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Majin Syeekoh

That’s how we got Majin, the anthropomorphic personification of Depravity. But he’s like Pratchett’s Death, where he’s wholesome and caring. —RBDash47


Rainbow Dash has been saving a lot of ponies lately.

This worries Twilight, because there used to not even be enough ponies to save on the schedule that Rainbow Dash saves them. So she runs some numbers and comes to a startling conclusion

Written for F**K THIS PROMPT #14

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I... um... no, I got nothing

Why was this story written? I don't know, but I like it anyways. Have a thumbs up.

Majin Syeekoh
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7562663 I just can't seem to avoid that comment ever. Oh well.

7562664 It was written for a contest.

No Granny Smith?


Twilight staggered around like a sailor who has imbibed too much yet not quite enough. “It’s simple. I have twotheories.

Majin Syeekoh
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7562693 That's slurring two words together.

7562717 Uh...okay, sure. Let's go with that.

Majin Syeekoh
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7562679 Ficus, when I write a story about Granny Smith you'll be the first to know.

“Twilight, no!” Rainbow Dash Rainbow Dashed as she pierced the floor

She's a verb now!:rainbowkiss:

Twilight, you need to keep your magic pills together. How is a organized joker like you gonna last without your sleep pills? :derpytongue2:

Um... well... okay then. :rainbowderp:

Majin Syeekoh
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7562785 Rainbow Dash fought extremely hard in court to be legally recognized as a verb.

It was a triumphant day for everyone who wanted to be part of the language.

I have a feeling this was written around the same time as Mysterious Mare Do Well aired or was inspired by it cuz it would make since that Twilight was still living in the library, wasn't an alicorn, and Rainbow is saving a bunch of ponies constantly and that makes the universe go unstable hehe :rainbowlaugh: Anyways if this was done for a contest I bet it did well it was short but sweet, I love how u made sleepy Twilight sound and how "advanced" the computer is what with all the flashy lights and sciencey stuff :twilightsmile:

Majin Syeekoh
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7562880 Don't forget its ONE MEGAHERTZ PROCESSOR



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7562884 Yeah I know no wonder it took all night for just a slip of paper with some dots, I always thought of the technology in the show as being around 50s and 60s also I noticed the carts in Applewood in the friends forever comic were styled like classic cars from the 60s. Sorry it took me so l long to reply my browser's acting funky cuz of this damn slow processor :facehoof:

Majin Syeekoh
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7562930 Technology in MLP is really hard to pin down in general, I find.

7562938 Well we sure won't be seeing laptops or cell phones anytime soon. Although it would be pretty neat if Discord used a cell phone styled like ones used in star trek. I guess with magic technology's not really that much of a necessity

whoever designed coud doors

This is decent quality, but it doesn't really feel like a fixfic.

Majin Syeekoh
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7562954 Well the intention was to cut off the whole Mare Do Well incident before it even started by Twilight examining the issue from another angle.

Also thanks for the catch.

uh why would twilight fall through the clouds she is an alicorn

Majin Syeekoh
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7563019 because this story takes place before she was an alicorn

A perfectly logical :pinkiecrazy: explanation of how Ponyville suddenly became a remarkably lethal place during the Mare-do-Well episode. Bravo.

Majin Syeekoh
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7563090 I always find it interesting how so many incidents seem to happen around heroes, super or otherwise.

This gives off the vibes of a story that wants to show off an interesting idea, but doesn't really go anywhere, rather than a fixfic.

Also, my general reaction to this thing ya made:


7563096 Or fictional detectives. Really, the appearance of, say, Poirot or Jessica Fletcher at a house party should cause the more intelligent guests to flee into the night and not stop running until they get to Bulgaria or Peru.

Majin Syeekoh
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7563116 I'd like to think what counts in the end is that I had fun writing it and people seemed to enjoy reading it.

Anything else is just icing on the cake.

7563150 I think the biggest plus I can give this story, is that it's not what I expected to come out of the prompt. Only wish I saw it sooner, so that I could have participated.

I'd like to think what counts in the end is that I had fun writing it

Never lose that enthusiasm, it's very important to have in this line of work.

Majin Syeekoh
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7563161 Thank you. I always try to keep it interesting.:twilightsmile:

Also if you join the Rage Reviews group, you'll get clued in on the next time this contest rears its head.

Twilight staggered around like a sailor who has imbibed too much yet not quite enough.

You make just some of the best similes, you know that? :rainbowlaugh:

Majin Syeekoh
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7563233 I certainly try, that's for sure.

So Twilight's computer isn't even comparable to a 286? Wow, that is slow.

Correlation does not imply causation, but being up all night waiting for that awe-inspiring ONE MEGAHERTZ PROCESSOR to crunch the numbers did Twilight's rationality no favors. I think she actually managed to find a solution worse than Operation: Darkwing Dorks. The story itself, though, was amusing and more than a little sweet.

Ha! Science laughs at your silly "logic." Clearly, data does not lie.

The numbers don't lie, but the ponies making them up certainly do.

Well, ain't that quite the conclusion you've come to, Twi. That 1MHz CPU (that made me laugh more than it should, considering my own runs at 4500x the frequency) sure has some good deduction logic.

Fun read though!

You never really explained what the alternate universe tag was for. Nothing distinctly different from canon was involved that I saw.

Majin Syeekoh
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7563803 It's implied to take place during the events of the mare do well episode and is an alternate resolution to the episode.

I probably could have made that clearer, but I was kind of running against the clock when writing this and just assumed people would pick up on it.

Today is the day we learn fimfiction can't read my mind.:twilightblush:

Funny, but ends a bit too abruptly...Rainbow Dash has no real reason to BELIEVE Twilight...(Especially since she's, you know, barely conscious)...

And the Correlation/Causation error is one of my MAJOR pet peeves. (She's making the Ice cream rape fallacy).

Majin Syeekoh
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7564537 But what if ponies is not save?

Ice cream rape sounds oddly arousing.

What. Did. I. Just. Read? :rainbowhuh:

Well that was silly.


Not raping ice cream...

The fallacy goes like this. As people eating ice cream goes up...rape goes up. Obviously, this mean ice cream causes rape, right? Or, if you want to be a sexist pig...that rape causes people to eat ice cream. (Which is a seperate, important fallacy, reversed causation).

...BOth, however, are incorrect. What happens...is that both take place in the SUMMER. It's also known as the third variable fallacy.

Twilight took a deep breath and softened her features. “Sorry, I get kind of worked up over my pride and joy.”

Twilight is definitely a "PC Master Race" type of pony isn't she?

7563522 Think their technology is somewhat behind ours. Maybe the abundance of magic reduces the demand for technology there.

7563808 I mean, I kinda started suspecting that somewhere near the end, but I still thought it could stand to be a bit clearer. And wasn't the episode supposed to be about Rainbow Dash's ego anyway? Somehow I imagine Rainbow would still find things to brag about even without saving ponies from horrific accidents.

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