• Member Since 14th Jan, 2012
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RazgrizS57


With enough momentum, pigs fly just fine.

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Derpy is delivering the mail when she encounters a small problem, and she's determined to figure out what it is.

Third place winner in the "One Little Mistake" minific write-off

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Comments ( 8 )

I liked it. Nice and subtle, just the way humor should be.

I have to say this was a very comedy one-shot. Nothing wrong with it. I really like how everything chained together from scene to scene. The dialogue wasn't a problem at all.

Everything about this story was written nicely and made for a nice short comedy read. Simply loved it.

Very nice story once again.

PresentPerfect
Author Interviewer

Nooo, you took out the best line! D: Cake first, sun second! Cake first, sun second!

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It was an accident I swear! ;_;

PresentPerfect
Author Interviewer

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rizgraz how cud u :(

Not everything clicked perfectly for me, but what I disliked was just a minor headcanon conflict thing; it was quite enjoyable regardless, and worth an upvote :twilightsmile:

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Nooo, you put back the worst line! D:

Seriously though, glad to see this get posted. It still flows nicely, and I think the end benefits from the expanded punchline.

RBDash47
Site Blogger

the noodle incident

Snerk.

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