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Rainbow Dash tries out for the Thunderway 500, a racing event that this year is being held in Ponyville. Can Rainbow hold her nerve in the knowledge that Spitfire is competing too? What do Rainbow and Spitfire discover about one another after a night of heavy drinking? Are they perhaps going too fast?
Thanks to Conicer again who was awesome enough to make some cover art for me again.

Chapters (9)
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Comments ( 88 )

Read similar stuff somewhere else, but this is still good stuff.

Hmmm...:moustache:
I'll watch you for now

hmmm..... looks interesting! :scootangel: going on the read later list :rainbowkiss:

For lack of a gif., dis gon b gud!

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Here, take this!
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And thank you all for your kind words. :twilightsmile:

Thank you for all the great stories!!

Didn't read, but as soon as I saw the title, I thought of this:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bn5NvoWMdqY

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I see some potential, shall I like the plot so far. Please do continue this story, its been a while on fmfic since there has been a romance between RainbowDash and a wonderbolt. Good grammar and all that BS btw. Keep up the good work!

Loving and Tolerant,
YourPalFluttershy:yay:

Ha ha ha ha! Man I love that ending! :rainbowlaugh:

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Aha! Someone noticed! :pinkiehappy:

And yes, I was fully aware how close I was bordering to clop there, so I cut it short, just to piss you off if you wanted more. :trollestia:
Anyways, acknowledgements are in order:
First, the pub name, The Cross and Arrow, named after the first fanfic I ever read: On a Cross and Arrow
Second, the drink Luna's Moonshine, taken from this excellent little fic Drop of Moonshine
There may be others but I forget, anyway, enjoy! Or not. Live your own life. :twilightsheepish:

Okayyyy...it isn't...quite...?
yeah I have no idea what to think yet, I'll tell you when I read next chapter

Great story any idea when it will be updated?

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My aim is to update it every two days. :twilightsmile:

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Isn't quite what? :rainbowderp:
I ask because if I know, it'll help me write better in future. If you're worried it'll turn into clop, don't worry, it won't. :twilightsmile:
Feel free to PM me if you want. :3

Hmm... Yes I like it, but seems hard to connect with the first chapter. Mabey you could fix that in the next chapter. :duck:

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I can totally see why it is hard to connect, which is why I am putting out the new chapter later today, which will hopefully make the whole thing make more sense. :twilightsheepish:

who wants to go on a manhunt for the BASTARD who disliked this? :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

This is INCREDIBLE!

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I just squeeed everywhere, thank you so much, it's comments like this that motivate me. :heart:

711261 you deserve it! 21/1 is incredible and an outrage. WHY IS NOT 21/0? :flutterrage::flutterrage: dat derty basterd :twilightangry2:

My 2 fics are 11/0 and 5/0 :rainbowkiss:

your story amazes me. INCREDIBLE work. :yay:

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I LOVE YOU TOO, KIND READER!!! :heart:

"Yup, Tri Thunder was his name, though he'd already retired when I was born, but still, my younger years were certainly out of the ordinary, dad had always encouraged me to be the best I could be, and I spend next to all my time training and honing my skills, obviously all my hard work paid off and since then my life has been with the Wonderbolts, it'll be nice to see the day of a relatively normal pony, not that you're really a normal pony, in a good way you understand."

That... is one sentence. No periods or otherwise sentence-ending punctuation to be found. Anyone who's read Paradise Lost knows that an insanely long sentence isn't necessarily a run-on, but the one up there most certainly is. Whether you split it up into multiple parts or research the art of using semi-colons and dashes to extend a sentence's length without compromising its grammatical correctness, something should be done about that. :twilightoops:

Other than that, I noticed more little errors in this chapter than in the previous two.

709068 well, to be honest it's not quite :rainbowderp::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:, that make sense?... I want to like it and stuff but something's really throwing me off, it's not about the borderline clop at the end and I enjoyed the whole chapter as a chapter in a story but, and don't take this the wrong way, it doesn't feel like I'm reading a story about Rainbow Dash and Spitfire, I wouldn't want to just say ooc but she's not doing anything particularly character-defying, but she doesn't really seem like Rainbow Dash.
Or really even like a drunken Rainbow Dash.

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I do get what you're saying, I've made a few tweaks in an 5:30am attempt to improve it, but there's not that much I can do really but hope you find future chapters less 'throw off-able.' :twilightsheepish:

Wow, nice story, I WANT MORE:pinkiecrazy:

NOOOOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDDLLLLEEEEEEEEEEES :rainbowkiss:

Nice, I love the story so far, can't wait to see more :yay: *yay*

706032 DAMN IT! i was about to start writing my first chapter on a Guardians of Ga'Hoole crossover now i cant think of a name for it cuz you stole it! *sigh* confound these ponies, they drive me to drink, no matter how much i hate those Dover boys...

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I don't own the name :pinkiesmile:
You can use if you like.
Or maybe you could call it "Take to the Sky," or, "To the Sky"?
Just suggestions. :twilightsmile:

752896 oh ya... i am going to love screwing with the characters with both Twilights and making RBD think Soren is Soarin

YAY DERPY!!!!!!!!!!! WOHOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :derpytongue2:

"I just don't know what went right!" she said jubilantly.

Pure WIN right there.

Does nineteen rainbooms in practice, forgets to even try during the race. :rainbowlaugh:

Id give u a watch, but the button is broken.....WHY MUST YOU TROLL ME INTERNETS:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

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She probably would have if she'd been at the head of the pack to begin with. Can you imagine the devastation a Rainboom would cause if she let loose in the middle of that pack of ponies? Several megatons of raw energy exploding outward in every direction, tossing ponies around like they were made of straw... And since she and Spitfire were neck-and-neck mostly the whole way, it probably would've hit her even harder than everypony else--flying directly into the 'Boom itself would be like flying face-first into the side of a mountain, and then having that mountain push back. It would be an absolute miracle if nopony died, and regardless there would be a myriad of broken bones pretty much all around.

I knew the song she was singing from the first line. I applaud you sur

'scuse me for a moment while I find my eyes. They popped out of my head when Derpy won the race. :derpytongue2:

Great story! I look forward to seeing more!

Did you get the "American Pie" song parady, thing, from someone or did you just make it up?

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I got the idea from this excellent little story, Equestrian Pie
But I wrote the lyrics all by myself. :twilightsmile:

I just had to favorite this cause Derpy won the race, that made me so bucking happy!!!!!:derpyderp1::rainbowlaugh:

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That'll be because I literally just checked my emails. I'll put the edited version up now. :twilightsheepish:

It. Was. AMAZING!!! One of the best damn Spitdash stories ever!

So... Awesome... :rainbowwild:

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*SQUEE!*
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

My dear gallopfrey you never stop amazing me with your stories. You always have me coming back wanting more. I can't wait to read the others.

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