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Majin Syeekoh


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The spirit possessing Twilight knows Sunset Shimmer very well.

It knows what she could have been and reflects in pain on things that never came to pass.


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Comments ( 29 )

That was absolutely fascinating to read. I think my personal favorite thing is the vocabulary you used. It really did make the being feel like something totally separate from everything else. (Plus it was fun to read!)

Lovin' that thesaurus, aren't you, Syeekoh?

A little garbled in some places, but overall, really, really, good and beautiful.

Majin Syeekoh
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6792151 Yeah, I picked the speech very carefully and I'm glad it made it fun to read,


6792153 Did you not know that it speaks in Thesaurese?:trollestia:

Anyway, glad you enjoyed it!

Sunset's personal Nightmare is a fascinating entity, a blend of apocalyptic force and spurned lover. Very cool stuff here, especially how you managed to tie the movies and Sunset's character arc into the production. Great work, Syeekoh.

TGM
TGM #5 · Jan 2nd, 2016 · · ·

An interesting read, really gives perspective on the thoughts and feelings of a demon that could not carry out what it wanted.

Not-goddamnit syeekoh.

Majin Syeekoh
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6792167 I'm glad you liked it!

It's one of those burning ideas that started from a single point and fell into place as it came out, honestly.


6792169 A not-goddammit? Hell really must be freezing over.

6792169

Not-goddamnit syeekoh.

But what if this was his plan all along? Truly, this is the ultimate "goddamnit syeekoh" moment.

Majin Syeekoh
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6792372 Oh no, my plot has been foiled!

Curse you, ZOMG!

It's a fascinating thing, to hear Death whisper sweet nothings in your ear.

this was really something. so very beautiful and one of the very best sunset shimmer stories that i have read. keep up the really good and awesome work.

Not a bad piece.

Though I can't help but be reminded of when I found the Venom Symbiote under "Yandere" on TVTropes...

Majin Syeekoh
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6793875 Thank you. I appreciate it.


6794937 Yeah, I guess the Midnight Demon is a touch yandere.:pinkiecrazy:

I think after the battle of the bands, this spirit got angry at Sunset, went inside the CMC, and attacked Sunset through them. (The anon-a-miss story)

Because I had way too much to say about this story, I reviewed it in a blog post. Also I did that thing where I write more words about a story than the story has. Sorry! :twilightsheepish:

(tl;dr: despite a few things not quite working out, I liked this piece, particularly the strong sense of obsession it builds through its narrative voice.)

Majin Syeekoh
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6798753 I suppose I'll reply formally here.

I enjoyed your in-depth analysis of the story and am looking forward to reading more reviews by you.:twilightsmile:

Damn, now this one is short, but filled with a depth many ten thousand word stories don't match.

This...demon, for lack of a better term, was wonderfully characterized and twisted in its love for Sunset, although it could have had a bit more explanation for the reason why it loved her (I'd imagine it loved her ambition and potential-the monster she could have become). Its reflection and eventual realization of Sunset as its antithesis was exquisite to behold. Makes me want to see a full fight between Demon Sunset and Phoenix alicorn (whatever that was) Sunset at the end of Friendship games.

All in all, a wonderful one shot.

Majin Syeekoh
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6809655 I'm glad you enjoyed it. It means a lot to me.:twilightsmile:

6810895

So, are the Sirens souless now? I wonder how could they survive that.

Majin Syeekoh
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6823866 I suppose you could say the gems contained what made them sirens. That's what they lost.

As for whether or not they have souls... that's way beyond my pay grade.:twilightsheepish:

So Sunset Satan is pretty much the Greater Scope Villain of the whole EQG series? I can dig it.

It's a bit like the Venom Symbiote in its thought process. Actually...

Sunset Satan=Venom (An evil version of our hero)

Daydream Shimmer=Anti-Venom (A previous host of the creature now dedicated to destroying evil.)

Majin Syeekoh
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6890525

So Sunset Satan is pretty much the Greater Scope Villain of the whole EQG series? I can dig it.

Yeah, that was pretty much the idea I was going with.

The Venom similarities only connected when someone else pointed them out.

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Well, that was a thing. :B

Majin Syeekoh
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6922191 It's certainly rather thingy.

Not truly love at all, of course but rather obsession and a desire to possess and control. Not that different from those mad beings in the real world who will kill someone because 'they love them too much to let them go' or some other nonsensical reason.

Hot bloody damn. I'm not sure I was totally prepared for that critical hit to the feels ;-;
Excellent story. Absolutely brilliant. I love how you explored the madness Sunset went through in her demon form as a (semi)sentient being.

DAMN. I have seen stories from the perspective of a bad guy, but this is a rarity (heh!). This is similar to the feeling that an abuser haves when their victim breaks away from them and moves on with their life. They are angry that they cannot be "with" their victim again and that they can no longer affect what they do because their victim no longer cares for them.

Here, though, this demon isn't wanting to be with Sunset, but be her. The demon wants to be Sunset, but cannot, because Sunset is her person and she is well-off on her own.

So the only way that the demon can be Sunset... is to kill her and take her place.

JUST SCREW ME UP WHY DON'T YOU, DAMN

Awkward as hell, style wise. Almost no immersion, I hate to say.

But some poetic bits that work nicely all the same.

BUT

zomg, this would have actually made SENSE of the end of Friendship Games. (If they'd had a longer battle and some inner struggle moment showing exactly what emotional weakness in Twilight ex-Sunset-demon exploited to get in through.)

(On a literal level, obviously it got into SciTwi when she absorbed Sunset's magic. Shouldn't go poking around with instruments measuring variables you barely understand with forces you can only marginally contain. :twilightoops: )

Also, it sheds more light on your thing about evil pov drabbles. I still don't claim to understand it, but this plus that Sonata one I didn't comment on yet feel very heartfelt about _something_.

Glad you write relatively prolifically.

The Elements of Harmony are real bitches.

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