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Soft Story


Hey guys. I'm Soft Story, but please call me Soft. I like to write things and sometimes they get published! I also do a Tumblr thing.

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Twilight Sparkle wakes from a coma after being cursed by a stallion she doesn't remember ever meeting. Princess Celestia and Spike have been taking care of her while she was sleeping. But something is wrong, and Twilight’s memories don’t match up with anypony else's.

This is an AU story of my own twisted imagination. Set after “Games Ponies Play” but before “Magical Mystery Cure” timeline wise (sort of, you'll see). So no Alicorn Twilight here. Tagged Twilight and Celestia as they are the main characters, but other characters do appear in the story.

Descriptions are hard. Big thanks to my Pre-Readers Nakrab and Dumbgamer99!

-- Soft Story

Chapters (22)
Comments ( 953 )

Did... Celestia just execute somepony? :derpyderp1:

Very interesting, so far. I very much want to see what happens next. Twilight having memories that never happened? The possibilities are endless!

Premonitions? Effects of the "curse"? General insanity? I can't wait to see.

4150329 I'm glad you enjoyed what little of it I posted so far. :twilightsmile:

And yes. Celestia did. :trollestia:

4150354 So she did? Oh my god...:twilightoops:

4150357 In a "E for Everyone" way... The original draft was much... more. :twilightsheepish:

Okay, you definitely have my interest. This is what? Maybe the second time I've seen anyone do a similar sort of story (Daemon of Decay's Asylum being the other one - and similar only in the sense of "Twilight wakes up and world =/= Twilight's memories." Asylum also has a sad lack of Spike and Celestia, who one hazards, are going to be front and centre here.)

Premise is very interesting, and you already had me from the first paragraph: I do like to see the evil-doers getting what they actually deserve.

You have my attention, sir. Please continue.

4151452 Similar idea but not quite the same as Asylum. The next few chapters will be exploring this new world I've thought up and hopefully everyone will find it interesting enough to keep reading.

I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! :pinkiehappy:

4151497 Will do. :twilightsmile:

Well now. Is there a Luna at all in this reality?

You have my attention. I'll give this a looksee.

4152954 Glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Also, Luna? Never heard of such a pony. :trollestia:

This looks beyond promising. However, I can't help but feel as though there's something else amiss here. As such, I look forward to more. :twilightsmile:

At first you had my curiosity, but now you have my attention. Pleas continue...

Descriptions are hard. No editor yet, if you're interested in that job let me know!

I'm interested, though I don't think you need one considering that all you need is to put another space between the paragraphs. Example:

Celestia approached the bed and looked down at Twilight. “It’s nearly been a year,” she said softly as Spike jumped from her back to the bed. “The doctors keep saying the same thing. There’s no change.”

Spike’s voice was firm, “She’ll wake up.”

“I’m starting to lose faith,” Celestia replied.

“It’s Twilight. You know she’s coming back. She’ll be upset if you’ve given up on her.” Spike sat down next to his friend and surrogate mother, “Or given up on Equestria.”

The Princess nodded, “Don’t worry, Spike. I’ll handle Equestria just fine.”

Other than that your writing and grammar is pretty solid. With that said,
Me and my army supports this story:pinkiesmile:

4155660 Glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

4157157 Can do. :pinkiehappy:

4157851 It would really speed up my work to get outside opinions on things. So I guess it'd be more Pre-Reader than full editor. And thanks for the suggestion, however I prefer the format to look as if it's the page of a book, where the gaps between represent a scene change of some sort. If more people request a different formatting though I'll update it. Thanks for your support! :twilightsmile:

4157932 Well than I'm interested in the pre-reader position then.:pinkiehappy:

4157970 I'll keep you in mind then, I haven't picked anyone yet. :twilightsmile:

"Jot Down"...
Fucking ace name, but seriously good job, looking forward to the next installation of this series, it's got the gears turning in my head about what's coming next

Wow, relatively short chapter, but it's already got me hooked! Take a fav, thumb, and a watch! :yay:

Hey. This is good.

You should feel good.

I would offer myself as a editor if my schedule wasn't the most unstable thing this side of the North Korean regime.

4158224 Names are a weak point for me, but I felt rather clever about that one. :trollestia:

4158933 They shouldn't ever be any shorter, and if anything might get longer as the story continues. Thanks! :twilightsmile:

4159081 Thanks to everyone's positive feedback so far I am feeling good around it. :heart:

4159754 :rainbowlaugh: It is related. Twilight's memories of the show universe go up to the indicated point. The setting of the story, however, is in the AU. It'll become clearer in future chapters. :trollestia:

Time to board the Train named Non-Stop. next stop...Epicness!:rainbowdetermined2:

No really I like this story and I will now follow it...

Good start! I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes-- Especially if there really are the Mane Six in Ponyville. Then it goes from just a dream to alternate reality~! :pinkiehappy:

It'd be sad if there weren't, though. :rainbowderp:

4161254 Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it! :pinkiehappy:

4161816 :trollestia:

Yes. Just... all of my yes.

4162927 :pinkiegasp: That's a lot of yes. Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

Oh my...
CELESTIA. :trollestia:
This is going to be good....
I can tell. :moustache::moustache::moustache::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2:

4163052 No prob! It's a great idea, after all. Can't wait to see it continued! :twilightsmile:

MORE! MORE, PLEASE!

I love this so far, I cannot wait to see where it is going.
:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

This chapter does very well what an opening chapter is supposed to do. It sets the premise, explains the mood and tone, and lets us know what we're in for. Most of the time this concept is lost on people, but you've got it right how it needs to be. Excellent work, and I look forward to more. :ajsmug:

4167289 Thanks! That means a lot to me coming from you. :twilightsmile:

So the entire show was in her dreams, it seems.

4167893 :trollestia:

4168305 Thanks :twilightsheepish: And uh, no scripts. Nope. Nothing here. No reason at all to come find me. :derpytongue2:

Oh boy. The Pinkie Sense says that Twilight's gonna go to Ponyville looking for her dream friends. :rainbowderp::pinkiegasp::fluttershysad::ajsleepy::raritydespair: But they aren't real. :twilightoops:

Did you know that YOU HAVE TO HAVE SEEN A PERSON/PONY TO HAVE THEM IN YOUR DREAMS?!?!?!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!(!(!(!(!(!(!!('MTV mm,

*replaces "It Was All a Dream" trope with "It Was All a Coma" trope*

Meh, same difference.

If you still need a Pre-Reader (whether to add into your army or to be your first mate), I am more than willing to assist in such an intriguing story becoming even better!

4169318 :twilightsheepish:

4169367 Thanks for the offer! I'm still figuring out my current needs (do I need 1 pre-reader and 1 full editor, or just a few pre-readers) and will be contacting people soon-ish for assistance. :twilightsmile:

Well written and with a truly New Twist I have never seen before ...
This should be very very good ... :heart:

4173052 Glad you enjoyed it so far! :pinkiehappy:

I have a feeling that her 'friends' are actually real, but she just never met them, so they would be all like "Who's this psycho?"

Very interested. And worried.

4174575 If they're real, that would ask the question, if this equestria is real, yet things from the coma are true, things she didn't know before the coma.... Was it a dream... or a vision?

4176016 No reason to be worried. :trollestia:

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