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Sunset happily takes on all her marital responsibilities, even when it means getting up in the middle of the night to have a long, comforting talk with her wife.
No, the other one.

Written for the Sunset Shimmer x Midnight Sparkle Competition and also entered in Bicyclette's SciSet Contest

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aw, this was a cute little read. i love me some midnight-scitwi coexistence, and her dynamic with sunset in this was wonderfully sincere. great work, and best of luck in the contest ^^

Ah, the unique circumstances of your wife having a headmate. Lovely exploration of the concept. Thank you for it and best of luck in the contest.

If you’re interested in submitting, your story’s also eligible for our ongoing SciSet contest! https://www.fimfiction.net/group/216159/bikes-personal-contests/thread/521993/bpc-ix-sciset-contest-2023-aug-07-sep-17

That awkward moment when you cheated on your wife with your other wife who is the same person

I honestly expected demon Sunset to show up, but this was a good ending too

Yes, this was good.
Well written, interesting premise as well.
I did not find any glaring spelling or grammar mistakes either.

Midnight may want to try and talk with Luna a bit more.
A.) she is basically also a night owl and
B.) has had similar experiences before.

for some reason i am now imagining twilight and midnight bickering and trying to take over while having sex just to be the one to get/deny the other the orgasm.
and a very annoyed sunset.

Imagine getting cuckolded... by yourself.
I love this site.

This was lovely. Thank you for writing this. :twilightsmile:

Sunset nodded with an acknowledging hum. It was hard to deny, Midnight had less opportunities to meet people, since she split all her time with Twilight, who often got the lion's share, especially of daytime.

lion's share? :applejackconfused:

Sunset smiled sheepishly. "You could always wake me."

Am I the only one wondering why and how Sunset isn't scared or curious as to why this happens from time to time? :unsuresweetie:

"When I married Twilight, I married you, too," Sunset said firmly, firmly holding eye contact and thus not missing the surprised expression.

Mhm. So there's pretty much nothing to worry about. :twilightsmile:

Twilight felt a surge of jealousy rise within her, then felt it wash over and pass out of her by the time she was even ready to respond. "I see... that explains the feathers, then, too," she noted, feeling over the covers behind her.

Where'd those come from. :applejackconfused:

They laid in silence again for a moment, before Twilight slowly pulled out of the embrace and placed a kiss on her wife's forehead. "I'm gonna make breakfast."

Not surprised by her reaction as it's probably a norm for her. Sorta. :twilightblush:

Heh. Incoming talking points and several lists. Makes for a good breakfast conversation.

Is this a sequel to something? I distinctly remember a story where sunset finds out about midnight and it's the human sunset not the equestrian one this feels like a sequel to that for some reason

Edit: while this fits with the story I described it turns out it's from a different author but it's also I believe been put in the same contest

Okay, this is cute.

Hahaha aw, this is such a cute read. You really capture Midnight well. n_n

I might end up using this idea one day for a story. Would not be 100% the same of course, since I usually have Sci Twi with someone besides Sunset.

But the idea that her wife gets both her and Midnight is too good to leave alone :twilightsmile:.

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Literally nobody fucking cares, spambott :twilightangry2:.

I like this. No terror, no horror, no magic. Just talk.

Nice to see someone approach a dual existence in a non get the evil out way.

Midnight Sparkle as Twilight’s alter post-Friendship Games is a concept that has popped up in fics over the years, but this one does an impressive job of making it really feel fresh and new. Namely in the fact that this is a Midnight who seems to have either grown out of her diabolical, power-hungry phase or simply resigned herself to domesticity; either way, it leads to her having a very interesting and compelling relationship with Sunset. And with Twilight, for that matter, since this is a version of Midnight that seemingly can’t directly communicate with her headmate. It’s a little too short to fulfill its maximum potential, but in its short length it still offers a lot of compelling depth and warm fuzzies, and leaves you wanting more in a good way.

This was great! I never realized how much I wanted to see this side of Midnight. I'd love to see how she opens up to Twilight's other friends, and how she starts building out a life of her own.

The light was the reading lamp attached to the bookshelf, above the armchair, an old piece Twilight's parents had given them for the move, when they didn't own a lot of furniture between them. The padding was starting to sag, but she didn't dare get rid of it.

love this small touch in the environment. really makes this slice of life feel lived-in.

"Is... something wrong?"

"Am I only allowed to be here when something is wrong?"

oof, that says so much, love it

"It's... upsetting. To have your warmth but to know it's not mine."

another great line

She took a quick look around the living room, trying to think of something for them to do together. "So, what should we do? Are you hungry?"

"I let Twilight deal with that sort of thing."

between this and the cold just mentioned, really clear how disconnected Midnight is from the body she is in

"When I married Twilight, I married you, too," Sunset said firmly, firmly holding eye contact and thus not missing the surprised expression.

aww, so true! Sunset knows just what to say

"You know..." She leaned in closer herself, tightening her hold on Sunset's hand. "...there's something else Twilight always gets to keep just to herself."

nice

Twilight felt a surge of jealousy rise within her, then felt it wash over and pass out of her by the time she was even ready to respond. "I see... that explains the feathers, then, too," she noted, feeling over the covers behind her.

ahahaha


short and sweet, and a great exploration of a very fresh concept. the interplay and synthesis between the mundane life Sci-Twi and Sunset are sharing, and the fantastic element of Midnight Sparkle still living in Sci-Twi’s head, are just the kinds of things that i love. 

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