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Twilight floated a second fritter up to her mouth when she realized the first was gone. “What is in these things?” “Mostly love. Love ‘n about three sticks of butter.”

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When they first moved to Ponyville, Fluttershy moved into an ornate cloud house, and Rainbow Dash moved into an animal infested cottage. As they settle into new lives and meet new ponies, they quickly discover that this isn't going to work at all.

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Thanks to DbzOrDie, Church, Bad Horse, and First_Down for proofreading and notes. And thanks to the folks on the forums of the AppleDash group for the discussion that sparked this idea.

Hah! You actually wrote this. :rainbowlaugh:
I shall read it later tonight.

That was pretty cute actually. :yay::rainbowkiss: Very adorable and believable. I liked the contrast and similarities between Dash and Shy's families, and how they interacted with their parents.

And it is such a Pinkie thing to deliver the letters to the houses she thought they would live in. :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy: And it was a nice touch, putting them all in touch with their friends the way you did. Very cute.

Glad to have been a part of this fic :)
I does give a cozy feeling

I knew i recognized this idea. And now to actually read the fic!

:moustache: The story is about RD and Fluttershy. How did you steal the show from them, Pinkie? Again!?
:pinkiesmile: Well, I don't know, But I think “With tape, silly!" helped.
:moustache: Of course it did Pinkie, of course.

Rainbow's letter at the end made me laugh. "I'm gonna go look at my rainbow fountain again." :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
Awesome fic!!! I love the ideas that you had for Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's parents.

Rainbow's letter home was the best thing I have ever read. :rainbowkiss:

Rainbow Dash's letter :rainbowlaugh:
Why isn't this an episode? Seriously, this fits with the show perfectly.
They were all in character, no grammatical errors that I saw, and just the whole idea was great. :twilightsmile:

Happy to have helped. I'm still amazed at how successfully you get inside a character's head and pen their qualities in such unique ways.

Also:
<<Clouds were always a favorite, but on days when they sky was supposed to be clear she had to make do with a nice tree branch.>>
I can't believe I missed it. Should be "the sky" not "they sky". And I should have caught that ahead of time. Sorry.

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Thank you very much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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I have to give all of the credit for that line to Bad Horse. But I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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Thank you! I like Fluttershy and Dash's families too. I might have to use them again.

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Thanks! Glad you liked it.

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Well, Dash's Dad might be a little rough for a kid's show. But thank you so much. :ajsmug:

1137967 Well, its not like they haven't shown anger before. But meh, they could soften him a little.
By the way, I have a theory about Pinkie Pie.
She is a changling-Alicorn mix(by this I mean she can grow a horn or wings whenever she wants). She moves so fast by becoming an Alicorn, she uses her magic to make her horns and wings invisible, allowing her to move extremely fast and go to cloud houses and such. The side effect of this mix is always being hyper. :pinkiecrazy:
(No I don't actually this this. okay maybe I do...)

This makes so much sense that there's no way it would ever have been an Official Episode. :rainbowlaugh:

'Scuse me while I click this star...

I loved this especially the squirrels paying rent joke and the letters at the end :pinkiehappy:

Good sir! You triumph again! And wonderously!

Do I detect the budding of Appledash and Flarity? :heart:

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I can't believe that after four prereaders, I still managed a typo. That line has been there since the first draft. I must have talent. :ajsmug:

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Well, that's one idea. . . :unsuresweetie: :pinkiehappy:

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The highest compliment! Thank you! :rainbowlaugh:

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Thanks! I'm thinking I should have added in some more humor and put a comedy tag on. Oh well, next time I'll know.

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Thank you! (It's madam, but I'll take what I can get in compliments. :twilightsmile: )

. . . and I have been known to ship such things. :raritywink:

That was amazing!
loved it:heart:

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Oh my! Sorry. I know FAR too many writers with gender-neutral or gender-indeterminate FiMFiction names. The only one I remember is Cytotoxin, because she says rather prominently on her page to refer to her as female.

Plus, "Good sir" is automatic, thanks to memes.

Oh yeah! That was great! Good characterization, good grammar, good spelling, good spacing.

You've really hit the nail on the head with Pinkie's characterization here. Too many people miss her good perception of people.

Keep up the good work!

I'm gonna go look at my rainbow fountain again.

Oh, I love your Dash! I also like your take on her and Fluttershy's parents.

Fluttershy is my favorite, thank you for this! :yay:

haha, and I'm totally happy with how you handled the Pinkie Pie situation. "With tape, silly!"

Priceless.

still laghing at that letter from RD.:rainbowlaugh:

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Thank you!

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No problem! It's a totally reasonable assumption. There are just so few girls writing in this fandom, I like to make sure that people know we're here. :ajsmug:

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Thanks! Pinkie is always so hit or miss, so I use her sparingly. But I'm always glad to hear I got it right!

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Thank you! I get a lot of practice at Dash.

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I have to give credit to Bad Horse for that Pinkie Pie line.

I was going to post this as a surprise to you, I know you wanted a Fluttershy fic. But you're so good at Fluttershy I had to ask your advice. But I'm glad you like it, and thank you for your help! :ajsmug:

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Good!

1144428 I am NOT good at Fluttershy :ajbemused:

That is all.

Carry on, you.

I could not find one thing wrong with this story, well done.

Ugh. Two weeks later, I actually do get around to reading this. As always, well written and fun to read. You absolutely nailed Pinkie's unconscious breaking of physics. :P

This is such a fitting perspective that I wish it was canon. It would make a great episode. Also, Pinkie! :pinkiehappy:

This just got my first thumbs up, because it deserves more than it has.

Nice and lighthearted story! I like how it fits just before the events of season one! I'll keep my eyes peeled for your new stories...

Wait, is Pinkie throwing a 'Welcome to Ponyville' party for herself? Never mind, of course she is.:facehoof:

Yet another brilliantly written piece. I really liked how you got Pinkie and Applejack in there. The whole things flowed nicely ...
and just to ruin my beautifully worded review, I'll say it has swag. #Yolo Swag,

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That moment was awesome.
And it reminds me of what I loved so much about this fic. You really captured the flavor of the show. I could see this as an episode, the story being flashbacks and some sort of storyline going on in the present or "future", depending on how you look at it.
... Which gets me thinking ...
... Would you mind if I wrote a continuation of this someday? I can imagine Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's parents coming back to visit and I can't get the story out of my head. I really want to write it. So can I?

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I actually have plans for Dash's parents. This story, Three Little Apples, and Somepony's Daughter are all the same 'verse. I have a planned sequel that deals with Dash introducing AJ to her parents.

However, Fluttershy's family is up for grabs, as long as you work within the other two stories canon (which has nothing to do with Fluttershy, but it has the AU-ish apple family canon..

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That works out, it was mostly Fluttershy's family I was going to focus on. I'll read the other two stories just to make sure, but I don't think this will involve Applejack or the apple family in general. I might mention them though, so it would be good to look at the other ones. I'll probably enjoy them too, so it's not really a chore.
Thanks for the opportunity!

i really like this background for fluttershy and i love all the girls meeting, very cute!

Nicely done! I also believe that this could easily tie in as an actual episode of the show. I have already read a few of your stories and I look forward to reading more of them. Keep up the excellent work!

I really love this concept. I sort of want to see a bit more of it honestly. Seeing Dash and Fluttershy grow and develop seems like something you could handle well.

New headcanon get.

This was totally amazing and I love you for it. :heart:

I wonder what Rainbow's letter after becoming an Element of Harmony looked like :rainbowlaugh:

*Goes to hit the follow button* Oh, wait, I'm already following you. Oops :facehoof: Wonderful story and I'm glad you did a Fluttershy fic. You pulled it off amazingly :raritystarry:

This is wonderful. I absolutely loved Fluttershy's parents, I could totally see her having wealthy/out-of-touch parents, and the way she interacted with them was perfect. Rainbow's father portrayed as being so harsh and disappointed in her is rare, so that was good too. Everything about this fic just fit the characters so well, I am quite impressed. I think this is going to be my new headcanon.

Hey, that was pretty good. It's nice knowing that there's someone else with parents who don't like their offspring's career path, even if they're fictional.

JAG

It could've been expanded a bit, I think; in particular, we don't get to see a whole lot of the actual houses. Fluttershy visiting the cottage for the first time would've been nice to see. Several points felt rushed, too.

But that aside, this was a very fun read. Lots of good dialogue and characterization, and some very funny comedic moments. I liked your take on the parents, too. Even if I did want to knock Fluttershy's parents' heads together. :flutterrage:

I love the end letters!

.......Sequel?!?! :pinkiehappy:

That was funny. Those letters at the end? As Discord would put it: Priceless... priceless! And Pinkie always has her ways so make me smi-... actually, I was kinda laughing... hard... :pinkiehappy:

Nice little tale.
Thank you.

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Fluttershy's parents are perfectly horrible and I love them. :D This whole thing was great!

Rainy! Why doesn't everyone use this nickname for Rainbow?

Her father rolled his eyes. “Oh, I'll be waiting. The day you're a Wonderbolt is the day I'll be King of Equestria, Miss Drop-Out.”

“Shut up!” Dash shouted, flying up in his face. “Shut up shut up shut up!”

Ouch. That hit a personal note for me :pinkiesad2:

"...she's quieter than a mouse in a room fulla cats.”

Now I'm wondering if they could've caught the mouse in the movie Mouse Hunt if they had thrown more cats into the house :pinkiehappy:

A lovely story! One of the few stories would consider to be appropriate for an actual MLP episode.

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