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Starlight has never heard of Discord?

Unlikely.

Interesting idea. The most forgiving of ponies unable to do so.

I actually had a very similar idea to this, although instead of Fluttershy, it was Minuette who saw all the alternate timelines. My headcanon is that she's a theoretical physicist who studies time, so Starlight Glimmer creating a ton of parallel dimensions would not escape her notice. And those dimensions are now permanent parts of the multiverse, with no way to erase them. Starlight Glimmer may be sorry, but the damage has been done. :ajsleepy:

And then I had Minuette beating the tar out of her much like Sans does to Frisk in the Genocide run of Undertale. Because anyone who does that much damage to the fabric of time deserves to get dunked on, no matter how sorry they are. :derpytongue2:

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Hmm? Oh, right. This story. It's an interesting take on things. I knew someone was going to make that pun, and you had a plausible way of explaining it. However, I felt like it could've been stronger. Fluttershy couldn't have remembered those two dimensions alone if she saw everything. What about Nightmare Moon? Tirek? Discord? Flim and Flam? Did she simply forget to mention them?

If you really want Starlight to feel those sins crawling on her back, I think you need to recount every single last one of them. But the idea is certainly worth exploring.

Also, minor nitpick. The Wonderbolts were still active in the Crystal War timeline. They were just wearing armor rather than their flight uniforms. I managed to spot both Spitfire and Misty Fly taking part in the battle.

6684797 Actually I had an Idea for NightMare moon, Fluttershy being in the dungeons and adding my own little headcanon with that.

On the the Wonderbolts: There's nithing in the episode to support this, but I think they disbanded as a Show group and became strictly military, that was more what I meant.

Good story. The only thing I would change is the reason why Fluttershy can remember the different timelines. Having Discord being the reason seems too forced and convenient. Instead, how about the reason why she can remember is because Starlight was sitting on Fluttershy's throne when she cast the spell? Through the map's connection to the Tree of Harmony and the Elements Fluttershy was somewhat shielded from the effects of time travel like Twilight and Spike were, just not to the same extent they were.

It's a very interesting story concept, though like others have said, this needs work. Just using Discord as a plot device is too easy. You also need a good deal of editing assistance. Keep up with the idea, and try to find someone to help you iron out the issues!

A very interesting Idea. Would love to see it get more development.

Coming up next: Discord decides to defend Fluttershy, and banishes Starlight to Tartarus. :yay::twilightsmile:

I couldn't have said it better myself Fluttershy

wlam #10 · Dec 1st, 2015 · · 4 ·

The idea isn't too bad, but wow, the writing is awful. The ranDom caPitaLization alone makes this look RidIcuLously SlopPy. Maybe actually proofread and use a spellchecker next time.

I love this idea!

I was wondering how she would remember, and when she said Discord I was like "I could easily see that".

As for the people saying that Discord is a bad plot device...I say Discord is hard to write anyway.

I mean lets face it if an author puts Discord into a story they run the risk of having him too OP or having him be too weak.

Then there is all of his powers...what can he do versus what he can't, and the reasoning behind it.

Honestly you are not going to please everyone on that front.

They only thing I would do is explain the Discord angle a bit more...maybe even have Fluttershy herself confused as to why she remembers these things then add Discord later, but even then I still enjoy the story!

An absolutely fascinating take on the episode.

Maybe Fluttershy knows what caused that last scenario?:fluttercry:

6685593 Wasn't she sitting on Twilight's throne?

you could have had this entire chapter take place in the map room. when fluttershy spoke up, that could have been the moment you had her horrify the rest of them. explaining that every timeline played out and fluttershy lived every life that came from the spell.

if you decide to do anything to this idea, please leave this chapter/story up.

“But, Twilight, Starlight had a friend, and from what you’ve told us, she made no effort to even make contact with Sunburst!”


And neither did he.

6694591 My personal take is, going by the natural progression established in the show, that's what happens when Starlight's plan succeeds, and the entire world is eventually subsumed by total equality. Eventually it would become a wasteland, because all talents regarding farming, animal caretaking, and any other related talents die out.

You ever notice that you don't see any of the Mane6's cutiemarks in the war reality? At first I thought it was because they were suppose to be different, but you see Rarity's in the Nightmare history, so I'm not sure. The episode definitely made me wonder what the new cutiemark stories of the Mane6 are in these altered histories.

Poor Fluttershy. I hope she was dead for the final future we saw. That one looked just nasty.

I'm writing a fic about my own head-canon for that future. To me, that's the future where Hellfire Sun/Solar Flare/NIghtmare Star won. Eternal day, eternal sunlight, would cause a barren wasteland like that. In my head-canon, Hellfire Sun came about when ponies started loving Luna more than Celestia and the Nightmare took advantage of it.

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Sure, but Starlight was the one that went crazy over it. If it wasn't worth even trying to speak to him, why was it worth going crazy and trying to mess with time over? I've lost contact with friends I wish I could see again, but I don't start cults that preach about the evils of graduation.

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Try explaining that to a filly.

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She's not a filly any more. She hasn't been for a long time, going by the fact that she built an entire village out of her warped philosophy.

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Trama isn't logical, emotions aren't logical.

Not every foal who witnessed Celestia raising the sun became her student either.

Besides, she likely spent a life time seeing more proof of her beliefs.

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It's still a weak backstory unless they expand on it. Again, if she cared so much about his friendship then why didn't she make the effort to maintain it when he started drifting away from her? I understand the whole traumatic incident idea, but this falls awfully short of Thomas and Martha getting shot in an alley. He could have reached out to her but then again he's not the one that was apparently so hurt that he needed to found Jonestown and build a propaganda shack.

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I don't really see how that matters. It isn't canon to the show, which is what I'm focusing on. If I was willing to use headcanon as an argument, one of my own ideas would have covered it.

(If you're curious, my thought was that Equestrian magic makes one more social and friendly, but lack of friendship has side effects that typically include going insane in some way. Nightmare Moon and Starlight Glimmer would be extreme examples, but Moondancer and maybe Maud Pie would be more typical cases.)

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She's Discord's closest friend. I didn't think it was contrived at all; Discord giving Fluttershy that power seems like a perfectly in character thing for him to have done.

Well written and great explanation to why she wouldn't forgoge her and for how she remembered if the others couldn't. Also nice why to conmect it to the Friendship Games

She is very lucky that Shy isn't vindictive. She could have had Discord banish her to Tartarus or sock puppet land or...

A nice start to your story.

... It is wierd that I read this awesome story and the one thing I comment on is the fact that when Twilight flies through the mirror... Um... Humans don't have wings. Twilight would fall to the ground, and with the momentum from flight, she'd probably slide a couple yards... Well, skin is overrated anyway, yeah?
Awesome fic, loved the concept ^-^
~SoDF

Yeah, Second reaD, still gOoD! :D

Good story. Have a thumbs up.

It's an interesting concept, the idea of ripple-proof (or in this case ripple-incorporating) memory.

Though, that'd mean Discord was aware of it all as well... Wonder what he thinks of all this?

-GM, master of spores.

6738638 or worse Pyro land

“But, Twilight, Starlight had a friend, and from what you’ve told us, she made no effort to even make contact with Sunburst!”

Thank you for pointing that out Fluttershy:ajsmug:.

“No, Starlight, you don’t understand…”Flutterhy’s mane covered one of her eyes, not from fear, but to denote the grave nature of the conversation, “I remember everything. I remember you telling those bullies not to tease me, but I also remember all of the different worlds that were created from you.”

How:rainbowhuh:?

Fluttershy shook her head, “Discord gave me the ability to retain memories of alternate timelines, so that I can remember some of the pranks he’s pulled involving time travel.”

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Of course:ajsmug::facehoof:. Should've known...

“I’m sure you are, Starlight, but I don’t think I can ever forgive you,” Fluttershy declared.

Coming from who's supposed to be the most forgiving of the Main Six, that's saying a lot:fluttershysad:.

“I’m not sure if there’s anything you can do. I don’t think I can forgive any of the horrible worlds that I’ve endured. I’ve never felt this way, I’ve never truly wished a pony to be banished to tartarus. Even then, It might be too good for you.” Fluttershy said.

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Damn...:twilightoops:.

“Good! This shouldn’t be long!” Twilight zoomed into the mirror, leaving Fluttershy alone, thinking about Starlight Glimmer and what this meant for the Status Quo of Ponyville.

Probably not anything good:twilightoops:.

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