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Scootaloo wasn't quite sure what she expected when she found a letter from her "secret admirer" asking to meet her after school, but it wasn't an invitation to the school dance. Nor was it spending Hearts and Hooves Day with Silver Spoon.

Prereading and editing by Formerly Committed, Jondor, and Timaeus.

Special thanks to bats and Formerly Committed for giving me the prompt this came from.

Art originally by Cuppae

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 117 )

New story? Read later! I can't read it now! Nooooooo!

This was again a delight to preread.

After a series of rough days, I needed something this fluffy cute to lighten my spirits.

Big Mac in drag, making out with Bulk Biceps …

Thank you, ZOMG. I really needed that image in my head. :rainbowderp:

I'm liking the story so far, and any great Silver Spoon story is guaranteed to have my attention. Anyway, I'm curious as to how Silver Spoon and Scootaloo's relationship will grow from here. Also, I'm predicting some tension between Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara. Anyway, excellent work as usual! :twilightsmile:

Pretty good. I spotted a couple things that bugged me, but still pretty good.

I look forward to more of this and those pretty fillies kissing.

Cute story, more than worth a like.
I can imagine them actually being like this when they're older.

Scootaloo has every right in the world to ask for time to judge her emotions about an unexpected confession. This is well written but absurd.

Great story, great start. Loving it. I'll add it to my group, I hope you'll continue with this regularly. :heart:

6926994 BUT I AM SO VERY IMPORTANT AND SO ARE MY WORDS!

Okay, enjoy later :P

6927070 Glad I could help! ^^

6927071 BulkMac (or, The Gun Show, as bats calls it) comes courtesy of bats himself. So, in his words: you're welcome.

6927083 Yaaaay!

6927085 Second part is going up this weekend ^^

6927491 That was actually my biggest worry: making them seem in character, but also showing a bit of the growing up change.

6927672 That's your opinion and I'm not going to argue it with you.

6928032 I probably should've said it's a two-chapter thing >.>

THIS IS MY FIRST EVER PONY SHIP. I APPROVE.

I would just like to say, I loved this fic, even before it was popular enough to be featured.
Just call me a bit more ahead of the curve than most... :scootangel:

EDIT: Meh, obviously the two downmarks to this comment didn't pay any mind to my username...

Well that was adorable. Can't wait for the next instalment.

Even though I'm a big SilverBell fan, this is too good to pass up.

This looks like it's going to be pretty good. I'm enjoying it so far.

Looks like you have a small inconsistency though. Scoots left her shake on the table with DT.

She turned to trot toward the door, leaving her unfinished milkshake on the table.

With a nervous grin, she reached up and scratched the back of her head with the edge of her plastic cup.

Looking forward to more soon. :twilightsmile:

6929790 I mean this in the nicest possible way:

Spelling out the fact that you spew sarcasm at every turn doesn't excuse pretentiousness.

Feel like you could have used at least one character who supported Scoots in taking some time to think about this. I mean, yeah, she could have phrased it better, but this isn't something you want to handle on impulse. Teenagers are not exactly known for having a good gut instinct.

Regardless, I enjoy what you have so far, and look forward to the conclusion.

6930623 Bringing out the hipster argument when this fic is less than a few days old? Check.

A statement that paints you as being in an elitist minority, with the majority being implied to be uneducated illiterates simply because a combination of circumstances unknown to you prevented this fic from falling into their laps? Check.

That elitist minority boiling down to 'people who follow ZOMG and had the time on their hands to read this thing without being late for work'? Check.

Regardless of intentions, your original comment reeks of pretentiousness for the above reasons. Yes, I'm aware these interpretations are probably wildly inaccurate. Doesn't change the fact that that's the vibe I got.

6930677 If you say so. Thanks, it's been fun.
BTW, I preferred you with the crown. The intimidating unicorn look is so jejune. :moustache:

6930711 And that brings it to one vote for, one vote against.

6930729 Please let me know which one wins. Go Democracy!!

6930736 Oh, I'm sure we'll inevitably cross paths again. You'll see for yourself.

6930740 I'm relishing the moment already. You bring the Chianti, I'll carry along the Ludo set. Fun fun fun!

“What I’m not going to deal with is her going through a roller coaster of emotions because you’re jerking her around until it’s convenient for you.”

I'm just going to point out that this is kind of a two-way street, and out-of-the-blue confessions tend to be a rollercoaster of emotions for the recipient as much as it is the deliverer.

Receiving a confession tends to be a lot of pressure, especially for friends that have known each other for a while. It's not really fair for Diamond to be so impatient with Scootaloo, especially since Silver initiated the exchange. Silver should be cognizant of the fact that she kind of dumped something big on Scootaloo's head almost out of nowhere, and give her some room to get her feelings in order.

It's gonna be a momentary period of agony during which Scootaloo struggles to stay true to her feelings while treating Silver Spoon's with respect and care, whereas Silver Spoon is forced to contend with not knowing where Scootaloo's feelings lie. But that's just a natural part of the exchange. And that's the scenario you set up for yourself and your potential love interest when you make a sudden, unexpected confession.

As it is, all of Scootaloo's friends are dumping almost all the responsibility for the emotional burden onto Scootaloo, and that's really not very fair. Diamond and Silver have a history of selfishness that they're still probably learning to overcome, so I'm willing to pass this off as being true to their characterization. As for the remaining Crusaders... I can't really say. They're young, I guess?

Other than that, the writing is strong and the characterization is stellar. Looking forward to more.

good god i can't get over how adorable this is

I love that Silver Spoon is the tease and Scootaloo is the one getting flustered all the time. But she's so wonderfully out of her element, and it's pure comedy gold.

6931272 I'm actually glad someone noticed that. I wanted to kinda harken back to how Silver used to tease, but have it change from malicious intent to a more flirting deal. Seemed rather fitting that she'd know how to get under Scootaloo's skin in that regard after so many years of doing so in another fashion.

Comment posted by Carapace deleted Feb 13th, 2016

6931305 6931304 it's an interesting approach. I have to say, the dichotomy of her sudden confidence compared to her initial anxiety throughout her confession stage is a little jarring; it's a pretty daring card to play on the first date, and her sudden burst of charisma is a pretty stark contrast to her initial meekness.

But at the same time, it's absolutely sublime; I almost get the sense that, now that she's out of the confession stage, she feels like she's out of danger, back in control, like the ball's in her court and she can dictate the odds. That, plus the fact that she's in a familiar environment in the fanciest Prench restaurant in town, means she's comfortable and confident enough to play Scootaloo like a fiddle.

...Poor Scootaloo has no idea what she's getting herself into, does she? Silver Spoon is gonna squeeze as many moments of embarrassed adorableness she possibly can out of the girl. :rainbowlaugh:

6931323 It is, but that's a function of the story being told from Scootaloo's perspective, I think. Had I written it from Silver Spoon's, I would've likely shown her feeling a sense of euphoria at having got the weight off her chest, to the point that she just went with whatever felt right to her.

But I can't complain too much. I was way too fun writing Scoots flirting and then finding that Silver could fluster her just as easy. Fun all around.

Kix

Interesting story, and cute. Never thought of Silverloo or Sweetie Tiara before.

Far be it from her to pass up a free meal paid for by a pretty filly, especially one that tasted so good.

The filly or the meal? :trollestia:

Besides, if Rainbow could be all cutesy and bring Twilight chocolates and read with her on Hearts and Hooves Day

I approve! :rainbowkiss: :heart: :twilightsmile:

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Never seen this ship...LOVED IT :heart:

Far be it from her to pass up a free meal paid for by a pretty filly, especially one that tasted so good.

The meal or the filly? :trollestia:

If Scoots is smart she won't destroy the film. She'll take it and keep the pics for herself or SS. If the relationship goes well it would make a great anniversary present. Nobody wants others to have those pics but it's nice to be able to keep those memories for themselves. :twilightsmile:

I still prefer Silverbelle.

But dang, this story was just so sweet. I love it.

Adorable fic. Keep up the good work. :scootangel:

Pomme de Terre, this is Scootaloo.

:rainbowlaugh: You named him potato?

6932281 I was wondering when someone would notice.

That was the sweetest story I have read in a while:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss: a real treat.:heart:

Very sweet, and if anypony can catch Rainbow Dash it is Scootaloo.

Wow I thought Diamond and Belle would hit it off

But scoot and silver awwwwwwww thats so cute:raritystarry::raritystarry::pinkiehappy:

Good Job ZOMG

Awww Scootaboo.

Don't mind me, my pancreas just exploded from the levels of sugar in this sweet story.

This was an enjoyable story; it was funny, it was cute, and it really had some good and believable romance.

I give this six out of five Scootaangles.
:scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

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