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Sparx


I write fics, often late at night. Some folk like them. Also I like to use the word 'Aye' when I speak.

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Having joined the Wonderbolts to increase her skill as a flier and have fun seemed like a good idea long ago, but after seeing the accomplishments of Rainbow Dash, Spitfire begins to question her freedom, approaching the rainbow maned pegasus one night after a show. When Rainbow Dash is questioned about her motives to join the Wonderbolts, her answer surprises Spitfire, and the two come up with a wonderful idea.

This is my first ponyfic, so I'd like some feedback. If you have any questions I'm glad to answer. Of all the shipping I've seen this is probably my favorite, and this is my take on it.

You can find a Youtube reading of this fic as well! Here's Part One and Part Two
Picture credit goes to bigponymac on Deviantart.com

Chapters (11)
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Comments ( 286 )

A solid start; very few (if any) grammar errors, and it flowed nicely.

I'll be reading the rest!

21033 i agree with this

Great story so far! I don't know what to say that won't be said in the coming days so i'll say this: it made me smile.

Nice start off! :raritywink:
I hope you DO continue your fan fic :rainbowkiss:

Good Start... Hoping for more :3 :rainbowkiss:

ooooOW, this looks like its going to be fun!! I am really looking forward to more. PLease keep up the good work.!

:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

Thank you guys for all the positive feedback. I honestly was expecting this to just be another little shipfic that was just pushed into a little corner of the internet, never to be heard from again. :rainbowderp: So I gotta say this rally makes me pretty happy. :pinkiehappy: I'll try to update as soon as I can. Thanks! :rainbowwild:

Amazing! :raritystarry:
I really liked the story, and the format you were writing in, the structure and all. :yay:
I'd really like to see more! :rainbowkiss:

Aside from some missing punctuation here and there, which is pretty ignorable anyway, I had a blast reading this. I can't wait for the next chapter or two, keep up the awesome work! :pinkiehappy:

wants more, and wants it right now... I am loving this story, its funny, and feels real,

the insight into Spitfire life is a nice touch. I wonder if she will tell Dash the truth that was winder bolts have to many rules and no freedom for new tricks.

Please Keep it up, I am loving this! I already said that didn't I? you know what, who cares, just call me pinkie and it will fit just fine!

:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

Love it! Keep it up!

Nice, I thought Spitfire was just going to show up in Dashes house one day and say, hay I quit the team and I need a place to crash.

But this was really sweet and cute and I loved the "the fastest couple in Equestria" that was great!

please please KEEP up the great work!!!!!!

:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

:rainbowkiss: quite the cute story

:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss: :3 Keeep it up its so cute :3

THIS IS GOING TO BE AWSOME!!

I think, *takes a sip from his tea* it was great, I mean, It was a bit touchy at the kissing part, and *cough* finding that RD and Spitfire are both *cough* lesbians *cough* I liked it.
:yay:

22045 Well that's one of the things I love about the pony universe. It's a predominantly female world so homosexual relationships are pretty common amongst most ship fics. Plus, I kinda thought I set that up in the last two chapters.:rainbowhuh: I think it's cute, and I enjoy that the brony community is very pro gay rights, some of my best friends are gay. I think it's a really good step forward in the world actually, especially since the fanbase seems to be growing constantly every day.:twilightsmile:

Yet another great chapter. Dash and Spitfire are adorable together, especially seeing as how they seem to view each other in a similar heroic light; a fillyhood idol and a symbol of complete freedom :rainbowkiss: . Keep up the awesome work!

22052 Woooooooo BGSA!!!! (I added the B for Bisexual.) Seriously. The guy who intro'd me to ponies is bi, I'm straight, and I have two gay friends who I've been trying to get to watch it for a while. They both don't want to 'cause they know they'll love it. Heh heh heh... :yay: Most males are OC's or AU's. Or both. But lesbianism is practically in the actual show, what with all the sexual tension between everypony! Even Twi and Celly! Big Mac's also like the only real stud in town, and that doesn't leave much room for m/f relationships unless you want to believe the Mating Season in Equestria story-line. :moustache:

22073 ... Dammit, I did it again. I got too caught up on the comments to actually give my praise to the story! :twilightblush: well, 10/5 stars for you, my good (filly/gentlecoat/pegasistah/brony/zebrony/fan of the show who wishes to remaned unclassified) friend!

Just don't bring in the army at this point. :rainbowlaugh:

Like I did... :fluttershysad:

My computer is bugging me, it says you have 4 chapters, but I can only see 3?
Damn you 'Dell' ! :fluttershyouch:

22089 Might be because I'm working on the fourth chapter as well. I'm hoping I'll get it up later, if not then it should be up by the second. :rainbowdetermined2:

This is a very sweet story and a fun read. Not too sensual, yet romantic in its own way.:rainbowkiss:
I require MOAR! *tracks fic*:twilightsmile:

Yay (thats all i need to say):yay:

THIS is just.....AHH!!! so AWESOME!!! -Explodes-

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I like this story a lot :3

Wait, is Spitfire going to have to fight six of Dash's ex-girlfriends and one ex-boyfriend?
Loved the:derpytongue2: bit.

23491 YOU fellow pony have just won an e-cookie and half my internets! :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::twilightsmile::raritystarry::ajsmug::yay:

aaaaaand nows when some psycho fan starts sending death threats to the new happy couple

23495 Nah. You'll wanna check out Samsara's pony fics for things like that.:rainbowdetermined2:

nice dzamie. i think the story is good here as it is. idon't tend to be a fan of rainbow beind lesbien but i am unbiased on the subject of gay morals anyway... but this is good. i like it.

why do i sence a "friend with benifits" senario happening with AJ?

Posted 24 minutes, 57 seconds ago
Fffffffffffuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu........
I got beaten to the Scott Pilgrim joke by frikin 25 minutes... dammit, lol. :rainbowwild:

D'aaaaaaw! :yay: I love the way you portray them, and how you built up to it, not just "OH HAI I LIEK J00 NAO WANNA B MAI GRRLFRIND?" :rainbowkiss:
"OH JA!" *Le jumps on hurr, le slobbery smoochery*
"I PREGGANT SUMHAO!"
:rainbowhuh: "O rly?"

That seems to be how most ships set sail. Titanic had a similar feel to it the third time I watched it. Of course, I hadn't slept for a few days, but still...

Super Big Mac out!

What 'L' word? Lesbian? I laughed so hard I had tears in my eyes! it was great!! and I can totally see
Spitfire as a weather pony or working on the farm! Keep it up!!!!


:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

23465 <<< My reasponse as well :moustache:

Aww this story is so cute :rainbowkiss:

FIrst I was like :pinkiegasp:
And then they were like "No wai!":derpyderp2:
And she was like "Ya wai!":scootangel:
And... Wait where was I going with this?
...:unsuresweetie:
lol, I love how this is going so far! :eeyup:
OMG, I just had an image of Soarin being Captain Cool of the wonderbolts now! :moustache:
:rainbowlaugh:

23762 But of course!:rainbowkiss: Bryan Lee O'Malley is one of the reasons I love writing and Scott Pilgrim is one of my favorite franchises ever! :rainbowdetermined2:

I love d'awwwww stories so much C:

awww....dis so cute...:pinkiehappy:

If you are not proud of your self you are NUTS!!!! But I think Firerain or Rainfire would make a better name LOL

and once again

Congratulations!! Your story is in the featured stories box!!


:twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

Yay! Dashfire shipfic! WOOOo!

Sooooooooooooo... Their own flying team? Iiiiiiiiiiiiiiinteresting... The plot thickens... Heh, Plot... XD

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

*Pulls out a carrot* How about this? :trixieshiftright:
Ehm, sorry. :twilightblush:
Seriously, come on, now I'll think about Dash and Spitfire throughout the whole day! :twilightoops:

I gotta say Hands down....
This is the best Fic I have ever read :scootangel:

Btw when are we getting a new chapter?

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