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New Canterlot

I can finally see...but not for long



Beauty was always easy for her to understand, but love is a completely different matter. A powerful attraction has come over her as Rarity explores her feelings and begins the adventure to discovering friendship, love, and everything in between! Every lady needs a knight to sweep her off her feet, right? That knight just so happens to wear flannel shirts and a cowboy hat!!! Join everyone's favorite Fashionista as she discovers what it really means to be in love during her fast times at Canterlot High!!! :heart::heart::heart:

The events of this story take place after the FlutterDash fic, Never Grow Apart. You don't have to read that beforehand if you desire not to. ^_^

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Awesome!! I'm so glad you are continuing with this setting . Your portrayal of Rarity here is spot on, and the Apple Family accents come through nicely, which is not something often well done. I really can't wait to see more of this! I did notice two things I felt I should point out however.

The playoffs had begun a week prior, and the Wonderbolts were favored to play in the final game against Crystal Prep’s Shadowbolts.

I'm not 100% certain, but I thought in Equestria Girls that "Wonderbotls" was changed to "Wondercolts".
The other thing I noticed was that you have Granny Smith say she hasn't seen Rarity since Freshmen year, but in the movies she works in the school cafeteria.
Just little nitpicks , I know, but I figured I'd point it out none the less.

First, I have to ask, if this is a sequel to 'Never Grow Apart', why didn't you use the prequel feature? That brings me to my next question: Even though the focus is on RariJack, will we see signs of FlutterDash in the background? I mean, last I saw, the others were unaware of Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash taking their relationship up a level, so that's got to come out some time.

Finally, I think you made a goof. I believe you meant to say 'Sweetie Belle pulled her door close', instead of open.

Nice work. You've caught my attention.:raritystarry:

Great start! I'll be tracking this! :pinkiehappy:

6736803 You are correct. It is the Wondercolts.

Really nice, I thought at the end of Never Grow Apart that it would have been nice to see more of the Rarijack from the background and now there it is :pinkiehappy:

Even though Fluttetdash is my focus, I'm finding this fic enjoyable, also. I hope we see some Flutter dash in the story, but that's just me being silly. Either way, you're doing a good job.

Just a quick question, though. If Rarijack is "Canterlot High's favorite odd ball pair, then what is "flutterdash?"

Wait, how could Granny Smith not have seen Rarity in a long time? She's the lunch lady, she should be seeing her every school day!

6741915 Rarity almost never eats school lunch. I thought that might be obvious considering she's a salad person.

6743366 Oh, I thought the salads were one of the choices in the cafeteria.

There was no worse feeling in the world than hearing the sound of an alarm clock on a Monday morning

This is the truest statement ever, :eeyup:

“We’ve been good!” Scootaloo nearly shouted. “Everything is A-ok!”

Catbug moment, :applejackconfused:

Rarity's day in a nutshell:

Well, I guess I really shouldn't be surprised at how good this is. Yet that doesn't stop me from being amazed at how naturally and gracefully you've transferred the perspective to Rarity's point of view. I guess assuming your writing style would be similar as the previous story would not be giving you enough credit, as you write perfectly for Rarity. And as always every line of dialogue and prose has so much character and detail in it that I really wish you actually wrote for the show, 'cause it could use some more talent like you. You've become a bit of a "teacher" for me, as I find myself thoroughly studying how you do this and how you wrote that etc., especially when it comes to dialogue. You're really quite good at writing about the daily lives of the characters, and while the plot didn't dramatically progress the story still remained interesting 100% of the time. And all the cute fluff between Rarity and Applejack is always a pleasure to read. Of course, you can bet on me waiting on bated breath for the next chapter. Good luck, and I can't wait for more. <3

D'aww~ This is precious!!~ :heart: Upvote and a fave , hopefully it'll help encourage you to continue, dear~ :raritywink::heart::ajsmug:

Best. Chapter. Ever!

I can't wait to see how this will all turn out! :yay:

such a cute chapter :rainbowkiss:

and is it just me or did I noticed there a Sunlight moment between the lines?
But it's possible that I just read to many of these and now see them everywhere :twilightsheepish:

Oh my gosh:pinkiegasp: I hope the next chapter comes out soon, I get very impatient when my now favourite story doesn't update quickly, lol

10/10 great as always. Surprised to see you get to the meat of the story so quickly, but that only makes me more interested as to what is to come as you kinda ended the last story around this part. Not only that, but you moved it along further by making the relationship public! I eagerly await what happens next.

Also, I must say - and I know that I'm always pouring niceties all over you but you really do deserve it - I've noticed since the last story and especially now that you write Pinkie Pie quite incredibly. Just little stuff like the being a member of the midnight snack community and all her little quirks seem like second nature to you. Which makes me wonder if you'll ever plan on doing a Pinkie Pie story one day. I think you'd be quite good at it, assuming you could think of something interesting to write about involving her. I'd definitely love to read it, as she is my favorite character.

Anyhow, as always I eagerly await next week's chapter. Oh, and Merry Christmas! Or whatever holiday you may celebrate. I hope it is as interesting as your writings would appreciate.

PS, was the line supposed to be "Rarity wiped her lips with the back of her hand?" or am I just reading it incorrectly? I may have just misunderstood. Tah-tah.

6736994 I was about to say the same thing about Calvin and Hobbes :rainbowlaugh:

Like the detail I'm reading in this chapter and the other one and the story as whole for right now like it's the most realist reading I've ever done like so well done for the first 2 chapters and like I can't get enough like I want the next chapter! Really am loving how the story is going and and I also really like how the rarity and applejack story is taking place and you mention the relationship between rainbowdash and fluttershy and how close they've gotten to each other from the others perspective really love it :raritywink::ajsmug: really amazing story so far keep it up! :twilightsmile:

Rarity wiped her lips with the back of her mouth

Other than that it love the story so far. Keep up the good work.:pinkiehappy:

Still enjoying the story, though it seems you've overplayed their characters a bit. Too me it seems like Twilight would be the one to be frantic about forgetting Somepony's birthday. And Dash also seemed a bit too gruff. Beyond that, well done!

I have been wanting me some good EqG-Rarijack for a while now... Have a fav, and meeeeerry christmas!

"Listen to your heart~
When she's calling for you~
Listen to your heart~
There's nothing else you can do~ "

..........Sorry :twilightsheepish: This chapter made me think of that song when I was reading it. Excellent work so far, dear! A doting Applejack is just.......the D'awwws!! *squee* :pinkiehappy::heart::heart::heart:

Rarijack is the best, and you do it very well. You get five outta five pinkies :pinkiesmile::pinkiesad2::pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile::pinkiegasp:

There was no worse feeling in the world than hearing the sound of an alarm clock on a Monday morning,

Like if you cri evrytim.


Ooh!~ Things are getting very interesting here, dear~. And what's even more enjoyable than seeing a doting, loving and affectionate Applejack....is an aggressively affectionate Applejack!~:heart: HAWT DAMN, my dear, you've earned a follow! (If I haven't followed you yet of course :twilightsheepish:)

YES UPDATE!!! great chapter as always, and boy can Applejack get aggressive or what? and your welcome by the way and can't wait to see what happens next!!!

First of all another amazing chapter I really like this the most because the way you took this chapter like really went into the depths of how much care and love they have for each other and I like more chapters like that. I don't mind drama even though I'm not all about the drama part but I sure you will make it mash really well like you have so far, love the long reads in each chapter personally shows amazing editing and time and care into ever word and sentence and looking forward to the next chapter already CAN'T WAIT!:raritystarry::ajsmug:

Keep up the amazing work man like really amazing job well done with this chapter and the others. :twilightsmile:

The last message she received was a simple ‘good morning’ from Applejack, made even sweeter by a simple heart. Rarity immediately messaged her a ‘good morning’ of her own before continuing her busy morning. Having spent so much time on her appearance, she barely had the chance to make a piece of toast and a cup of coffee before driving straight to school. Sweetie Belle had her face buried in her phone the entire ride to school, obviously preoccupied with keeping in touch with her friends during the short periods of the day when she was separated from them. It was rather cute to see how close Sweetie Belle was with her friends, and Rarity had no doubt that they would be friends long after high school.

*huh, I wonder if that's going where I think it is... <3

I wonder if there will be a scootabelle... :trixieshiftright:

Well that chapter was all snuggles and cuteness. Good job! So, I wonder who AJ's old GF was. Maybe her old summer camp buddy? Maybe she'll show up again in the future? Only time will tell! :pinkiegasp:

Awww this story is too cute. I love it so much <3

You make it sound like there are several more chapters to come. That would be the best possible thing.

wow, never thought that AJ could be so...aggressively affectionate :raritystarry:
Now I wonder when RD and Shy will come out with their big surprise, Pinkie will totally explode xD

>>Madox: I have an idea I've been tinkering with that pertains to Sunset and Twilight. It involves pie.

interesting, now the only question is: a normal pie or a pink one :pinkiehappy:

OHMYGOSH YESS! This was exactly what I was hoping for! Your FlutterDash story left off at a spot that make me hungry for fluffy cute goodness and this scratched that itch and then some! It was so cute! My favorite part was Rarity calling Applejack "sweetness." I find that very endearing. What I loved about it, though, is that it wasn't fluff for the sake of fluff. You managed to further the plot and character development in every scene, while adding the make-outy stuff on top to make the scene better overall. I find that quite impressive, as many authors just have that stuff with really no plot points at all.

Everyone else was at their top game, as is usual. Seeing Dash get bashful was cute, and Pinkie was amazing! (THANK YOU). She's shipping right out the door and isn't ashamed of adding it as a background to her phone. You and me both, Pinkie. You and me both. Also, did I see some hints at possible future story ideas with other characters? Ooh, I think I diiiiiid......

Anyway, another example of a master class author, my friend. I eagerly await the drama, the cuteness, the sexiness, and everything that lies in between both in this story and the next. I hope you enjoy writing it as much as I do reading it.

Oh, and a collab between you and I? Why, Halt Hoof, that would be a dream come true. :pinkiesmile:

Now I am all caught up with this story, and it is promising to be just as good as the first one! I am absolutely loving all the characters here, and am super excited to see what happens!

Also I am super excited to see how the flutterdash fits into all of this~ :rainbowkiss:

You've made me more desperate for Rarijack now.

Cute fluffs are my weakness! :raritystarry:

The feels... the feels! :raritycry:

Goodness me, this chapter was full of them!


Okay so let's start from the beginning. Ever since your previous story I've liked how in depth you are with the clothing everyone wears. It's just a little detail, but its appreciated as it helps develop the characters just a little bit. And you seem to know quite a bit about fashion, at least a lot more than me. I look like a blind janitor dresses me every time I go out. I especially thought Rarity's outfit with the tie was cute. I'd like to see her actually wear that. Go tell Meghan McCarthy, maybe she'll send it down the line.

Onto the date. It was, like, the cutest thing ever. Of all time. I was wanting more date-y stuff from Never Grow Apart, so when I heard you were creating a sequel I was hoping something like this would be in there. And you delivered! (Hunger Games is such a make-out movie by the way. Who wouldn't get in the mood by seeing that?) And this scene encapsulates what I've been saying about you all along: it's like these characters are real people and you know them personally. Like, Applejack and Rarity have never actually been a canon couple in the show and yet here they are, EXACTLY how they would be in real life. It's uncanny how well you've tapped in to their personalities. I'm using your stories as a dialogue bible now, since you do it so impeccably.

And then we get to the friggin PIECE DE RESISTANCE! You said there was gonna be drama at the end of last chapter but BRO! BRO! Having Rainbow Dash thinking about leaving Fluttershy to fulfill her dream is drama in and of itself. Like, that's a really tough call and one I think we've all had to make (at least I have). Also, it kinda ties into the pony universe where Rainbow may have to make some tough decisions regarding the Wonderbolts, so that's some cool duality there. BUT THEN, having her tell Applejack about Fluttershy and Fluttershy telling Rarity about Rainbow and Rarity and Applejack not telling each other but still inducing fear and doubt into each other and all four of them at the same time and DUDE!!! WHAT A TANGLED FUCKING WEB WE WEAVE!!!! That is some GRADE A DRAMA right there! I have no idea where you come up with this stuff but you are a literary genius! Like I thought these stories were great but then you add in the drama and I am hooked like a WORM! G DAMN!

*Also that sad, earnest Dash during the phone call was really cute and sad at the same time and I liked it a lot. I also really liked that scene with Sweetie Belle and Rarity. Again, it's those little dialogues that don't progress the story but just add to characterization are my favorite and you always take the time to add that in and I appreciate it.
* Also also, Rarity and Fluttershy's talk was really well done. They're so in character and seeing Rarity react that way was endearing 'cause it shows how good of a friend she is but also progresses the plot and omg dude :pinkiecrazy:

And the final scene with Applejack and Rarity in the truck was just so cute and so sad and really makes me wanna see what comes next. Also the booty. Goooootta love the booty. I know I do.

And yes, I can indeed confirm. Halt Hoof and I are working on the next story together! So I guess that may make this entire review seem kinda biased, but no, I really do think this guy is a genius and I'm so excited to be working with him. And it just goes to show that you should thank creators if you really, truly love their work. I did and now I get to work with the guy! #blessed

Yes! Please pair Pinkie with Cheese Sandwich!

Yes really loving the depths and emotions of the characters and this chapter was hitting me in the feels really hard I have to admit I was playin some emotional background music on YouTube while reading and hot damn I felt like I could cry but overall another amazing chapter really loved it again and really am loving the flutter shy and rainbow dash interaction between rarity and applejack and just that little interaction on phones they had show depth and emotional detail just between flutter shy and rainbow dash and how much they love each other really love these stories and chapter and like before I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope the pinkie pie story comes along great for you sounds like another masterpiece in the making from you :twilightsmile: and yet AGAIN glad to be apart of the motivation and keep you going and writing comes from the heart man keep up the amazing work. to comment a little more of the flutter shy and rainbow dash thing going about college PLEASE DON'T MAKE THEM LEAVE EACH OTHER. I will be sad and just might cry from reading a amazing story for the first time in a while :raritycry: yet AGAIN amazing work and an amazing read, looking forward to the chapters and new stories to come from halt hoof EG UNIVERSE.

btw for anyone wondering the music I played while reading these stories = https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i8u-iU_DMpk the feels man Lol

I just want to say that I immensely enjoyed the "Are you quite sane?" line :rainbowlaugh:

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