There are only two ponies not joining in on Rainbow's break down. One's a stoic, so the reason is obvious. But what about the Princess of Friendship? Isn't empathy in her job description? And not a single tear.
From Season 5 Episode 5, "Tanks for the Memories."
Inspired from Crying on The Inside By Arwhale.
Yes, I know it's late. As always, your criticism and praise is welcome in equal measure. I do mention shipping, but I think you'll quite like it.
There's also a tiny bit of swearing because in my head canon Twilight would use it for the sake of hyperbole.
I have a video review! Yes, I did watch it, Yes, I know it says don't read it, and frankly you should listen to him! YouTube
Frankly I'm surprised anybody thinks this is good. As mentioned in a tiny blog blurb, I don't plan on revisiting this story because I have other terrible crap to write. I'm sorry for subjecting the internet to this.
But if you think this is bad, just be grateful I don't publish the droll I wrote in High School.
5 up votes but only 1 view?
I'll put this on my to-read.
'can't bear to'
Bare is to reveal, Bear (outside of the animal) is to withstand.
Millennium. Millennia is the plural of millennium.
Otherwise, not bad. Pretty much how I was expecting her to be thinking.
Um...well...
I don't know. This all seems a bit too dark for Twilight. She may be a tad cynical, but this is just taking it way overboard IMHO. The story itself was fine, it's just that this characterization of Twilight didn't jive with me...at all.
Have a like. I-if that's okay with you...
Wow. I'd never thought of that possibility before.
Reckon that's my favourite line.
Interesting take on why Twilight wasn't crying.
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Yeah, agreed here. Twilight is in no way a high functioning sociopath, so unless you slap on an AU tag that's a pretty silly addition to this piece of writing. How is this deserving the dark tag anyway?
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Thanks. I am prone to making bonehead errors.
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You both are right, really. I wanted to try to think why the Princess of Friendship wasn't being empathetic. She's prone to freaking out herself, like Lesson Zero, Swarm of the Century. Honestly this season's Twilight Sparkle seems to lack empathy she gained in previous seasons. She forgot Spike lived with her, basically, and she's confused about why Rainbow is balling. High functioning sociopath is probably a bit much. I blame watching Sherlock.
I understand I probably could have just left it at "good lord this is silly," as well, people like that exist.
I'll consider revisions.
As for the dark tag, I thought it would be appropriate for meditations on mortality. Or, rather, immortality.
Woah!
5954547 Of course she's not. But thinking she might be because she isn't feeling something she thinks she should is normal.
I've heard season 4+ Twilight called 'Heavily Medicated Twilight' because she's so darned *calm* about everything.
5954830 I don't remember the episode super well (since it was kind of dumb IMO) but IIRC she wasn't necessarily not empathetic, just not crying.
I've had various types of leadership roles in my day and what I've found is that experience in crisis management doesn't make you lack empathy, but it does make you better at compartmentalizing. So my feeling was that Twilight wasn't crying not because she didn't feel for Dash, but because she didn't feel it was useful to addressing her concerns.
Not trying to take anything away from the story, of course - one of the cool things about fandom is that we can disagree or reinterpret things as we like. I just found your reaction of "this doesn't make sense" to be interesting since it wasn't one I shared.
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That's actually more what I was going for, and you articulated it better than I did.
It's sort of like not crying at a funeral, except your
tortoise's... Dog's. You think you should feel guilty because everyone else is crying.Yeaaaaaah.
Twilight, the Princess of Shipping.
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Just be happy with what you have at the time...
The random shipping kind of threw me off a little.
5955113 Naw, that's Candy. Twi just picked it up from spending so much time with her.
Not even I’m that bad… anymore.
Heh!
And yeah, this episode was trying to convey something the censors wouldn't allow, so the allegory fell apart.
"And unless there’s a small miracle and you all ascend to Princesses with me,"
Well, unless Twilight dies first, since it was said by the show's staff that Twilight wouldn't outlive her friends, but Cadence would outlive Shining Armor.
Perhaps I shouldn’t get close to anypony.
Which I'm sure Celestia and Luna will tell her is a BIG MISTAKE.
So Twilight can't admit to herself she's fallen for a human?
5955407
Sorry, but what story are you reading?
Since tortoises do not die of old age, and apparently neither will Twilight, she may eventually inherit Tank.
~KBO.
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This one.
5955407 Uh...
Wrong story.
--SYA, The Horse
5954547 She's confusing wondering what the point is with being a monster....again. Huh. It's times like this that I miss G1's Wind Whistler. She would have made sense of this.
5955447
Actually, I mean how Twilight talking about her attraction to RD, comes across as her distracting herself that every time she's in human form, she crushes on Flash Sentry (which given she's in a different body with a different brain chemistry, it's logical that attraction would confuse her while she's in pony form).
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I think these two would either become best friends, or kill each other.
Twilight always does her research.
Of course, Princess Twilight isn't really a sociopath. Maybe pre-ponyville Twilight and human world Twilight though.
5955407 What? This story has no humans in it. You must be high. This is a story where Twilight is thinking Rainbow is foolish for crying about Tank hibernating for three months, when she has to watch all of her friends die while she stays alive do to the Immortality of being an alicorn.
Very good story dear author. I'd like to see this letter to Luna and her response.
-Sanity is overrated
"Twilight will not outlive her friends" - One of the show staff.
5956021
Not canon until it is stated in show. Let me keep my headcanon.
My take on the whole thing:
Rainbow has pretty clearly shown that she is the least mature of the bunch
Rarity is overly dramatic anyway so her crying makes sense.
Pinkie Pie's entire shtick is making others happy, so seeing her friend cry, regardless of legit reason makes her sad.
Best Pony is fragile, handle with care.
Even though Twilight has had to learn lots about friendship, with a few exceptions she's always been shown as the mature one. I don't see not crying over a silly reason as being maladjusted at all. As for Applejack, well...
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And even then, I truly doubt Twilight knows that. Unless, during her time across the portal she ran into M.A. Larson
Twi went totally goth in this one
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M.A. Larson is a Wide-scale, Reality Interfacing, Transdimentional Event Recorder. There is no way a W.R.I.T.E.R. would exist in the Equestria Girl's Universe, since, by definition a W.R.I.T.E.R. recording something fictional must be in the universe above.
5956021 'tis the beauty of fan fiction, my friend: we can do whatever the hell we want.
I, for one, will ALWAYS state Twilight will outlive her friends. Even if they show Twilight dying with her friends IN THE SHOW ITSELF, I'll still say otherwise. Not only is it beautiful irony, but one HELL of a friendship lesson.
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Duh. I know it doesn't. And I know what the story is about. I'm talking about the rather silly random pairings.
5954830
Agreed. High functioning sociopath is a little too, for lack of a better word, dark for best Princess.
Eh... Twilight Sparkle is a problem solver. It's not just a "male thing" to suppress emotions that are keeping you from fixing whatever is causing the emotion. In a choice between crying about something, or figuring out how to deal with that same thing so others won't have to cry any more ...She picks a course of action (right or wrong) and runs with it.
It's part of what makes her a hero.
Remember Season 1 Episode 2, Twilight's charge at Nightmare Moon? Same thing.
Twilight "Badass" Sparkle.
<I don't cry, I get angry. You won't like me when I'm angry.)
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I can't believe how far over everyone's heads this comment went.
He's talking about the inconsequential and unnecessary shipping in the middle of the story.
Other than that my only real complaint is that you used bucking as a substitute for fucking, and the situation didn't really seem to call for either anyway.
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He did explain himself later, and it was a little more clear.
With the whole Flash thing, I resort to "portal magic causes freaky hormones" for an explanation, because TwiDash or SunLight is too adorable.
And when I heard that line, I basically thought what she did, regardless of how the scene was playing out. I stopped, raised my hands toward heaven, and shouted, SHIPPING.
The story is meant to be her thoughts, and her thoughts just happened to be interrupted by what could be read as flirting.
5956045
Actually, whatever the show staff says is canon is canon, it's just subject to change until it's shown.
For instance, those shooting stars AJ saw during Apple Family Reunion were representing her dead parents. Even those of us who didn't know what the show staff said at that point, who had an idea of what a shooting star means, picked up on that. But the show staff made specifically that interpretation canon.
That said, as the author stated, even if we WE know Twilight doesn't outlive her friends, she has to deal with the very real likelihood that she will. Such is the distinction between audience knowledge and character knowledge.
Her self-analyzing reminds me creepily of myself
. I do that ALL the time; I actually mentally write out everything I think or feel or say and I have been doing so since I can remember. Too many books at an early age XD. This as you may imagine adds to my self-consciousness but also causes some strange effects, such as the fact that I'm often amused at myself. Wow, I sound reeeally crazy. Or maybe I don't just sound that way 
5956408
The problem with random shipping no reason or development in the middle of a story that is trying to be serious is that you're assuming the readers will accept that that particular ship is part of the character's inherent personality, and just because you find it cute does not mean everyone does or is willing to accept these ships "for free", as in, without you explaining why this make sense. That's why good romance stories usually take their time to develop if they are not canon ships.
In this case the story is going through Twilight's thought process and reasoning for not crying in this scene, but then in the middle of it there's an offhanded "by the way, i ship this and this and myself with RD" which breaks the flow of the story and takes the reader out of Twilight's thought process because now we're not reading Twilight's mind anymore, we're reading random ship inserts the author finds cute that Twilight has no reason at all to even think about.
It's got the same impact on the story as if you made an offhand remark about how Pinkie and Rarity are pegasi, AJ and Fluttershy are unicorns and Twilight and Rainbow are earth ponies out of nowhere and then move on and never bring it up again.
So, if you want to do non canon ships, do them, but treat them as you would an earth pony Twilight, otherwise you're just inserting yourself in the fic and ultimately catering to a specific audience that wants to read about these characters smooching for no reason.
Normally I wouldn't mind such random shippings so much because it's like a brain bug in fanfics but since it's been pointed out i thought I would elaborate.
Not a bad piece. A nice look into the internal ramblings of Princess Purple. The shipping nod was, I'm afraid I must agree, unnecessary. And yet, inner monologues don't always make sense if they're written as stream-of-consciousness, so I'll let it slide.
However, I can't like this story. Not just because I'm neither a fan of Twilight nor of TwiDash, but because I cannot stand "Immortality Blues" (the idea that becoming an Alicorn made Twilight nigh-immortal like Celestia & Luna). If you want to go with that headcanon, I'm not going to stop you, but I personally reject it.
Looking at your profile, I see this is only your second story. Keep going. Even if I didn't enjoy this fic on principle, I still look forward to reading more from you.
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5956408
I'm going to side with Shogoki here.
While I do appreciate those ships, it just feels out of place in the fic and, if I may be honest, distracts from the overall message that you were trying to convey with Princess Twilight. While I do understand that it is her thoughts and they may or may not be random, inserting ships doesn't make sense for this particular kind of story at all.
5954830 No problem.
My silly headcanon still thinks that Twilight is still salty not being qualified as Dashie's pet
5957026 What?
5956624
I misread your objection to immortality blues, and wrote this:
I have an easy test for Twilight to see if a metaphysical soul exists in her world, and therefore an afterlife. All she needs to do is perform lobotomy on people and see if their personality changes. If no amount of cutting changes their personality, congratulations; an afterlife exists. If cutting some pieces out causes them to lose their current personality and/memories, then I am sad to say you have it like we do here on Earth.
5957258 A long long time ago in a galaxy far....oh what the heck am I saying...here~
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Don't Twilight and Cadence both age normally? They aren't immortal, because they were ascended to be an Alicorn, not born one.