Twilight Sparkle recovered her crown, made new friends, and redeemed someone with the power of friendship. As far as she knows, all is absolutely right with the world.
Sunset Shimmer can't believe she fell for it.
Also? Blame Wheatley
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Sunset X Wheatley is now canon to the everything of all the thing.
Sunset never said that the brainwashed teenagers were her entire plan. If she could also brainwash normal ponies (entirely plausible), then her taking over Equestria is entirely plausible, especially if her demon form gave her enough strength to battle Celestia, which is very possible.
/shrug
I guess Sunset shimmet march to equestria to conquer but then get tackled and hugged by sun princess and somehow good ending?
All I can say is that I want more.
To quote the most famous/infamous? Villan ever. "I like this story, this is a really nice fucking story!"
There are several small grammatical errors, such as forgetting a full stop or not adding a comma. Other than that I LOVED this story. How does it not have more likes?!
Also, on her plan in the first Equestria Girls, wouldn't the teenagers turn into ponies after going through the portal? She could have a mind-controlled pony army. Still, I don't see WHY she has to take over Equestria, but whatever.
6544254 That may be (and I fully support her demon form being able to take on Celestia), but the way it was put together in the movie made me think she planned to just waltz into Celestia and Luna's stronghold right then and there-if I remember right, the Crystal Mirror was in her throne room. Furthermore, it did not look like the brainwashed people were very capable in story; in fact, based on what little we saw of them, they were more zombie-like than actual thinking beings. Next to useless in the grand scheme of things.
Still, this is all subjective. Just hope you enjoyed the story.
Wheatley looks surprisingly in-character. Kudos to you for that.
I like the idea that the events of Equestria Girls were just a simulation--sure, Family Guy did it first, but who cares?
This was a very good, entertaining story. Mainly because of Wheatley.
Two things. One, WE NEED A SEQUEL.
Two, where's GlaDOS during all this?
6545154 GLaDOS is still deactivated at this time. Story takes place some time before the events of Portal 2. Now, as for a sequel... maybe. I've got an idea in mind, but it'll take awhile to get in motion. A few weeks to a month at least.
6545188 I assumed she was still dormant. I'm not sure Sunset, even with magic, could have beaten her… *shudders*
WOW!!! THIS WAS GREAT!!! CAN WE GET A SEQUEL?!?!
You took meh spot on the feature box XD
Never mind I just took it back XD
stahp iiitt XD lol jk
She didn't create an Element of Harmony.
There's nothing remotely harmonious about it. It's just a powerful magical artifact.
6547862 I feel like I'm falling into a hole here, but I'll just go ahead and say that Sunset is not a reliable narrator/ view point character. She believes she recreated a crown similar to the Element of Magic, only specifically attuned to herself. She's also somewhat delusional and moderately unhinged from her time in Aperture and operating on incomplete information regarding the Elements of Harmony. Who's going to contradict her here? Wheatley?
Point is, Just because she believes she recreated the Element of Magic does not mean it's true. So, in essence, you're absolutely right.
I'll admit I failed as a writer here. I should have made this point a bit more clear without having to directly explain it, but I've got more in the works that will expound on this a bit. Can't say anymore without spoilers.
I enjoyed this little snippet and having played Portal 2 countless times, Let me say that you got Wheatley's character perfect. I want to see a sequel to this. Maybe a little Sunset/Wheatley shipping. Also, I suggest checking out Rainbow Rocks and Friendship Games. They vastly expand on Sunset's character.
Well this is disturbingly similar to my vague idea of a sequel to a story I didn't even write yet, where Sunset was a lead teleportation researcher in the UAC...
6547915 That's fine, thanks.
Tips and Facts with Marsara!!!(Head of By Players For Players)
#1: You got Wheatly's character perfect and Sunsets is vary good.
#2: The concept is good as well as the plot.
#3: Make a sequel if people like it too gain more followers faster.
#4: Go for the ship.
This has been; Tips and Facts with Marsara!!!
Actually I would love to see where this story goes because this captures what I wanted Shimmer to be and you done it perfectly.
This was in my to-read-later shelf for far too long. An excellent story by all measures.
I would like to see this story continued, with the consideration of the further films.
Out of curiosity, did you by any chance read my Sunset story prior to writing this? They're not identical by any chance, but there are a number of similarities. Not accusing you of idea-stealing or anything, I just find it a little odd.
7254910 Apparently, I did read your story a while ago, although I don't know if it was before or after writing this. In fact, I barely recall reading it, and it was only after you pointed it out that I remembered it.
While there are some similarities, they go in radically different directions. I'll admit I may have subconsciously gotten inspiration from your fic, because the base idea-that Sunset was manipulating Twilight in some way-are very similar in both fics, albeit executed in radically different ways. Additionally, Sunset in this is still very much a villain here-insomuch as you can quantify "villain", at least.
Oh, and Wheatley.
7255554 Yeah, I was just kind of wondering since the overall idea was pretty similar in concept