is a Power Ranger." :raritywink:

7971778 I'm seriously reminded of of the opening episode of Dino Charge.

7971778 Let's play a guessing game, shall we? Hmm, two from the movies, two OCs, and one from the actual show but not the movies.
Assuming that the two from the movies are movie-exclusive, we've got the Sirens, Cinch, the Shadowbolts, Timber Spruce, and Gloriosa Daisy.
Possibilities for OCs are infinite.
The one character that's only been on the show can be Pinkie's other three sisters, Zephyr Breeze, Babs Seed, and pretty much anypony classified under supporting characters or one shot characters that doesn't have an EG counterpart.

Well, that sure narrows it down. :ajsmug::rainbowlaugh::raritywink:

7973834 I've only watched episodes 3-6, episode 8, episodes 10-20, and two holiday specials, and they're all from Season 2. :twilightsheepish: I know. I'm lame. :facehoof: However, I did look up clips from the opening episode, and you're totally right. It definitely doesn't make the story any less enjoyable though. :twilightsmile:

The pacing feels a little... rush... and the juxtapostion feels a little... jaring... some transitions and maybe flush out the setup in the scenes would help with the pacing and juxtaposition. Maybe in Chapter show Lrya and Sweetie Drops becoming the pink and blue rangers. Not a bad follow-up, actually a good one, from to Ch. 1, but maybe flushing out the heros before brining in the big baddy of the series would have helped you out. I only critize because I care.

Take a bit of time to plan but other than that it was good.

Wow! Now that was an pilot done right! A little fast, but most intros in shows are. I am already sensing a nice mesh here amongst our current set of rangers. Which will become even better once everyone is properly developed as the story goes on. I hope theverything rest this story continues to be just as fun.

Maybe this is a little rushed and it has a few grammar errors in it but it is still a good start overall. I hope we see a flashback showing how Lyra and Sweetie became Rangers themselves. I'm glad so far Twilight and Flash have been getting along well, since this is after Legend of Everfree I hope something is said about Twi's "relationship" with Timber (or how it ended).

Let me guess. Flash's dad is one of the OCs you mentioned. Are the Principal sisters going to become Rangers also or are they strictly mission control? You've got the stereotypical Power Rangers battle sequence speech pattern down, but it's kind of weird and hilarious when it's coming out of Flash. Don't worry. It's a good weird and hilarious. :rainbowlaugh: By the way, is the other OC going to be "Ivan"? Keep up the good work. My only nitpick would have to be this part:

Flash: Element of Courage...Power Ranger, RED!
Lyra: Element of Trust...Power Ranger, BLUE!
Micro: Element of Knowledge...Power Ranger, YELLOW!
Sweetie: Element of Love...Power Ranger, PINK!
Sandelwood: Element of Will...Power Ranger, GREEN!
All: Protectors of right, ready to fight!
Flash: Power Rangers!
All: GUARDIANS!

It's a little weird and inconsistent going from quotes to scripted. :applejackunsure:

The pacing is better but again use a transition, like "Fifteen minutes later", "the next day", that will help the pacing more. But right now you might want to work on setting up the juxtaposition a little more, perhaps after the monster is destroyed wait until the heroes celebrate before going back to Darklight... but all in all not bad.

KO awesome chapter, the rangers have learned of new powers of their weapons and Zords to continue fighting evil and get through High School as well. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

I'm loving this. I'm loving this so much. :heart: The banter is still weird and hilarious coming out of Flash and the others, and I wouldn't have it any other way. :rainbowlaugh: Also, poor Sweetie. She stopped aging before she became old enough to drink. :rainbowlaugh: Well, probably anyways. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/U.S._history_of_alcohol_minimum_purchase_age_by_state
Then again, she's not missing out on much. Being able to drink isn't as cool as it sounds, especially if you don't like the taste of alcohol and especially if alcohol gives you a headache surprisingly quickly.

7996809 Same age as everyone else.

Another good chapter, felt like a real episode. The megazord was cool and it was surprising to find out Sweetie is over 100 years old.

I know I'm excited for something when I'm asking anticipatory questions. For example:

"This bites," Rainbow said, "we're not even Rangers. Why do we have to do this?"

Are the Mane 7 going to do anything in this story?

Next Time: character growth.

Which character(s)?

Micro and Sandel's Zords will show up soon.

Are the zords going to just show up or is the team going to actually have to go out and find them?

Gah! So excited! :yay:

The pacing and the juxtaposition is getting better, try being more specific with your transition. Other that, Sandalwood's name us not spelt with an 'e',... beyond that nice to flush out Sweetie Drops past. So next is Lyra's history I assume. Looking forward to more.

KO awesome chapter, Sweetie sure had a rough life not aging and having fear of the dad she lost her dad but managed to overcome those fears to help his new family. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

It always hurts when someone loses a parent, no matter how young or old they are. Glad to see that she's doing better now.

"Ever played chicken freak," Flash said

Umm, have you, Flash? :twilightoops:

"I spent so long on my own," Sweetie said, "when I realised I'd stopped ageing I knew I couldn't stay in the same place. I kept moving from place to place, knowing I'd have to one day leave it again. I guess I forgot what it felt like to love someone, but I remember know and I wouldn't trade it for anything in the world."

You've watched The Age of Adaline, have you? :ajsmug: I haven't seen the whole thing myself, but I did watch enough to get the basic premise. So, I'm guessing that since meeting Starswirl and the Principal sisters, she can age normally now?

"Not everyone's Mr No Fear you know," Lyra said,

Is it just me, or is there a bit of friction going on between Flash and Lyra? :applejackunsure: I saw it in the last chapter as well.

Also, is Flash talking about A Clockwork Orange the book or the movie? :twilightoops: I know that the book is sometimes assigned for AP English, but I'm kind of questioning how Flash would even have access to the movie. :trixieshiftright: I don't know how CHS's AP English program works, but the only movies of the books I ever watched for AP English were Pride and Prejudice, To Kill a Mockingbird, and Twelve Angry Men, and Twelve Angry Men was the only one I watched without being required to read the book. :twilightsheepish:

8013157 Movie. I didn't even know A Clockwork Orange had a book format.

i 2 am a fan of At4W >.>

Okay, still sensing tension between Lyra and Flash, but they're definitely getting along better.

KO awesome chapter, Lyra made a noble choice of self surface to give up her dream and helping her friends to defeat evil once and for all. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

More impressive backstory for the team. Unfortunate that Lyra had to put her dream on hold to do what's right. Not every teenage superhero can balance their lives with their responsibilities as effectively as others. Now to see what will happen next.

The pacing and juxtaposition still need work with some explicit transitions, all in all a good chapter and Lyra's origins as a ranger, but you might want to include in the flash back how long ago it was. But it's a step in the right direction.

8013176 By they way, I just realized that you haven't clarified if the tension between Lyra and Flash was intentional. I don't know why, but there's something about it that kind of bothers me a bit. I keep getting this weird feeling that the tension is going to come to a head later on in the story. :rainbowhuh:

8036592 You mean something like they will get so sick of each other that one of them will quit the team?

8038716 I mean like Flash and Lyra will get into this huge fight, and the other three plus the Mane 7 somehow get caught in the middle. Another possibility would be that Flash and Lyra end up having the same dynamic as Jack and Sky from SPD.

So is Sweetie Drops still immortal or can Starswirl neutralize it?

8047747 No Starswirl neutralised it.

I have to admit, at first the story seemed a little slow paced to me but you've really made it feel like the actual show. Liking the character development everyone is getting and can't wait to see what you have in store for future chapters.

Still, need to work on the juxtapositions and pacing with more explicit transitions. However, it's nice to see some tension relief among the team. But I thought Sweetie Drops was the first ranger? :rainbowhuh: Or is she the first to find her element with Lyra the first to actually become a ranger? :rainbowhuh:

Although it would be nice to see some character maybe the next villain to play the everyman or straight man calling out the absurdity of all this. Also, it would be nice to see a shift of the technology away from Sunset and Twilight to be Mirco Chips venue. Not trying to undercut these two but having Sunset and Twilight be the ones to come up with everything might make some people feel like the Rangers haven't ... well ... earned the upgrades.

Criticisms aside, this was a good chapter

KO awesome chapter, Flash and Lyra may have their differences to each other but they work out in the end to find the bounds within each other and defeated their enemies. Probably even decided to go dating each other! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

Glad to see that this tension between Flash and Lyra was finally resolved. Guess I can understand why Lyra was so upset to have the new guy be the leader, but even a Rookie Red Ranger is still the leader, that's Power Rangers 101. Hopefully now they'll be able to work together better.

I wonder if Sandalwood or Micro will be the focus of the next chapter?

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