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Without their voices, the Sirens can't cast any magic.
And without their magic, the Sirens can't survive.
Adagio is well aware of this, and even though Aria abandoned them, she's trying her hardest to take care of Sonata - she knows it won't be long before they succumb to their hunger and starve.
There's only one person who could help - Sunset Shimmer. But would Sunset and her friends be willing to help, after everything the Dazzlings had done? Will the Sirens find a way to survive, and finally get their sweet atonement?


Spin off story: Aria Ablaze


Cover art by me.
Rated T for mentions of sex and swearing.
This fic was inspired by 'Sweet Atonement' by Xandria. I'm only using the title because I think it fits really well and I like the song.

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 107 )

A great start :twilightsmile: I'm really loving the dynamic shown here.

Aria let out a small chuckle. “Don’t hold your breath. Or, actually, go ahead. Do something nice for once.”

Aria so cold she dropped the temperature :rainbowderp:

I love how you write Adagio, you captured her attitude and outward meanness while still making her very compassionate and caring. Definitely looking forward to seeing more of this story :yay:

Wow, this is pretty good. Has lots of potential. I think this could be a very beautiful story.

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The great thing about the Dazzlings is that they were only given one personality trait: Evil. So it's so nice to write them with actual feelings and emotions. Thank you for the comment!
Ha, I originally wasn't going to put that line in the story because I thought it was really mean.

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Thank you! i'm glad you see potential in it - I hope to meet your expectations and write a really good one! Thanks for the encouragement!

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I'm glad you are enjoying it! I'll try to make each chapter better than the other! Thank you for the support!

I like Adagio's banter with her boss, and I'm curious about this magical shop, but mostly I loved Adagio and Sonata at the end :twilightsmile:

And I have a feeling I'm gonna enjoy that meeting Adagio is planning :raritywink:

So far so good :)

I hope they manage to survive and find a solution :)

Can't wait to see more chapters :D

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Thank you for the comment!

6723933 you are very welcome :D

Mmmmmh :) i'm liking it more and more :)

Sunset interaction with Adagio was very good, kinda looking forward to hear what the others have to say about her decision.

Adagio pouted and crossed her arms. “You could have just let us win.”

Hey. That's a good option.

My three girls.
Then seeing the comments.
To the tracking shelf it goes. (hope to start reading it at lunch or this evening)

“You’ve got such nice hair,” Sunset admired, fluffling up the curls.

Not sure if start of shipping, or if I've just been in this fandom too long ("They're standing next to each other! They must be lovers!") :duck:

Anyway, I love the Sunset-Adagio back and forth. Between Adagio's occasional outbursts and Sunset's not putting up with it, it's very interesting to watch these two.

Curious, you mentioned all of Sunset's friends except human Twilight. Is this before/not incorporating Friendship Games, or did she just not happen to appear?

I like this story more and more :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss:
Please, chapter 4, please :fluttercry: :raritydespair:

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Working on Chapter 4 as we speak dear! Thank you for the lovely comment!


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IMO I really like SunDagio, but I won't touch up too much on it in this story (or will I? I'm not spoiling anything!!) This story takes place right after Rainbow Rocks, so they hadn't met Human Twilight yet.

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I hope you enjoy this when you get the time! Thank you for your interest in it :D

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...you know that's really obvious, now that you point it out. I mean, it literally starts with them talking about their pendants breaking.

Don't mind me, I'm just being a derp :facehoof:

6740050 my thought on this story

... take your time though I can wait (:pinkiecrazy:)

The plot thickens! :pinkiegasp:

No, not that kind of plot! :derpytongue2:

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Yeah, that's how I reacted when I was actually writing this chapter lol
Thank you for taking the time to comment :)


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Thank you for the comment! Hopefully you'll all be pleased with where the story goes haha :twilightblush:

beautiful :raritystarry:
more and more beautiful :pinkiesad2:
I hope to find Aria :fluttershysad:

Oh yeah! A big apology concert would be great! :D

Hope they find Aria in time however...

And about the end...

AHHHHH!!! Maestro's spirit !!!! SONATA, DON'T OPEN THAT BOOK!!! Its evil!

Well, I'm officially freaked out by that ending.

It was nice seeing everyone together.

And Sonata? Sonata. Sonata! Behave.

Mamadagio is great :twilightsmile:

Wondering what Aria's been up to, and looking forward to seeing what her return will bring to the dynamic. Hasn't escaped my attention that she's the only one in the cover who doesn't seem happy. And I'll echo the thought's of everyone else here, I'm really interested in seeing what comes of Maestro's appearance :rainbowderp:

Also noticed a small typo

bring Adagio in for one last hug

Probably meant to put 'bringing' :twilightsheepish:

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Thank you! I've got big plans for Aria, though.

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Something's been aching to get out of that book for a very long time... :pinkiecrazy:

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Thank you! That was the reaction I was hoping for :D

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Fixed! I should probably proofread my chapters lol

And, oh, I can't keep this in anymore! Aria won't be in the majority of this story because she's getting her very own spin off story! It's coming soon, and will tell the story of Aria trying to find her own magic :yay:

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You know... if you ever wanted a pre-reader, I might know some one :scootangel:
Seriously, I'm not sure I'd be the best bet since you're already way better at grammar than I am. Still, it doesn't hurt to have a second pair of eyes look something over if you're interested :twilightsmile:

That sounds cool. Is it going to be something you work on after Sweet Atonement, or are you going the crazy route of doing two stories at once?

6759299 thanks :twilightsmile:
It is possible if he could see a little bit of sundagio :heart:
just a little .... please :pinkiesad2: :fluttercry:

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Sundagio forever :rainbowkiss:

EDIT:

While I do love SunDagio, it won't be a huge focus in this story. It will be acknowledged, and somethings may happen, but it's not very important here.

6759873 SUNDAGIO FOREVER!!! :heart: :pinkiehappy:
by the way, its a yes?... :twilightblush:

Not what I thought they fined but least its not the cliche that I thought would happen so over all great chapter

she either free'd her or is going to be possessed

6858369 Or giant siren sea horse paper monster, you forget that ripping the page sometimes leads to them being able to just possess paper..

Oh, Sunset...

“Oh. My. Celestia. You’re the Filching Filly?”

Why yes, thievery is horrible until somepony gets famous for it, then it's awesome :facehoof:

Wonder where Adagio's going with this. She ripped out the page but kept the paper, I'm thinking she has some sort of plan.

After you dropped me home,

Probably meant 'After you dropped me off at home'

Another great chapter, my compliments on the developement of the sirens's backstory :pinkiesmile:

Can't wait for more.

Ps...time to get ourselves a soundproof bunker to resist Maestro's spells.

interesting, and disturbing :trixieshiftright:
I like, I can not wait to see the next :twilightsmile:

Oh it's so interesting to see people make predictions! I'm not going to give anything away but some of you are very, very close to the truth!

Thank you all for commenting on my story, and I hope you'll all enjoy the coming chapters :)

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Hm, I was writing her dialogue the same way I speak. I can see the error, though. I'll give it a fix! Thanks.

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What was the cliche you thought would happen? I'd love to know!

6860276 the place would be gone or had been closed for years happens alot in anime when magics in play

Her face felt hot and wet. Ah, those were tears.

If you ever come near my sister again, I will literally eat this page."

These lines are so good. In general I love this whole scene, Adagio's desperation feels so real, it's great.

And Rainbow's apology and just... everything. This whole chapter is fantastic :yay: I know it's partially because I prefer emotional character based stuff, but you must write it do well :pinkiehappy:

Adagio just be careful with that page...

I really like the idea you had about Sonata being still able to sing a little even without the negative energy :pinkiesmile:

Can't wait to see what happens next and also how Adagio's character will develop from here.

Ps I hope that Spirit doesn't get any strange ideas... :trixieshiftleft:

Okay, so Spirit is an asshole, duly noted.

Hm, I wonder who reported Aria missing...

very good chapter :pinkiehappy:
I feel a little bad for adagio, I think it needs a little understanding. :pinkiesad2:
I also hope aria that's okay :fluttershysad:
good work buddy :twilightsmile: :raritywink:

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It was Fluttershy - she offered to make posters in Chapter 4.

To everyone else who has commented, thank you! :heart:

and yEAH i HATE Spirit lol

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OH, that's right; this is the story where Aria walked out on them, not the other way around... I think I'm reading too many Dazzlings stories: they're starting to blend together, :applejackconfused:

Destruction of the Sirens.

Struggling.

Time to call in Bacon Hair.

Spark of hot.

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