This story is a sequel to Loveliest of Trees (Old)
After the musical showcase and Fall Formal, Twilight has to contemplate returning back to Equestria. Her time in this world has been fun. Finding Coppermane's human counterpart, watching him and Fluttershy fall in love all over again, and spending time with her friends has been amazing, but she has duties back home, and she can't stay here forever.
There's just one problem. One thing is keeping her here. Her relationship with Flash Sentry.
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FlashLight ships? Here!? DISHONORABLY DISCHARGED!!!!
My advice, just ignore all the downvotes from the haters and consider them an upvote. Nice job.
Why is this story so hated? This story is good.
Maybe the hate is because this is another romance fic where pony Twilight and human Flash are forced to stay apart.
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7048650 Your guesses are as good as mine
At least some people like it.
People just really don't like Flash Sentry
Otherwise, awesome story!
7048650 Quite the opposite, actually. The reason is most likely because this is a Flash x Twilight story, and Flash Sentry is...not well-liked among the fandom.
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A real shame... Flash is interesting.
Sure, not "Derpy" interesting, but still interesting in his own way. Too bad the fandom doesn't give him the same chance they gave Sombra...
I really liked this, Nordryd! It was very well written, with just the right amount of detail for each scene! Not to mention the feelz! This story was really cute
. Although, it makes me question why it got so many downvotes. Yes, it's not perfect, as almost no one's fics are, but why are people so negitive? I guess I can understand because of a hate for Flash... but that's no justified reason to downvote a story, especially one that can make a dislikable character work. Yet, I do have to admit you didn't add much to his personality to really flesh him out as an individual, but Flash was still heart-felt.
Now, uhh, just a little nitpicking on this:
-I noticed that you have multiple spaces after each period. I believe there's only supposed to be one. There's probably a few more mistakes that I missed, but this one stood out to me the most;
You're still writing in the past tense, so I think this has to be "It had been."
Also, I don't know if you usually do it, but why do you have those bold-headed scene cuts? A simple page break will do—the reader doesn't have to know when or where they are; they'll hopefully figure it out as they read.
And, what princess duties are you referring to? Maybe I'm just blanking, but Twilight seems free most of the time.
All in all, in my opinion, a pretty good, cute romance story
Theses were just some suggestions that could help you improve.
Oh, and thx for playing my blog game:D
7210676 First off, thank you so much for your review! I'm so glad you liked it. I'm not sure why it's getting so many dislikes. Your guess is as good as mine.
Also, the only reason this story exists is because I made a fatal mistake when writing another story, and I had to fix it before writing anything else. Another mistake I made is making all of my stories based off of each other. I like having a consistent story, but it forces people to start back at the beginning if they want to start.
Now onto the nitpicking. As far as the spacing goes, I was always taught that you need to double space after a period or colon. But I could be wrong. I guess you kind of have to eyeball it, because it does look a little odd on FIMFiction.
I've always done the bold text scene cuts. I'm just used to it. I should probably change that though. I can understand why someone would be taken out of the story because of it.
I guess I never really thought of what Twilight would be busy with. Honestly, I just wanted to get this story done and out of the way, and I think it kind of shows in some aspects.
As far as the past-tense verses present-tense stuff, I have a problem with eyeballing that. I'm not a writer by trade (I'm a computer science major), so these kind of things are still hard for me to discern. Usually, I say the sentences I write out loud to myself, and if it sounds alright, I'll write it in. I should work on that though.
Thanks again for your review, and I hope you like the rest of my stories. I'm guessing Amorous will be a little weird for you to read, right?
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Ahh, right
. And no problem. I'll take a look at ypu're others, though
. You're awesome!
Quite frankly, it saddens me to see a great story like this have so many downvotes and them overshadow the upvotes. So here, have a upvote for a good story. And this is coming from someone who's rather neutral on this pairing. Don't love it but I don't hate it either.
7210921 No offense but, you really don't know why you're getting so many downvotes? Well, if so, the reason is that there are some idiots out there who just hate FlashLight and anything to do with it. Others hate Flash Sentry and anything to do with him. Those guys just go around downvoting anything to do with Flash/FlashLight. Why? Your guess is good as mine. All I know is there is something about waifu-stealing.
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In regards to the spacing after a period (or colon, exclamation mark, or question mark) thing: Double spacing or single spacing is fine, though the latter has become much more common. What's more important than whether you double or single space is that you're consistent with it in the story.
I know this comment was from about 2 months ago but I did want to clear that up.
I'm quite surprised that out of all your stories, this one is the only one that has so many downvotes. Y'all who disliked this, screw you
:'( poor twi, poor flash, and Copper cameo :D, always there to cheer a friend 7up :)
:') heh. Y'know Twilight, you can just go back there! Easy enough!(I am sad though. Good luck!)
You made my waifu cry