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Alyssa Hartwick


These battle scars, don’t look like they’re fading ,Don’t look like they’re ever going away. They ain't never gonna change. These battle scars.....

Comments ( 23 )

Im interested in seeing how you develop the story. Keep up your good work.

Lots of spellies! I think the chapter title means trauma?:derpytongue2:

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Awesome start! Kinda reminds me of Elfin Lied.

As your editor, I am here to inform you Editor is spelled Editor, not editer. :twilightblush:

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You just explained why i need an editer:trollestia::derpytongue2:

Great first chapter I hope you continue the story:moustache:

That was good, you have me interested you should continue this when you can.

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This story, this story is very good it reminds me of my favorite book, the book that got me into reading in the first place 'Maximum Ride' it have to same basic concept, the main characters are on the run from those that created them because those that created them also want to harm them.

So we have our villain for the story. Well at least the person out heroes will be fighting anyway. Keep it up.

Wow... Just wow... Gruesome story... I love it! :pinkiecrazy:

Ah haven't had meself a good dark story in AGES. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm in I'm following this is way to good to pass up

Mmmhhh... description sounds promising...:moustache:

This is like my story, where an evil alicorn king named Argentum has all 'Half-Bloods' killed. Two zebra-pegasi sibling are taken to The Zebralands, under the rule of Zanise who takes them in happily. Then they go on an adventure being hunted and trying to save Princess Aurum, who was imprisoned. They get the help of Silverleaf, son of Argentum; and Silent Song, Silverleaf's girlfriend who was adopted by the buffalo and knows very little Equish.

So far? I like it! Keep it up!

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