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Framwinkle


How many ponies can fit in a one horse town, anyway?

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This is a short piece that fills in a few gaps, exploring and expanding upon what might have happened between some of the scenes in "Wonderbolt Academy." Specifically, it looks into events after the tornado incident, and Rainbow Dash quitting the academy. It is just a "what if?" Your interpretation may vary.

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I, noticed you took some liberties with the original script, and there are some formatting hiccups (no scene transitions). I also think you could've been more creative with the title. My final point of contention is that I don't think Spitfire would cry over something like this. More likely, she'd want to punch something. But that's just me. :trixieshiftright:

Otherwise, this is some pretty solid stuff. The way you had Spitfire tell off Lightning Dust was simply top-notch, as it was both powerful and in-character. This is going straight into my headcanon, and for that, I salute you. :moustache:

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Comment posted by kyrahmac deleted Dec 2nd, 2013
Comment posted by kyrahmac deleted Dec 2nd, 2013

Interesting to give things more background like this. I give a thumbs up, but I will admit it would be more interesting if you took the story in a different direction or something. This kinda read like a children's novelization, which can be fun, but not as good as the actual movie usually. Still, I give it a thumbs up.

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Thanks for the comment, and the like. Taking the story in a new direction would perhaps be interesting, and might make for a good story, but it would change the episode. I only wanted to fill in a gap that I saw, while trying to keep it in the same spirit as the original material.

Spitfire encouraged Lightning all the time instead of correcting her behaviour early. As soon as something went wrong she used her as scapegoat, humiliated her and kicked her out without even a warning. She is the captain nopony deserves.

Lightning Dust knew what this meant. She was out of the academy, and Spitfire had made sure to throw her out in front of Rainbow Dash and her friends to further rub it in.

And this is why incompetent Spitfire is the worst.

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Spitfires incompetence and hypocrisy are breathtaking.

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Yeah rainbow had already gotten minor injuries it was just lucky that nobody got seriously hurt.

Wouldn't mind it if Lightning Dust had gone them one further. Stripping off her uniform and helmet and all on that same desk.

Anything less than Spitfire being dishonorably discharged is an injustice.

Lightning: sigh you know? I think i did need that
But im glad to say I've gotten better over time

8812787
You know?
I think it was needed
However lightning didnt deserve a full Ban

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