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SparkStone


I make stories about humans and ponies. Messages about comments are the highlight of my day. I consider myself to be strange, therefore, interesting since I'm not very common.

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This story is a sequel to Celestia's Care Taker


A year has passed since Alex has said goodbye to Celestia. Another year to the ponies who found themselves taken care of by Alex. A year passes since Alex has seen his beloved.

That was until Alex receives the other end of the deal, and is now thrown to Equestria instead of the other way around. There, he will reunite with his many, many friends. Celestia will see him once more.

And memories return, good and bad.
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Sentient: ability to feel
Sapient: ability to reason

“Okay… so you were practicing your magic with Alex as usual.” He repeats.

“Y-Yes…”

“And then opened a vortex…”

“Yes…”

“That lead to Equestria…”

“Uh huh…”

“But sucked in everything like a black hole?”

“Mm-hmm…”

“And this includes… Alex?”

“Yes…”

Charles rolls up the newspaper and swats her in the head. “Bad girl.”

I totally love this scene :pinkiehappy: :rainbowlaugh:

6815702
Oh! I didn't know that!

I should probably correct that.:twilightblush:

This is very promising, but I think some more descriptions to make it slightly more clear what is going on would help.

6818440
Mmm, alright then. I'll try my best. :pinkiesmile:

This is amazing! I can't wait for the next chapter!

I would want to suprise celestia. Like have her not know your there and kust show up one day at her throne room. Younow all SUPRISE and such

!!!! So good! I love it!

Oooooh, this is going to be good.

6819891 has the right idea about surprising Celestia. PLEASE have him surprise her with this. Also have her drag Luna along to see if she has any clearer memories of him or if the Nightmare had most of them.

I can also see Celestia and Luna feeling competitive over him as a bit of conflict for this, either that or they have no problem sharing since they've gotten closer recently and he freaks out a bit about the idea.

Charles gets a second chance to try his invention since Aurabelle can make a portal now. She can make up for her previous actions by using her connections to get some high quality gear for him to work with instead of budget materials.

Another cute chapter, eh?^_^

Can't wait until the next chapter is released. YOUR AMAZING :pinkiehappy:

Umm just a heads up could you please look at your character dialog. My advise is don't leave dialog's by themselves because the readers don't know who da heck is talking and to whom they might be talking to. For instance the last part of this story, I couldn't even make out who da heck is talking. I was like is this bob, twilight, Alex.... WHO IS TALKING. That part is really confusing for me, I don't want to be rude but you need to keep an eye out for blank dialog's. Otherwise the readers is going to struggle to figure out who is talking.

6920897
Oh! You're talking about that part.
Mmm, the pattern was Princess Luna and a certain somebody. I didn't want to make it obvious or simple for a reason. *wink, wink*

6921077 Well its nice to know you have done it on purpose. That part was very frustrating to make sense of. As I said its still an amazing read:twilightsmile:

WOOHOO SEQUEL!!!
this is gonna be sweeeeeeeet!:yay:
nice intro for this sequel!:moustache:

This is very good so far, and can't wait to read more of it. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

6926253
Thanks~ I'll keep working on it.

6925177
The hype is fantastic to have. :rainbowwild:

Hmmmm, from what remember Fleur, Daring Do, princesses? We forget the one involving the pick when he went to save Celestia, though her hearing news from her former student will be funny to see.

I for one would love to see Celestia reunite with Alex as well as Luna remember her feelings for him. Not to fight over though, so they can share him.

Loving this.^^

I vote wait till AFTER maud!

How long will we torture her? AS LONG AS IT TAKES

6926311 what i can't believe that twilight haven't sent a letter to celestia! or she start asking 1,000 question about humans.

cant wait to read the other ponies that were part of the portal incident! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:
MOAR!!!!:flutterrage:

Im looking forward to more soon. the lord of cinder aprove this story (also your still working on the story im just wondring so i know) ^_^

7029149
Yes, I'm alive, I'm working, just need the following.

Inspiration
direction of the story
College answers to college work
Oreos

I have 3 of those 4 things. You can see why this certain thing is taking so long to get, which stalls the story. :duck:

7030063 OI! someone better get this motherf*cker some goddamned OREOS!
WE NEED MORE!!

Cute chapter, and I'm surprised that he doesn't just ask, then Spike offer to send a letter. Or something.

7177196
I don't believe Alex knows about Spike's ability just yet.

7177606 Which is why I said it could be led into him learning about it.

7177612
The only reason why Twilight or Spike hasn't suggested to send mail to the princess is because she's in an important conference in Alfree, so they decided not to bother her until she returns. This is just temporary of course.

dammit!!!!!:twilightangry2:
i thought celestia would notice alex by now or vice versa!:pinkiegasp:
fine you win this chapter sparkstone! but i will make you write the next chapter with celestia and alex with it seeing each other!:pinkiecrazy:
MUWAHAHAHAHA!:pinkiecrazy:
such a tease!:trollestia:
cant wait!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiecrazy:



really i cant....:facehoof:

by several speedy pegasus
*pegasi


three pegasus fly down to the podium,
*pegasi

Eleron tell the Princess.
*tells


took a while to update, but still a good story

Just enough chapters to make me desperately want more. Really looking forward to Celestia/Alex's meeting. Gon b gud.

7214721
Then go ahead and read the chapters, and tell me what needs fixing. If you need files or want the script before hand, I can help with that.

7232220
I'm practically holding the pages people want so badly.

7233768 the current chapters? also how would i edit the chapters that are not up yet?

7234314
For the chapters already posted, you can go ahead and read them over to see if there are any grammatical errors.

For the chapters not yet posted, I can either...
Post them on this site and you can read them and tell me where are the mistakes.
Or I can send them directly to you before I post them, and have you read and edit out mistakes from there.

Whichever is way you want to do it is fine.

7235099 i think the easiest way is for you to send them to me by message. when i was reading the other chapters before i dont think i found any errors

7235130
Alright. I'll send you the next chapter once I have it ready. I just need to write some more content.

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