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Rumors and gossip can cause pain more severe than any crash. Big Mac sees first hand the effect it can have on ponies one night in the orchard when he stumbles across a distraught Rainbow Dash.

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good start waiting for more. like the take on Dash. Seems like most can't stand a strong independent mare without making her a fillyfooler.

Honestly I'm not sure about this. I'm up for more RainMac but the part with Rarity just rubs me the wrong way.

A good beginning. I can't wait to see the rest.

I like it!
Grammar could use some work (just a couple typos and such, here and there, nothing majorly contradictory) but this is fantastic for a debut story, nonetheless.
I enjoy your depiction of Rainbow.
I'll be tracking. :rainbowwild:

Wow! What a bunch of jerks!

Seriously, did that thing with Gabby Gums mean NOTHING to these ponies! Their happy to be spreading hurtful rumours despite them all shunning the CMC for doing the same thing! Hell, this isn't the same thing, calling somepony lazy isn't the same as calling them a lesbian! And out of everyone, only Mac doesn't believe it? I would've thought Applejack would know better with the whole "Element of Honesty" thing there! Wow!

And Rarity's scene...URG! I thought she was supposed to be good at reading pony's expressions and such, but she couldn't tell that this was the first time Rainbow was hearing this?! Jeez, I guess someone was hit by the dumbass ray!

Other then that, though, I really liked this one. And I liked the way you portrayed the two. Mac always being ready to lend a helpful ear to someone in need and Rainbow having been hurt by those, she thought, knew her better. (And being Loyalty, that must of sucked hearing that from Rarity...Urg!)

I also liked that the romance element to the story was subtle as them sucking face or snuggling by the end would've felt out of place. Maybe it's something for a sequel, I'd like to see the look on AJ's face if she saw that! That'd shut the town up, that's for sure! :rainbowlaugh:

Still, nine outta ten, would read again. :pinkiehappy:

EDIT:

Didn't realise this was to be a multi-chaptered story. In that case, I hope to read the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

In this universe, tomboys don't exist apparently.

A very nice fic so far, it's got a basis that seems to be really fitting and draws you in. As someone else said, I think you need to work on grammar and spelling a bit, cause there's enough mistakes that it gets to be distracting, but otherwise you have a strong piece so far and I really look forward to seeing what you have in store.

Please find an editor. A lot of style and grammar errors made reading this hard. Other than that, I kinda liked it.

Wow, look how far you've come in a matter of hours.
First FIM story and it's already being featured.
I tip my hat to you sir. :moustache:

Must say...I do hold some pride in being one of the first to read and like this story. What am I like? :trollestia:

6538245 Indeed; congratulations! Getting featured on your first story is amazing. :pinkiehappy: :raritydespair:

This pleases Her royal highness MacinDash, I can't wait to see what other chapters may bring :D

I can be of an editor to you.:moustache:

I can't upvote this until I see serious improvement in spelling and grammar. You can find plenty of people who would be interested in helping with that, myself included. I'll follow this anyway if only to see if you improve, because the concept here is intriguing.

In your descriptions,

gossip and cause

the and needs to be changed to can.

can't wait to see what you do with this:eeyup:

Interesting...let's see where this goes...and...tracking!
-ThePortalPonies

I can see multiple ways for this to end, and all of them please me. I will be following this closely.

But really, who hasn't made that assumption about Rainbow? I know I did for a long time, until I started shipping her with Mac.

congratulations on getting this on the front page! :pinkiehappy:

I'm likin' the build up of the story, Tracking! :twilightsmile:

:pinkiehappy: This pleases me :pinkiehappy:
Can't wait to see what happens next

Love this story so far, can't wait to see what happens next :twilightsmile:

I like this, very, very, much.

Please, do continue.

Also, when I read this, I like to think that Rainbow Dash is going to learn something like-

You can't always deal with things head on by yourself, you'll always need somepony to lean on at some point. Even the most independent pony will need somepony to lean on.

I love it, and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Shame on you Rarity. I expected better of you with that reasoning. Good thing Mac exists. :eeyup:

6545221 Big Mac is best stallion

Even though Thor is your first, i think it is a very good entry. I am looking forward to more. Fahr ans follow of course.

You ordered Dash to go to the doctor, she's allowed to drag you out to town Mac. Only fair.

This story is so much fun! Mac and Rainbow's banter flows so well and their friendship is really believable! And that's gonna make the eventual romance between the two all the better, when the connection is established so well!

This chapter was definitly worth the wait! Now to wait for the next! (And take your time, nothing's worse than a rushed project!)

:eeyup::heart::rainbowdetermined2: = Best Mac and Rainbow ship! :pinkiehappy:

Strangely, I think AJ would be the one that believes her. Just thinking she never listens to rumors.

Perfect chapter, great build up. Keep up the good work

I look forward the the drunken make-out session :D

Like the chapter, and I'm glad this story's up and running again.:twilightsmile:

Awww. So magnificent

This is good considering it's your first fanfiction, but please try proofreading or getting an editor because you're a bit shaky grammatically and there were one or two spelling mistakes you need to fix. Started off really well though, it just seemed a little rushed in the middle and end.

But the good thing was that you kept me interested! So well done since it's your first story!

Story's getting good, can't wait for next update to come out, keep it up:twilightsmile:

Real good pace and plot but some spelling and grammer was off a little. Nothing beats a good proofread by someone else. Great work, can't wait to read more!

This is really good! Keep up the good work!

Yay, another update :pinkiehappy:
Yet another great chapter has been presented to us to enjoy can't wait to see what happens next, I do hope it won't take too long for next chapter to come out but if it does we will wait :scootangel:

Keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

Just found this story. I enjoy it, but seeing its update schedule I wonder if you have any idea how many chapters there will be in the end?

7868896 Yes, the update schedule. I hope that I will not delayed in such a manner again, as far as chapters I do have a rough idea on how many there will be. I hope to have around ten but we will see how things go. Thank you for your kind words and taking the time.

I wonder if Dash will remember calling his eyes pretty or getting called pretty herself by morning more.

Huh? Can't say I was expecting Mac to actually get away from Dash. Usually we have the awkward, waking up together scene after a chapter of drinking. Well played sir. :moustache:

Another great chapter. Rainbow and Mac's banter is still as good as it was last chapter, and her trying to drink him under the table...yeah I think she put it best:

โ€œWell...shit,โ€ she mumbled as it finally sunk what she had gotten herself into.

:rainbowlaugh:

I look forward to the next chapter, I'll schedule some reading time for 2018! :rainbowlaugh:

Keep on keepin' on!

So, I spent almost a page proofreading this.



Then I hit Ctrl+R by accident.



The whole page reloads.



I am triggered.

Yay its back!

Happy to see that the Story is back. I am liking it so far.

Awww this was cute~

I read chapter one a few days after it came out and I loved it instantly. Almost fell out of my chair when I saw it was updated again. Fantastic story, believable & fitting characters, Wonderful new chapter, only a few misplaced words, no spelling errors. Keep the creativity flowing, my friend.

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