Well, You See....
Wake up. Yawn. Stretch. Check the calendar to see what day it is and what needs to get done.....
"It's date night!" Twilight squeed and rushed down the stairs without bothering to brush her mane. Tonight was the very first monthly date night with Luna since the Kiss. Everything had to be just so, or so help her.
Cupcakes, she'd need cupcakes, and tea, maybe she could ask Zecora for some of her good stuff. Or possibly a little light drink, she had some in the cupboard........
She briefly stopped and glanced in the dusty corner of the library. In that dusty corner was a dusty box, and in that dusty box was her fully illustrated copy of the Kamare Sutra. It had been a rather embarrassing birthday present from Celestia one year, and she had resolved to never even peek inside its pages. She shuddered and went back to making her checklist.
"That should be everything, a nice night of stargazing is what we agreed on, I won't need anything too fancy." She blew faintly on the ink to dry it, then grabbed her checklist and shouted up the stairs that she was going out, then left for Sugarcube Corner, spirits high.
About halfway down the path to the Corner, she began to skip, humming a little tune that a few passerby would recognize as "Honey and The Bee". A unicorn named Rarity was one of those passerby, and she was curious. She went and tapped Twi on the shoulder.
"Twilight, what's got you so chipper? Have you finally found a date?" Rarity teased.
Twilight stopped skipping and froze. She couldn't tell Rarity about Luna, not yet, she'd insist on telling the rest of their friends...
"I'm going to get some cupcakes." It wasn't technically a lie, she was going to get cupcakes. The thought made her feel better.
"You're unusually happy to just be getting cupcakes." Rarity raised her eyebrow. Twilight began to sweat a little. Rarity was unusually perceptive. If that eyebrow went up, seventy percent of the time you were found out.
"Well, I heard Pinkie made a new flavor of cupcakes, I'm excited to see what they taste like." Rarity's eyebrow was still persistently raised as she walked away. Twilight waited until her diamond-studded flank was out of sight before letting out a sigh of relief, then resuming her skipping.
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Something went down that day of days. Something that not even the oldest Lunar Guards had ever witnessed. Ever. Something that Celestia had gone on record to say Luna never did.
Luna was skipping.
As well as humming a tune. Sure, she'd run and play with her sister quite a bit, and she'd fly for a bit on occasion, but skip? Blasphemy. She had to keep at least a few shards of dignity intact.
To Tartarus with dignity on this day! Luna mentally shouted with glee. Today is our first date night with Twilight Sparkle! Wait. Not our. My. Come now, Luna, Tia's been doing her best to teach you new Equuish, you might as well use her teachings.
She skipped along down the halls, her wings carrying her a short distance before she landed, immediately hopping into another skip. She had her eyes closed in joy during this activity, so looking back this was most likely the reason she smacked into Tia's flank.
Her older sister looked down at her in amusement. "What's got you so happy, Lulu?"
Luna began to sweat. As joyous as Twilight was, she was Tia's student, and a commoner. She couldn't have Tia know she was dating her, at least not yet.....
"I got quite a few constellations done from the charts." She actually had, and she'd also made a special one for Twilight. That wasn't a lie, she just wasn't telling everything she knew.
"Well, that's certainly good. Be careful not to bump into anypony else."
"I will. Oh, and can I go down to Ponyville this evening?"
"Sure." Celestia chuckled as Luna skipped off. Ever since Luna had gone down to introduce herself to the Ponyville ponies on their Nightmare Night, she'd been spending an awful lot of time there. She's up to something. You know, maybe I'll go down to Ponyville.
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"Okay. Cupcakes? Check. Tea? Check. Every book about stars, stargazing, and the night sky I own? Check. It's a good thing I'm so organized. Wait. I still need pillows!" Twilight took a few minutes to scatter pillows everywhere around the desk in the center of the library. She stepped back. "There."
Somepony rapped smartly on the door. "Enter."
A dark blue alicorn stepped in. She didn't need to comb her mane, as it was made of ethereal matter, but it had a combed appearance even so. "Hello, Twilight Sparkle."
"Lulu!" Twilight nuzzled her. "I'm so glad you're here."
"I'm glad to be here as well, Twilight. I was almost found out. When do you think we should tell them?"
Twilight bit her lip. "I don't know. Once we've had a few more date nights, gotten on some more stable ground, then maybe, but not yet. Not now."
Luna nuzzled her lavender comrade. "Alright then. I trust you. In the meantime, why don't we snuggle?" She patted the cushion next to her. Twilight happily obliged.
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Celestia glided neatly downwards, landing next to a white unicorn she recognized as Rarity. Rarity was so focused on the door that she didn't notice the princess for a full half minute.
"Oh! Your Highness! Hello." She scrambled into a bow.
"Rise, Miss Rarity. Are you here to visit Twilight as well?"
She nodded. "She's been acting a bit odd, and she never goes out to get cupcakes just to see what they taste like, wasting precious research time. I'm going to see what's up."
"Luna's been acting oddly as well. She was skipping earlier today, and she never skips. And she's been going down to Ponyville quite often." A slow smile crossed Celestia's lips. "Are you thinking what I'm thinking?"
Rarity squealed. "That they're dating? I hadn't considered that, but now that you mention it....Oh, that sneaky Twilight! I'm going in!" She squealed again and pushed open the door, to reveal Twilight and Luna cuddling cozily. They both froze as they heard her.
"It's not what you think!" They both said at the same time, scooting rapidly away from each other.
"I just wanted to find-"
"We were just-"
Rarity laughed. "Don't even bother. I'm happy for both of you!"
Twilight relaxed. "Promise you'll keep this a secret from the others until we're ready to tell them, though, okay? Pinkie Promise?"
"Cross my heart, wish to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye." Rarity made the motions.
Luna remained anxious. "Please tell me Sister isn't here."
"Am I interrupting?" Celestia stepped in the doorway, noting Luna's mortification. "Lulu, you were far too obvious."
Facecushions were now a thing.
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Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy sat atop a cloud, watching Twilight and Luna sit together, saying nothing.
"They're so cute together. I wonder why they waited so long to tell us?" Fluttershy scooted a little closer to Rainbow Dash.
"Eh, you know Twi. She's so shy about everything involving relationships, maybe she was scared. I could understand that. Or maybe she was just planning on keeping it a surprise until they got married."
"And we'll never know."
"But you know what we will know?"
"What?"
"That our love is by no means a secret." Rainbow leaned over and kissed Fluttershy.
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F*#@KING FLUTTERDASH!!!!!! HELL YEAH!!!!!!
F*#@KING TWILUNA!!!!!! HELL NOOO!!!!!!
A little awkward to read at times, feels like you were trying too hard at times... not that it's a bad story, not at all, it's a charming, quick read but it just didn't draw me in like other fics of a similar subject.
You did fine, mah boil, ya did fine.
Nice One-Shot and with my favorite pairings too.
Nice and simple. Very elegant, though a bit overused. XD
3907091 What did you expect, Fleshlight?
This was so adorable.
That was very abrupt. It would benefit from a bit more depth of description as it felt like you were pushing the story the entire way rather than letting the plot steer the tale. Rarity instantly getting Celestia's obscure, unfinished sentence, for example. It takes quite a bit of familiarity with someone's thought process to be able to do that. There were a couple of instances where it felt like the characters were just a little bit off-kilter - Celestia was overly formal at one point, for example.
Critique aside, I think the premise is delightful and the story in itself is very sweet. I definitely enjoyed it. Thumbs up from me!
Umm men the Pinkie Promise is "Cross my heart hope (not wish) to fly stick a cupcake in my eye"
3908937 3908004 No I'm just making a reference to the guy who posted below me.
>>Facecushions were now a thing.
This line is very unclear as to who's face is being cushioned and has an informal tone that is quite jarring. As the final line of the main plot, it is one of the most important lines of your story. The ending falls flat, as there is no real reaction shown.
The final scene is choppy at best. The time and place are left undefined, I can't tell if this is the same night or weeks later.
>"But you know what we will know?"
>"What?"
>"That our love is by no means a secret." Rainbow leaned over and kissed Flutters.
This is confusingly phrased, and could be far more easily replaced by something along the lines of "Aren't you glad that we aren't that silly?" Also, never use nicknames in dialogue tags.
Fluffy sweet TwiLuna is always a good thing! It didn't need the FlutterDash ending, but otherwise nicely cute.
Illustrated Kamare Sutra for a birthday present? Gee, I wonder where Celestia got that idea?
General feeling after this chapter...
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3910329 Yep, that was inspired by LLTM.
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Thanks! That's such an awesome feeling. HUZZAH!
This was so cute
I thought this was some sort of strange foreshadowing, but upon completing the story, the book was never mentioned again. Why the heck was it mentioned in the first place? Am I just that stupid that I can't let it go? The answer is yes.
3913607 It was a reference, silly.
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Then I am indeed stupid, as I foretold.
............ cute could use a bit of work but good job
Nice, but it could use more padding, as well as more story. I suggest continuing it.
What a super cute fic! i'd love to see you expand on this!
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Precisely what I was thinking!
A little too quick but its sweet.
*smashes monitor on ground* ANOTHER!
Huh. Well, that was short.
A thousand yeses!
4408928 What? How the fuck am I wrong? It's clearly a shitty TwiLuna pairing.
4408928 What? How the fuck am I wrong? It's clearly a shitty TwiLuna pairing.
4411629 Because I didn't. Your argument is invalid.
Is the title possibly a joke on a book named Confessions from a shopaholic?
4520317 Maaaaybe...
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Wow, TwiLuna and FlutterDash in the same story?
You my friend have earned the Triplet Reward of a like fave and follow. Cheers!
I agree, sorta, with yur AN. It doesn't have much of a plot. I have to ask. How do you make it interesting without something as vital as the heart, lungs, and brain to never go out of sync, or just spontaneously stopped working.
Nice to read a cute story with two of my fave pairings.
I've reviewed your story HERE!
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In every Twiluna Fanfic I read lately ur in the comments. I think we have similar tastes.
Was Celly trying to tell her something?
Twiluna AND Flutterdash! you just made my day
Beautiful!
Also a lovely twist in the tail.
Nicely written and a joy to read!
Twiluna and Flutterdash in a single fic.
I salute you.
On my "Adorables" shelf.