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Captain Unstoppable


"When you have eliminated the impossible, whatever remains, however improbable, must be the truth." Sherlock Holmes

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There are not many things that Rainbow Dash can't withstand. She can take on dragons and monsters all day long, but when it comes to the bitter cold she has met her match. In search of shelter from the cold, she ends up spending the night at the Apple's. But with Granny and Bloom in Appleosssa, and Applejack going to Manehatten in attempt to sell some apple goods, she ends up all alone with Big Mac.

What could possibly go wrong?

Submission to the MacDash Community contest. Not sure if I am following any of the rules, but MacDash.

Thank you to Arbarano and WolfGirl214 for all the edits!

Special thanks also goes to The Masked Ferret for the parts she helped write! Or actually did write...

Picture belongs to grethzy Its just so damn cute!

This is also a Christmas gift for Jake the Army Guy and KarmaDash. Wish I had time to write you both an individual story, but have a Merry Christmas, and enjoy so MacDash!

Featured 12/26/15

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Comments ( 111 )

This...This is glorious! Well done! 10/10

Please write a sequel where A.J comes home and finds them snuggled up together.

I can imagine the look on her face hahaha.

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"I see you two got a might bit cozy while I was away."

Okay, this was really sweet and funny at the same time! My favourite kinds of stories! :pinkiehappy:

Great job, but one part is bugging me a little:

“Do ya mind bein’ so close? Just easier fer me ta read the words,”

“Ye- yeah! Just don’t block my light is all.”

This implies that she does mind him being close and that he should scoot away.

But that's a minor nitpick. A great read, will read again! :pinkiehappy:

6768318 There is a sequel in the works

This is so good, I almost don't know what to say.

“Shut up and snuggle me.”

This however, might be my favorite line of all MacDash-related stories.

Who's corruptin' whom, I wonder?

Sweet! I like how you characterized Rainbow and Mac.

“Reckon magic and flyin’ are still out of the realm of possibility fer me,”

Actually remember the indecent in season 5 episode 13? You turned into an alicorn.
~Fluttershy

Just had to do something with this pic, didn't you? :p

Now write up the following morning.

My new favorite ship. Well done, my friend.

:eeyup: :rainbowkiss:

Dash had to bite her lip to keep from laughing, he looked so off with those small glaces. "Glasses"

Feeling her stir, Mac looked down into her gawp with a simple smile. "At first I thought gawp was a typo, I had to look it up. Well I'll be, its a real word. Well you learn a little every day."

I like this story. It's simple and sweet. All the characters personality's were kept cannon. Bravo on that. The story wasn't implausible or forced, so it had a nice flow. I thought it could have used a spot were she found herself checking out his rump rather than her checking out his muscles, but oh well.

This is the first time seeing these two put together, and I must congratulate you for making it both real and plausible. If you decide to expand this story, then I will defiantly be a reader. It would be interesting to see the friction that would develop between AJ and Dash, as these two's relationship grew. A very interesting dynamic indeed.

Great job writing this fic, I enjoyed it. oh and one more thing, happy early New Years :heart:

New favorite MacDash fic right here, awesome job! Thanks for a cute story!

Loved the story, no quick clop just a blossoming relationship well done.

However; you would not dump water on a fire in the middle of the winter with a likely blizzard coming on. You would bank it, that is cover the leftover logs with a layer of ash so that they will slowly keep burning all night adding a little heat to the house and leaving hot coals for the morning and a fast start up for the next day. I know picky, picky , picky. keep up the good work.

It was pretty adorable and I enjoyed it. Dash's gradual descent into infatuation was great.
But, for being a 'real stallion' Mac sure doesn't read like one.

Dash just grinned at the trembling stallion. She would have to save that mental image for later; she could make the strongest stallion in Ponyville tremble before her.

Ya lost me.

A few things just happened......First off i think my heart just exploded.....and secondly i am now feeling an overwhelming urge to scream PLEASE give me more of that wonderful universe!

[MUTUAL FEELINGS INTENSIFY]
SO GOOD!!!

Most of it was basic knowledge, about things like how their wings were very sensitive

I get the feeling that Big Mac's going to explore that in the sequel :rainbowlaugh:

Rainbow Dash does not ask for snuggles, she kicks your doors off the hinges and demands snuggles. :rainbowlaugh:

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6771323 I am writing a sequel to this story, and I hope to have it done by the 31st. While I will still be in this universe, it's a different story. It was the original idea.

6769713 Eeyup

6771285 He is still a stallion's stallion, but any real stallion will tell you, Hell hath no wrath as an angered mare

6771465 So it still will be MacDash comedy/romance with the base idea of this fic, only expanded beyond one-shot?

6771516 :applejackunsure:
I don't think it's what me and the rest of the readers of this story had in mind when screaming "sequel/continuation".
But ok, we'll see what comes out of this.

6771521 No need to fear, they will still show up

6771532 I don't doubt that. It's just that they, nor their relationship probably won't be the main focus of that story, and I presume, most of us wanted to be just that.
I'm not pressing you to do anything, it's just how I see it.

Preety funny read, and RD's thoughts seemed to fit her personality.

Good pacing. Not rushed, but fast enough to keep the reader hooked and lead to something endearing at the end of this short story.

That was a lot of fun, great story Captain.

lovely story. i like how your ran with dash's speed and slow big mac seems. I like seeing characters in a new light and you did that here. merry christmas to you too and thank you for sharing you work!

There needs to be more to this!!! Its so wonderfully done. Granted was abit fast, but then again as it said, Dash does do things fast. This was sweet and a very enjoyable read.

A very cute composition. There was a nice balance between the thoughts and feelings of both Dash and Mac -- a facet that really added to the story and just made it a nice - and believable - experience.

And then AJ arrives home earlier than expected, finds them in bed together and the Apple Family gets some brand new awesome Pegasus Down Pillows. As well as a new apple tree planted over a mound of dirt that appeared during the winter.

Not a ship you see often.

Adorable. Up and down and side to side adorable. Flustered Dash is best Dash.

We need more of this ship, stat. Authors, do please get on that.

Really enjoyable and well written story.
Looking forward to an eventual sequel, if there is any.

This was adorable!!

When Rainbow wanted to, she could look cuter than any filly.

I couldn't agree more, Mac :raritywink:

:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: out of :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: FAVE!

Well, that was adorable :rainbowkiss:

“Shut up and snuggle me.”

I lost it there. Rainbow certainly knows what she wants.

See, this is a romantic fanfic. Not like those gay ass clopfics that keep spouting up. This right here is deserving of that Romantic tag. You did good Mr Unstoppable. You did damn good.

But where the hell did you even find a MacDash fanfic contest? I swear every time some author says they wrote a story for a contest, I think they're lying because I've NEVER found these contests. I'm not saying you're lying to us, not at all. I just don't get where these contests are found on this site. It makes no sense to me.

Can you elaborate?

6772941 w00t! Now change that profile pic... ya heathen

I just loved this.......... No words to describe it:heart::heart::heart:

6772944 I didn't want a link. I just thought there was a page somewhere with different contests or something. Besides...

I'm not a great writer. I luck out with some of my stories, and I have trouble trying to write chapters for them because I barely get inspired to bother writing these days. Clopfics ruined my motivation to write much nowadays you see.

But it makes me happy to see stuff like yours take a space in the Featured Section to keep those damn clopfics from robbing a better story's spot.

So well done to you double, triple, quadruple, and a thousand times over.

I hope every person in this story's comments will help prevent clopfics from taking over completely. Merry Late Christmas to you, Captain. It's too late for me to be a good writer, but I hope you never falter for a long time to come.

You know you can turn off the clopfics right? You will save so much complain about it if you do that.

10/10
top kek.


But in all serious it was a grate story man awesome job.

a few typos and the like.
overall though, this was a very good story.

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