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Confound these wretched equines! For every one I fling away, a dozen more vex me!


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Broken promises, lost tickets, and a looming storm threaten Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon's perfect plan for Nightmare Night, but that doesn't stop them from picking on the one filly having a worse night than them: Scootaloo.

My entry for Diamond Refinery #3. Be sure to check out the ever-awesome Yukito's silly little story as well.

Edited by Mager Blutooth and Telaros

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All my yes! Great read and also probably one the very few going to be updated of uploaded today.

Oh I love today (kinda have to in the end).

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Thanks. I expect we'll get our share of stories uploaded today though. With a new season in swing, people are going to have pony on the brain :pinkiehappy: Mo' pony! :yay:

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I would like that especially on my birthday

Hah, nice work.

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not to mention it's the end of the semester for many (that's what's keeping me from writing at the moment =P)

Anyways, nice work on this story. I enjoyed it a lot. Not quite on par with An Earth Pony Thing, but you still get an upvote, at the very least ;)

great story, it makes me want to strangle daimond tiara with her own esophagus even more then usualy. but great story.

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Silly people with their priorities in the correct order!

Thanks. AEPT has more Alula, so naturally it is better. Best background filly makes everything better. Well, that and I really wanted people to rethink what the earth pony gift might mean to them, rather than what we think it'd mean to us, so I put a lot of time into polishing it. :scootangel:

I can only guess this was inspired by the infamous (and yet to be aired) episode5: "Flight to The Finish"?:facehoof:

Silver Spoon: My life is over. Everypony hates me!:fluttercry::flutterrage:

I haven't read this yet. Fic's starring DT and SS as token bullies don't usually grab me (there's plenty of that in canon) but I love your other works so I may give this a shot.

If you tell me that I should read it, and that I will enjoy it, I'll believe you.:twilightsheepish:

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Heh. It's supposed to make you want to strangle her slightly less than normal. :fluttercry: Only slightly though. And thanks :yay:

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Well, you know I don't do the token thing. They mess with Scootaloo because that's what they canonically do and because it relates to the plot. I think you'll enjoy it. In fact, I think you'll adore Silver Spoon in this.

And nope, not inspired by Flight to the Finish. I wrote this to support Telaros and the work he puts into his Diamond Refinery contests. Had a rough idea of the lost tickets, and then it took about a week to fill in the details enough for it to be a workable story. Worked on it right to the contest deadline. This here's a more polished version.

I avoid spoilers for the most part, ever since last season when the HUB spoiled so much. These days, tend to avoid even the synopsis for episodes. FttF is the only one of those I've read for this season. I did consider not releasing it until next week to coincide with that and a comment of "Today seemed like a good day to post a fic of DT and Spoon bullying Scootaloo", but cover art came in yesterday, so I said screw it. :raritywink:

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I'm glad you did say "screw it" and I love the cover art. Silver Spoon makes best Sherclop Holmes.:twilightsmile:

And I think it was a wise decision to upload now. I am dreading the episode but at the same time, I am looking forward to seeing Silver Spoon again and glad she is not only mimicking DT. To be a bully (and equal villain) in her own right is SOMETHING besides being DT's shadow. It gives her depth and personality. One we can redeem later despite the nasty things she says, even if season4 ends with no canonical redemption for SS/DT. But I am hopeing for the best.:twilightsheepish:

So I will take your recommendation because I know you always instil lots of personality into these two. And they are secretly working for The Agency so they have to keep up appearances, do they not (wink wink)?:scootangel:

This... might be the first DT and SS story I've actually read in the several months I've been on this site... Huh.
If the rest of them are half as good as this one, I should really catch up on those. :rainbowderp:

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There's plenty of good ones for all sorts of tastes, from silly comedy to romance to redemption. Check out The Diamond Cutters and/or Silver Spoon groups for an easy way to find 'em :scootangel:

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Thanks. If my "Read Later" list wasn't already close to 200 stories I'd probably do that. :twilightblush:

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Yeah, I'm both looking forward to that episode (best pony, best friend, and CMC) and dreading the usual blind hate toward the terrible twosome that will go with it.

I'm really hoping that, rather than having a karmic moment or an adult punish the TT, they'll have Scootaloo do something so awesome that the terrible twosome will apologize on their own. Just a little something to make it clear they aren't heartless little demons. And then say something mean right afterwards, of course. Got to preserve the status quo for the best role players in the show :scootangel:

Hopefully we'll get an episode where she plays the more prominent role, like DT in Call of the Cutie, in the future as well.

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I agree. We can only dream of an episode focusing on or around Silver Spoon as much as Ponyville Confidential focused on DT. But it shouldn't bee too much to ask for one episode in 4 seasons where Silver plays a vital part to the plot instead of just being a tagalong.

Sadly the blog I opened for Silver Spoon's Ghost is getting no attention. And it was the perfect time of the season to launch it. But no one seems to care to offer asks to her or Scrooged Diamond. So if the dearly departed Silver Spoon is to find redemption and rest, it's up to you or I to write it.:twilightsheepish:

When I first read her tragic scene I couldn't sleep that night. I mean unlike Jacob Marley Silver Spoon's spirit haunted the entire story. She affected the whole town and we don't even know how or in what disaster she lost her life. So I couldn't sleep thinking how lonely and tortured her spirit was, her afterlife basically mirroring her life before she died, being constantly reminded of her plight as I read each chapter. That's how much I love Silver Spoon and DT nowadays.:pinkiecrazy:

3598064 i'm sorry but i tend to believe that one nice action doesn't simpyl wash away a thousand mean ones so quickly. daimond gave scootaloo the tickets, after she made what was already an incredibly difficult night for scootaloo infinetly worse . making fun of every single detail she could find.

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Yup, I'd agree with that. The protagonists aren't heroes here. This story isn't meant to be redemptive or to whitewash DT. Or Spoon, for that matter.

Had this been in the show, well, it'd have followed Scootaloo and Dash, not DT and Spoon. But that aside, the karmic moment for DT and Spoon would have been the involuntary loss of the tickets. Here, DT voluntarily hands them over, the last thing she had left to look forward to, and Silver Spoon doesn't have a problem with it because she understands why her friend did it. The end result is the same: Tickets go to Scootaloo and Dash and the terrible twosome don't learn anything. The difference is that it happened because of empathy, not happenstance.

Hence why I was hoping for slightly less hate, rather than slightly more :raritywink:

But regardless, I'm happy you enjoyed the story. And I'd also like to say that I appreciate that you gave a story about a character you dislike a fair chance. Props to you. :scootangel:

I hate Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon with a passion. Such worthless, and pathetic characters. I came in this only, because you put Scootaloo in the description. Now, only twice have I not completely hated DT. I respected and sorta felt okay with her Fallout Equestria cameo. And here I feel like she is still an incredible pain in the ass, but a little, just a tiny bit of an okay character. It was quite an ordeal just trying to make it to the end of this Chapter. I still hate DT with a passion, and I sorta hate you for making something with DT.
My experiance 4/10, 100% biased based off one character that was featured in it.... but ... it was... an okayish... nice j... errrrrrr.. I didn't like this story, but *insert compliment to author here*

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Taking into account the depth of your dislike of DT, I'll consider that a win. :pinkiehappy: And someday, I'll finish writing my Feather Dawn story and provide you with what will hopefully be an enjoyable, Scootaloo-focused story to read :scootangel:

"It's no wonder Scootaloo is such a loser, if that's who she idolizes," Silver Spoon said, walking up to the window.

"I know, right? Pathetic." Diamond rolled her eyes. "So glad we're much smarter than that."

Okay I know I'm a bad pony for this but I agree with Silver Spoon. Dash is NO ROLE MODEL. she is an athlete and a hero of the mane6 but she Is also conceited, egocentric, shallow, selfish, irresponsible, and lazy.

no I don't like Dash much and seeing her go all fangasm with Daring this last Saturday made me sick. I don't like canon Scoots either because she is very much like Dash.

Dash is a bitch. there I said it.:trixieshiftright:

"Do you like it? I stopped by the Cube and Pinkie, you know, the crazy-excited clerk, gave it to me. It blows bubbles, see?" Silver Spoon demonstrated. "Pretty cool, huh?"

I guess "The Cube" is valley-filly speak for Sugar Cube Corner? Might want to make that more clear.:twilightsheepish:

3597833 Happy Birthday! :D

Spoon looked at the dresses laying haphazardly on the floor. "And just tossed your suit on the floor?" Diamond nodded. "Is anything else missing?

Diamond looked around the room, her eyes growing wide at the empty corner. "The basket for mayor's charity drive. I must have tossed it into the basket."

Silver put her pipe in her mouth and blew several bubbles. "Then we shall pick up the trail there. Come, Miss Adler, the game is ahoof."

You were right Mudpony.. I already LOVE this Silver Spoon.:pinkiehappy:

One thing though. I couldn't tell if Allula or Silver was more "touchy feely" (hugs and kisses) with Diamond.:twilightsheepish:

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I figure people can make the connection due to Pinkie working there. Though if they don't, it doesn't matter, since the location is not important. It's just a little show tie-in, to use Pinkie's bubble pipe.

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For you and your silver-framed shipping goggles, both is an acceptable answer :scootangel:

3600715 Yeah, but Dashie did try her best though. Sadly she may have just not taken her role and her promise to Scoots as seriously as she should of. I love this story. It says so much about Scootaloo and Dash, we see such a resolute Scoots that puts her on such a high pedestal in that child mind of hers that she fails to acknowledge some of Dash's faults. In her eyes, Dash is not just her idol anymore, but her big sister. And her bestest big sister would never break a promise she made with Scoots, never!

...Right?

Then we have Diamond Tiara, gets so worked up over showing off her pretty costume for her Dad. Dad doesn't even seem to notice it. It was starting to look like such a good day for her too.

And Silver Spoon, what can I say except she was most amazingly adorable in this story. Certainly any Silver Spoon fan would be raving at the awesome that is Silver Spoon in this story. Sure, they still say a few things based on the stubborn actions of one orange filly they can't seem to comprehend would do the things she's doing when she could of been enjoying the rest of the night, but that's just them. It isn't like they hate her, they just think she's dumb for being so hung up on someone they can see as being not such a great role model.

This story really stops to look at the characters and how they interact with each other, how they'd see things on a more ground level through their eyes that let us judge them by their actions. So much is going on behind the scenes and building up to a crescendo of events that lead the reader to a rather grande finale that I think will please anyone who truly loves the show. It doesn't try to force your opinion one way or the other on any of these 3 characters or Dash. It just tells a tale that occurred during one faithful Nightmare Night.

So anyone out there should dive right in and simply enjoy it for what it is. An unbiased look at what life can be like in Equestria, seen through the eyes of young fillies, and just how much we as children take the word of people we trust so close to heart. We don't always understand or ever realize the things they go through for our happiness till later in life when one is old enough to truly reflect on them.

I have mixed feelings about this.:unsuresweetie:

On one Hoof I loved Fetlock Spoons and Irene Tiara's little mystery caper.:twistnerd:

Didn't care for the cruelty of either filly or the fact that they beat Sccots up for the tcikets.:scootangel:

Oh and I could just HEAR Dashes voice as she bragged and overused the word AWESOME. It was SO WELL DEFINED it almost made my ears bleed. I don't hate her but sometimes I cant stand that mare!:twilightangry2:

I loved how DT did the right thing in the end and Silver Spoon was the brains that figured out the track suit was being worn by Scoots (I figured that out as soon as I heard she was dressed as Spitfire)

Silver Spoon knows full well DT was being nice because she knew the story behind DT's first costume (wich was sad to).
It's like Agent S said to Agent D in "Spies Like Us"
Silver Spoon: "You can fool everypony else, even yourself. But you can't fool me.":trixieshiftright:

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Thanks.

Didn't care for the cruelty of either filly or the fact that they beat Sccots up for the tcikets

I'd go with wrestled over beat up. No actual blows. Mostly just trying to pin her down so they can get the tickets. But you are right that they are a bit crueler than I'd normally see them being, in that they went out of their way to bother Scootaloo when they had more important things to do. I plead needs of the story for that slight liberty though :scootangel:

(I figured that out as soon as I heard she was dressed as Spitfire)

Someone's smarter than a 5th grader! (Or whatever grade they are in :rainbowlaugh:).

Silver Spoon: "You can fool everypony else, even yourself. But you can't fool me."

Someone really loves this quote :pinkiecrazy:

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Not saying Scoots is stupid for having somepony she looks up to and I didn't read the full thing when I made that comment. I make them as I go along

Things didn't go according to plan and like Twilight Sparkle last year, nopny got her new costume but I think it was so much better then the CEO idea.

And Silver Spoon, what can I say except she was most amazingly adorable in this story. Certainly any Silver Spoon fan would be raving at the awesome that is Silver Spoon in this story. Sure, they still say a few things based on the stubborn actions of one orange filly they can't seem to comprehend would do the things she's doing when she could of been enjoying the rest of the night, but that's just them. It isn't like they hate her, they just think she's dumb for being so hung up on someone they can see as being not such a great role model.

That was the consensus of DT reguarding Scoots till she realized she did the same with hr own father.

And no argument about how supremely awesomely AWESOME Silver Spoon was tonight (squee):twilightsmile:

This story really stops to look at the characters and how they interact with each other, how they'd see things on a more ground level through their eyes that let us judge them by their actions. So much is going on behind the scenes and building up to a crescendo of events that lead the reader to a rather grande finale that I think will please anyone who truly loves the show. It doesn't try to force your opinion one way or the other on any of these 3 characters or Dash. It just tells a tale that occurred during one faithful Nightmare Night.

So anyone out there should dive right in and simply enjoy it for what it is. An unbiased look at what life can be like in Equestria, seen through the eyes of young fillies, and just how much we as children take the word of people we trust so close to heart. We don't always understand or ever realize the things they go through for our happiness till later in life when one is old enough to truly reflect on them.

Again no argument here. It was a great PRE-redemption fic for DT and SS. Classic SS and DT antagonism but not villainy. Just kids who don't know how to cope with their own insecurities accept to make somepony feel worse. And ultimately they did the right thing. DT bought the tickets. they were hers to give away, but Silver could have put up a fuss. Her silence speaks volumes of her inner compassion just as loudly as DT's half hearted gesture.

i'm sure Scoots knows it to. she just CAN'T be THAT dense.:raritywink:

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Things didn't go according to plan and like Twilight Sparkle last year, nopny got her new costume but I think it was so much better then the CEO idea.

I think the cover art makes it clear how adorable her costume is. I just wanted something from about the same period, and it turned out way cuter than I expected. That goes for both their costumes, actually. Yay for GashibokA's awesomeness.

Oh I forgot how it was ALSO nice that they chose to attend Allula's party. They new how excited she was and they could have gone home and ate candy instead of dealing with her.

Oh and Silver was brilliant getting a toothbrush to offer NMM ha ha ha :rainbowlaugh:

and the Marey Poppins running (or galloping) gag was priceless.:scootangel:

3600988 I couldn't hold in my laughter at that Silver Spoon scene. That was delivered perfectly. I wasn't ready for it and shot a burst of laughter throughout the house. It was a tad embarrassing when people came in to see what had me, who almost never laughs, let out a quick laugh like that.

Alula scene was very sad. I can only imagine how broken hearted she was inside when she was turned down. Poor Alula.

And yeah, I know how that is, commenting as you go, I just wanted to make sure you didn't miss out on this story because Silver and the gang were all awesome.

And no, while I did cringe at the wrestling Scootaloo down, I didn't get the feel they were fighting, and I at least thing Scootaloo is a tough filly, not as week as Season 3 tried to make her out to be. But yeah, 2v1 was so not cool. But it sure did add to the feels. Scoots just made me wanna hug my monitor with what she said next.

Great story. And no this was released way back in October before any leak titles were announced or revealed for S4. It was just a coincidence is all. This story is in no way influenced by S4 and it's upcoming Flight to the Finish episode. Which you know by now. I'd recommend checking out the Refinery sometime. Good stuff in there.

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But they DID attend Allula's party afterall which also shows that they can be very thoughtful, even if it wasnt what they had planned. And DT made sure not to make a promise she couldn't keep when Allula offered.

and is the Diamond Refinery another group?

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your right. to say they beat her up is padding the truth and making them look worse, and that certainly isn't my desire. (slaps myself):pinkiecrazy:

It's just more physical then they usually are but I can kina understand. After being teased all night she wasn't just going to let them into her suit without a fight.:scootangel:

3601073 Well, that's very spoilery and I don't like posting too many spoilers in the comments so I avoided mentioning that, but yes that ending is most adorable.

And no the Diamond Refinery is the name of the Contests I throw within the Diamond Cutters, for the Diamond Cutters, and any able and willing authors who like to challenge themselves and compete for prizes.

There have been 3 so far, you can find them all in the story folder of the same name in the Diamond Cutters group. Or just hover over my name and click stories. All 3 are there.

Comment posted by ServingSpoon deleted May 7th, 2016

3601233 text here[/.spoiler]
Remove the period and that's how you disguise your text.

And no biggie, I myself have learned not to look at comments lest I risk the story endings told to me.

This needs more thumbs ups...

:rainbowkiss:

I loved this. This is an excellent Diamond Tiara story. Most Deets fans seem to think that everything needs to be about her "redemption" or "learning a lesson". Sometimes it's nice to just read about the good old snarky little rich girl we know and love. At least I love her for it, most seem to despise her for it. Wutevz.

Her giving the tickets out of what seems to be a moment of empathy shows us that she's a person inside just like everyone else. Obviously she feels more entitled and lifts herself onto a pedestal because let's face it, she really is.

I had to look up Alula :rainbowlaugh:
Never heard of her before.

I'm not sure if you care to hear about my narrative complaints, but aside from those I give this cute little fic a 10/10.

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Good to know I'm not the only one who enjoys good ol' slice of life with the gals. Although given how people seem to enjoy the story, looks like we're both not the only ones. ;)

I had to look up Alula :rainbowlaugh:
Never heard of her before.

For shame! Alula is best background filly!

I'm not sure if you care to hear about my narrative complaints, but aside from those I give this cute little fic a 10/10.

It is easier to improve when you know where you're screwing up, so yup. Just send me a note if it is a long list :scootangel:

Such cover
Such story
I love it

This has been sitting in my 'Read Later' tab forever. Glad I was able to finally set aside some time to start going through these stories.

A very cute story. Silver Spoon, in particular, was a delight.

I look forward to more of your work (some of it is probably waiting in my 'Read Later' tab).

Hat

Great story! I was really pleased I read it. I most enjoyed the depth of character you showed of the DT duo and how you showed it.

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Thanks. I enjoyed writing it. Slice of Life with the Terrible Twosome is a lot of fun.

This. Was. AMAZING!!!!!
I haven't read a good Nightmare Night fic in a forever and a half, and few bronies seem to love Diamond Tiara as much as she deserves. (Not the "recut" Diamond, but the regular, original bossy little filly.) It's awesome to read a story where she gets to be herself rather than be punished or have it revealed that Silver Spoon didn't really like being her friend. Your fic was cute, accurate, and had so many excellent little touches, like Twilight pointing out that Marey Poppins was a book series, or the excellent puns in "Salneightion Army" or "Forelock Holmes".

I really admire the depth you went into with Scootaloo's mother and how Scoots couldn't afford to buy her own costumes, and especially the subtle parallel between Diamond wearing a CEO costume to impress her dad, who couldn't take her trick-or-treating, and Scootaloo wearing a Wonderbolts costume to impress Rainbow Dash, who also couldn't take her trick or treating.

All in all, one of the finer works of fanfiction! :pinkiehappy:

7978548 Thanks. One of my goals when I wrote this was to show that you could write a story people enjoy with antagonists as the protagonists without whitewashing or mostly ignoring their faults. And that this story, one about DT being a jerk, engaged in the very activities that made her so hated, was well received is one of the accomplishments I'm most proud of on the site. I also think it reflects well on FIMFic's readers, who gave the story a chance rather than just blindly hating.

And credit where credit is due, "Fetlock Holmes" I borrowed from Bad Horse's excellent The Magician and the Detective.

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