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Twilight floated a second fritter up to her mouth when she realized the first was gone. “What is in these things?” “Mostly love. Love ‘n about three sticks of butter.”

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This story is a sequel to A Fact for Twilight


Applejack's mother was a Manehattan pony who fell in love with Sweet Apple Acres and the farmer who lived there. The gold necklace he gave her wasn't expensive or flashy, but she loved it anyway. Now that Applejack is ready to propose to Twilight with the same necklace, she hopes it really is fit for a princess.

(Cover art base by Sketchy Jackie. This is a stand alone sequel, you don't have to have read A Fact for Twilight.)

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bats #1 · Feb 13th, 2015 · · ·

I reread the ending, just to check to see if I'm still a sap.

*wipes eyes*

Yep, still a sap.

I don't want to be one of those people who constantly demands a sequel but on the other hand my appetite for TwiJack is utterly insatiable

Feed me, Seymour

I really liked this, from Applejack's fear of not giving Twilight something good enough to the way to wrote Applejack's parents to the ending. It was a short, sweet little Hearts and Hooves Day story.

That was beautiful, book. Loved it.

You jerk. you almost made me cry.

Goddamn it bookplayer. :fluttercry:
Carry on.

5622462 He did me! I'm crying more than AJ and Twilight put together right now!

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Of course you are. Which is why you should write more TwiJack.

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I'm always thinking about more TwiJack, so I'll try!

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Thank you!

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Aww, you saps. :ajsmug:
This is also why bats needs to write more TwiJack.

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I approve.

I can't tell if I'm crying because I'm happy, sad, or touched. But I figure there's enough room for all three.

5623137 Hey, can we help it if you know how to write a very emotional story? To say nothing of a real terar-jerker?

And yes, it is.

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You know, I couldn't tell that when I was writing it, which is why I didn't tag it sad...

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Well, thank you.

Going to fave this story. I really liked the part with AJ'S parents. This was lovely.

>You're my fact
That's… strangely fitting.

One of the sweetest stories I've read in a while; I love how you balance this ship so elegantly and cutely.

She got to the spot, where the neat line of apple trees and even grass ended at an overgrown meadow, and across that the White Tail Woods grew thick.

This sentence stuck out to me as jarring; it didn't really feel well-constructed. The first comma feels unnecessary, while the "and across that the White Tail Woods grew thick" doesn't feel like it is constructed properly.

“Go on and dig in. And I’m sorry we couldn’t spend the whole day together.”

The "And" at the start of the second sentence feels a bit weird. You seemed to start a few sentences in dialogue with "ands" when they didn't really feel like they needed to be there.

twenty seven

This should be hyphenated.

I’m sure as the sun.

"Sun" should be capitalized, as it is a proper noun.

Anyway, I liked this a lot better than I liked A Fact for Twilight. Expect a real review Soon (TM). :rainbowwild:

I have written a review of this story; it can be found here.

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But writing more TwiJack requires writing...

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It's kind of complicated. I wouldn't say the story itself was sad, but it had some sad qualities that made me a little bit sad. But other parts of the story made me feel different ways, and the overall tone of the story was a happy one, so I think it was wise to not tag it as sad.

Nicely done,

You really did a good job conveying applejack's emotions and a sort of wistful happiness pervades the story. Favorited to go along with its predecessor :twilightsmile:

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It is feelsy, but I don't think I'd go so far as to label it as sad. It certainly is wistful.

From the cover picture, I was expecting this to be a story of Applejack choking out Twilight. Little disappointed.

Wonderful story, thank you for sharing

Beautiful story. I especially enjoyed the characterization of AJ's parents. Very well done. :twilightsmile:

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Yeah, that is the right word. Wistful.

Nue

My eyes hurt from holding in my tears... Screw it :fluttershbad:

Twijack? As in shipping? Preposterous!
Thanks, for a perfect Hearts and Hooves day story. :heart: Very touching and a nice balance of sentiment and humor. Congrats. (doffs hat)

(I also love how you stuck it to that hideous monstrosity jokingly called a "castle.")

I love this story. I almost cried and if I read it on Saturday, I would have been bawling. You know how to steal our feels.

First of all, beautiful little fic.

Second of all, now I want to see one about them spookifying the castle for Nightmare Night.

This was really lovely :twilightsmile: Very enjoyable read. I loved the flashbacks to AJ's parents, and I could really visualise the scene where she gave Twi the necklace.

You’re my fact.

:')

Don't know what I'm going to do about enjoying all this TwiJack. Any more fics like this and I might just start shipping them myself :twilightblush:

Thanks Bookplayer! Awesome as ever.

Damn it, why did I read this one at work. I can't blame onions in my eyes or anything silly like that.

Wonderful story, Bookplayer. Your characterization of Applejack's parents was wonderful, and despite knowing what was coming, I still felt it. And when AJ chickened out, I literally hitched my breath in worry.

It's stories like these that have made me fall in love with TwiJack!

Very beautiful and sweet.

That was simply lovely

I don't even ship this normally, but this was just lovely.

That was a great story. :pinkiesmile: I think your two are some of the best Twijack I've read :twilightsmile: There is only really 1 to 2 others that got me to read them :twilightblush: I can't seem to find any other ones. :pinkiesad2: Though if you keep this one going I won't need to find any others :rainbowlaugh: Well done.

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Fuck yeah. That's what I was looking for. :D

You don't understand. The Hearts & Hooves event is god awful and I regret making the decision to read and review everything. D: There are so many terrible stories written by amateur authors, and then you go and write this and just about outdo yourself. Hugs for you when next we meet. ;_;

Ooo nice, this was posted on my birthday! I'm going to pretend it's a present for me and not just, you know, the day before Valentines' day. :pinkiehappy:

...annnd now I'm crying! :P

I've always liked the idea of Twijack, even more so after Twilight's ascension - The Princess and the Farmer just has the right fairy-tale feel to it, doesn't it?

That was so cute :pinkiehappy:

Just read this and its prequel. Both rather decent romances. Good characterization, and excellent "point" to each.

Awwwww~:heart: That was so sweet!!!~:ajsmug::twilightsmile:

Huglurf!
:pukesrainbows:

My heart~ :fluttercry: that was so beautiful~<3
Applejack X Twilight OTP kawaii desu :twilightsheepish:

They could just sell that gaudy necklace that would have been more Rarity's style back and use the bits to make an addition to the Apple Homestead just for AJ and Twilight. 'Cause seriously getting some huge over-the-top garish piece of jewelry is so not Applejack.

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