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In a region called Warpla, the last of the humans live in various tribes and clans. Hostility still exists in the harsh region over there and the humans remain isolated for hundreds of years.

However, one tribe has reached out to make peaceful negotiations. In the agreement to strengthen the pact between the Tribe and Equestria, they send one student to learn from the School of Friendship. The human's mission is thus: Establish friendly relations and find companions to call their own.


Content Warning: Bit of blood, humans from this imaginary setting and not from the real world, silly stuff closer to Slice-of-Life, Slightly over dramatic

Have fun reading this at home!

Featured on 4/12/2020, a few hours after release
4/21/2020, 4/27/2020, 4/28/2020, 6/11/2020, 10/26/2020

Chapters (25)
Comments ( 188 )

Good story so far. Can't wait for it to continue.

I'm looking forward to see what happens next.

Will Dragon have romantic feelings?(Rus-Eng)

Pretty good start, I'm looking forward to more.

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Maybe, I'm writing this on a whim so I may end up doing that. So maybe so or maybe not.

Sex Tag: Currently for small moments where nudity exists.
Death Tag: Currently may mention those who have already died or passed away.

Do those two things really require tags?

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I'm not really sure, I just wanted readers to be wary
I can remove them if they're unnecessary

I find myself quite interested in this story. It flows very nicely and has quite the enjoyable pacing to it. I like how it goes from individual lesson to individual lesson in each chapter and really showcases how different the cultures really are. The way his culture is absolutely reminds me of Egypt or the Middle East during their equivalent of the Medieval period or sightly before. Kind of reminds me a little of Assassin's Creed 1

It’s good that they didn’t see him completely naked, otherwise they learned the fullness of human biology.(Rus-Eng)

“It’s a crime against humanity!” Pinkie declared. She grips Dragon’s shoulders and says, “Don’t worry! In the name of all things sweet and tasty, I’ll make you everything you’ve missed out!”

Wouldn't Pinkie not know the term "humanity"?

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I was hoping the joke to be that she made up the word on the spot.
Perhaps "Humankind" would have been more suitable since the equivalent "Pony kind" exists?

This is getting good...

Well...........shit

I'm really tempted to dislike this story because of what you wrote in the description, (that the right word?) of "TROLL" But it's far too good for me to be a madlad and do that.

Dude... cliffhanger...not cool lol

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Next part is out
So stop hanging on that cliff

Before I begin, let me start by saying I am blunt and direct. When I say something, it is mewnt to be constructive criticism, not me being a dick.

The students looked at him to see that he was slightly taller than Starlight. He had a large coat seemingly made of feathers. He was overly equipped and his eyes looked as if he had just committed a crime.

That has to be one of the laziest character descriptions I have ever read. No description of skin color, eye color, hair color, hair length, hair style, no mention of HOW he is over equipped. So many details alto make a character memorable, and this just falls flat. He made no impression whatsoever.

“There! Just leave it on and the scar will go away on its own.”

Scars are what is left after a cut, abrasion, or burn is done sealing the skin. Scars CAN heal, but only after years. I think the word you were looking for was 'cut'.

Don't take offense, but this chapter feels more like a rough draft than any sort of finished product. The premise is one that I like and approve of, but the execution is lacking.

Despite how rushed this feels, I genuinely like this chapter.

The ruler should know that everything has a time and place.

The Prince is modeled after Blueblood, I see. Very obvious and meaningless dickhead character.

That 'Prince' is a real piece of shit. Selfish, self-centered, self-important, the epitome of the rich and financially powerful, A.K.A. utterly stupid and spoiled and in dire need of a good savage beating to humble them.

In my opinion, you have a solid ground. Good world building as well, but I think it would habd been a better choice to have humanity more as a tribal society, and less militaristic.

You got me seriously invested in this story. Can't wait for the next installment

Wanted to rename the Dragon Slayer title to Dragon Warrior.(Rus-Eng)

“Why don’t you show him how happy you are?” Sandbar suggested. “You were really worried when he was down the first time-”

I knew that they would soon have romance.(Rus-Eng)

https://www.derpibooru.org/images/2322794?q=Smolder
You need to insert this into a photo in fimfiction.(Rus-Eng)

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That has to be one of the laziest character dexcriptions I have ever read. No description of skin color, eye color, hair color, hair length, hair style, no mention of HOW he is over equipped. So many details alto make a character memorable, and this just falls flat. He made no impression whatsoever.

Yup, you're definitely right. When I first wrote this, I was honestly doing it for more fun and less refinement, especially since I wasn't originally planning to post the story or anything. And so I was giving less detail at the time since I mostly wanted to write the more fun parts of the story. What I said is no excuse, just the reason. (Though, was mine really the laziest? I'll admit it's very lazy, but I want to imagine I'm not the worst describer in the world :twilightblush:)

Scars are what is left after a cut, abrasion, or burn is done sealing the skin. Scars CAN heal, but only after years. I think the word you were looking for was 'cut'.

Yup, I'm an idiot. Thanks for clearing that up. No promises I'll remember though since someone probably told me that before.

Don't take offense, but this chapter feels more like a rough draft than any sort of finished product. The premise is one that I like and approve of, but the execution is lacking.

Probably is considering the origins of how this came to be. Whether or not I go back to correct it depends. I'm writing this story from this sudden motivation to write more stuff for MLP for the heck of it. I would like to fix some mistakes here and there, but I also want to keep moving as much as possible before anything makes me not want to write anymore.

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You know, I guess somehow it went from "Human tribe" to "Human military tribe" when I was writing all of this out.
I'm glad the whimsical writing fever going on with me has made the world building quite interesting to the readers so far.

Thank you for this comment, it's given me something to think about.

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Someone actually made this!? :pinkiegasp:
Thank you for telling me

No way I'm glad to help:twilightsheepish:

I hope in the next chapter Smolder will visit Valiant?(Rus-Eng)

10182634 Don't be too hard on yourself, and don't talk down about creative writing exercises. My story, The Unity Pact, started as a personal creative writing project and became a huge saga.

Just please don’t leave this story. It is very wonderful, I even want to know if Valiant and Smolder will be together?(Rus-Eng)

“I’ve always been able to do those things on my own! There’s no reason for you to do it for me and nothing you can do that I can’t!”

The kid needs to learn that getting help does not make him weak.

Take a look at the deviantart QueenCold profile. Valiant may go to dragon land.(Rus-Eng)

“I packed you an egg sandwich and some of your favorite snacks!” Fluttershy told him, making Valiant’s face blush a bit.

Fluttershy valiant mum it is so cute

Just like a quarrel between parents.(Rus-Eng)

“This is awful.”

MIND BLOWN!

“Well I rarely see you fly. But you have such nice wings.” Valiant explained. “I was remembering how unique they were out of anyone I’ve ever met. I’ve never seen a Changeling before, but you seem to be quite wonderful. Your eyes are also quite special too. While everyone’s eyes do look very nice, yours is very pretty. I don’t know anyone else here or in my homeland who has them that are like yours.”

One of two either Smolder or Ocellus

Will there be cheerleaders team and legion of doom?(Rus-Eng)

Can you add some Undertale abilities for Valiant?(Rus-Eng)

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Can you add some Undertale abilities for Valiant?(Rus-Eng)

What? You mean saving/reloading? or the Monsters abilities?
No, I won't be doing that. How their abilities work is that they can see magic but not use it themselves.
Their markings are done by needle work that alter properties, like making something harder or messing with biology like making them bigger, or giving them wings. Enchantments can be done by them like it was done on the spear.
As mentioned in Part 7, the limitations still exist, such as having the right amount of strength and mentality to handle the alterations.

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Will there be cheerleaders team and legion of doom?(Rus-Eng)

What? You mean from DC Comics?
Because no. I'm not doing that. Sorry.

9 season 15 episode team cheerleaders
9 season 1,2,8,17,24,25

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Oh, that episode. Not sure

How about Hearts and hooves day and Hearth's Warming Eve?(Rus-Eng)

I feel like the Student 6 need to be more understanding of his ways.

When is the new chapter?

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