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New Canterlot


I can finally see...but not for long

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Rainbow Dash has been rising the ranks of Canterlot High's athletics since her first day of school. Now, after years of training and hard work, she has become the captain for the soccer team again this year, and the school cannot wait to cheer her on for the big city wide tournament. With the best support group in the world, Rainbow Dash feels on top of the whole world! To make things even better, Dash now has a good friend on the team!
There's just one friend who isn't as happy.
Fluttershy can't help but feel as if the success of her friend is driving them farther and farther apart from each other. Even after spending all of middle school and high school gathering up her courage to tell Dash how she really feels, she may never get the chance now! Will she finally speak her mind and tell Rainbow Dash what her heart desires?

Now proofread by the awesome Shutup868 for the best reading experience!

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 111 )

Awesome story! I didn't find a single mistake. Won't be long before it gets featured! I'm serious.

Oh man, I'm really liking this one. I usually don't care for EqG stories, but with you as the author I was pretty sure it'd be a good one, and it so far didn't disappoint. Keep up the good work, I hope to see more soon! :pinkiehappy:

One of the best EG fics I've read in a long time, looking forward to the next chapter! :twilightsmile:

You grab the bow, you grab the arrow, and you shot a perfect ten.

Just like this one. But in pencil style.

Dash.... She can' t be THAT dense, can she?

Great Story, Keep those updates coming! :pinkiehappy::scootangel:

Aw, Flutters :fluttershysad: hot chocolate and cake do make everything better though!

My thought for every main character.....
:rainbowhuh: Why you so clueless? Why don't you have no heart.

:pinkiehappy: Give me the video!

:fluttershyouch: Don't you dare give up. You will get your girl.

:raritycry: hahahahahahahahaha

:twilightsmile: No big moment for you.

:ajbemused: ehhhhh whatever.

And now for the author. Well done my fellow author, even though you sent unwanted sadness chill to my heart because of how Fluttershy is suffering of not being close to her belove. Good, your doing your stuff right. Keep grabbing on to that pencil of your and keep writing (or typing, you know what I mean).

Cmon, flutters! The more you hold it in, the worse it's gonna get!

And RD, just… :facehoof:

I am enjoying the story so far, there aren't many decent EQG's stories out there yet, but then again, I usually prefer the pony versions more. If anything I know and saw how the personalities evolved over time. In EQG's FS is back to being alot less confident and assertive then her counterpart, and RD is alot more of a clueless jerk when it comes to understanding anyone around her.

Yet still I am looking forward to more. Thinking of the potential issues and what will happen next in this is intriguing. Will Flutters lose Dash as Dash and Sunset get closer and closer? Sunset is noticing more of Dash's feminine qualities based on this chapter, so time could be running out for FS to gather her courage. I am thinking Pinkie and AJ are going to be hunting FS down a few more times in the future as things spiral out of her control and ability to emotionally handle.

Oh drama, why do I love you so much?

Sunset must not be a love interest for Dash, they can be just great pals at sports, but romance? Twilight can be Sunset's girlfriend :3

But Dash... damn, that girl is...well... dumb .-.

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ONEFluzzyPuppy! But OMG, thank you so so so so so so much for that!

You're doing a pretty good job so far.

Beggining the story with Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash home alone, great Ending the story with both character snuggling in bed, you burn my heart with adorableness.

Great story. Continue on.

I guess than Shy's mother would not dissaprove it if Dash were Flutter's girlfriend. But this need more drama, what about Adagio or other girl (no mane 6) trying to get FlutterShy's attention. Dach could be jealous :3

really an awesome story, can't wait for more :rainbowkiss:

My heart is very fuzzy now. Keep this up!

Cant... Contain... Cuteness.... Blargh!! *ded*
... Update soon!!!

Congratulations, I am now following this story.

Aha! You got my name right! Anyways, Daww times 1000001! That's one million and one.

it's only right to say that awesome stories are awesome :rainbowkiss:

wow, so many feels in this chapter, and Dashie is starting to feel it, too. :pinkiehappy:
I wonder why I hadn't done it earlier, but now this story will go to my favourites :scootangel:

Is it crazy to think that FlutterDash isn't the only Mane Six pairing you're showing in this story based on the interaction between Rarity and Applejack? Also, I know this might not be a popular ship, but will EQG Twilight learn about EQG Flash Sentry?

I love how Rainbow Dash is starting to feel for Fluttershy. This is proceeding perfectly

Just keeps getting better and better :raritywink: :heart:

Man, I don't know how or why but that fire thing being contagious made a lot of sense to me. Good job my good sir or madaam.

Now about this chapter, there only one thing I could only say about it and it go directly to Rainbow, "Rainbow, you got bitten by a love bug while sleeping with 'Shy and is slowly infecting your body. " and I got Luna here constanlty screaming, "The love has been doubled (Don't ask me how she here, she just is.)!"

So yea, this was pretty darn good chapter.

Poor Fluttershy, like the whole jealousy thing :twilightblush::rainbowlaugh:

To: The_Loony_Luna21: I hope you're still alive! :fluttershysad: Although, dying from cuteness isn't the worst way to go.

Nope im rip... But wait what if i am not kill? *iloominoody theme* jk lol but seriously, if im leaving earth, it better be from this adorable fic. This is actually one of the best fics ive read so far in my years of ... Ficing? (Its now a new verb , the act of reading fics)
I just love how dash is starting to like/love flutters and just the overall cuteness in this story. It feels like... You were designing your story then u were like "ok how much cuteness should i have... Hmmm, how about ALL OF IT!!!!!" Anyways keep doin what you do and update soon!

It wasn't like her to get so animated about sports, but if Dash felt strongly about playing sports as she did about fashion, then this actually was big news

Missing a period.

For a few minutes, Fluttershy observed Dash and Sunset kicking the ball back forth to each other.

Missing a word.

I just wanted to say that out of the many fan fictions I've ever read, yours is certainly the best. I've never been as invested in the characters as much as I am with yours. You seem to get every character and understand what makes them tick, and you write them as if they were real people. You are a master of "small talk", that is, giving them characterization just by talking about nothing. It's those little in between conversations that bring characters to life, and you have done so wonderfully. I am fully invested in your story and I hope you write many more in the years to come. Good luck on the rest of the chapters and I hope to read them soon.

Also, I noticed you really like talking about their butts. Not that I blame you. :raritywink:

This was a treat to read~ I can't wait to read the party. ^^

It was unnerving to feel so frustration for no reason.

frustrated* probably.

Hmmmm huh hmmmmmm huh I'm seriously considering favoriting this story, but on the other hand I have been meaning to be less liberal with what stories I give favs to. Eeeeeh I'll just keep watching and see how things turn out.

Btw you misspelled "Captain" in the story's description.

Sorry about the spelling errors every pony. I think there's only a small handful of them. Also, it's NOT my proofreaders fault. I didn't bring a proofreader onto the story's production until the third chapter I think? I know it was half way or something. Thanks for pointing those out.

Wow, I've been busy and have only been able to catch up on fimfic as of yesterday and today. Halt Hoof, this story is absolutely amazing, and really really cute. I was enjoying the jealously and the frustration you had initially, but I really love the fuzzy fluffiness of it now as well. You do us a great service, thank you again for your hard work. :pinkiehappy:

One question: who do you ship Pinkie with? I want to make sure I can still like this story.
JK, I will love it no matter what. Hey, why wasn't I in the author's note?

Finally! Er... what I mean is, in the show we always see Fluttershy being shy and reserved. Yet there is always that point where things come to a head and she acts out or stands up for herself, and I feel you've captured that perfectly with her this chapter. I just love how you write and I'm simply addicted to your style, and you really churn out these chapters quick too. . Thank you again so very much for this and I'm looking forward to the sequel you mentioned! I'll shall bake a cheesecake to sell in my restaurant in your honor.
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Nice to get your head straight, Fluttershy! ^^

AHHH! I LOVE IT! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE PONY BUTTS!

This was a great chapter. Extremely cute. And a little sexual. :raritywink:

Was that Britney Spears joke a reference to some other fan made work or am I just making things up? Cause I'm pretty sure I remember some comic from three years ago or something making that joke.

I'm so happy you're planning a sequel. I can only see you getting better and better at this. I eagerly await the final chapter. Good luck!

Well, I was hoping this story would be a little longer than six chapters. Still, if this story ends the way I hope it'll end, that's fine by me, especially if this sequel of yours features more interactions between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash alongside the pairing that'll no doubt be prominent.

Rarity and Aj as a couple? I don't like that shipping, but I guess that could work too .-. (IDK). Well, we are getiing FlutterDash :yay: :rainbowwild: :heart: and I hope, a bit of SunLight :heart: :heart:

6631773 I'm so sorry! I was going through the comments to make shoutouts, and there were so many that I must have spaced. I am really sorry about that. I will give you a coupon for one free hug, your choice of type of hug.

6633308 Well, hate it, no, but I guess that's because I didn't watched thah episode, Is because I don't understand why they ship them...

The closest thing that I can imagine, is they could be like Korra (AJ) and Asami (Rarity), but well, may I need watch that episode and read some RariJack fimfics .-.

6633362 It's Ok. I don't need to be in it every time. You still didn't answer my question though...

I am pretty sure that incident is going to spark something in Dash's heart

This new romantic development has me very excited for the next chapter. If it isn't out soon, I just might die.

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