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Hawt
anthro and drinking? sigh.....
3653255
i concur
I guess I'll give a Princest story a go. *sees anthro tag* Never mind.
3654392 Then why comment?
3653255>>3654233
Agreed with these two.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3654233>>3654751
3653255>>3654233>>3654751
With me that makes 4.
Now talking a bit more serious, Thanks for reading. I hope I did a fine job with my first story.
3654940 I actually did not read it because >anthro. I'm just assuming that it's hawt to people who like that kind of thing
3654940
I actually did read.
Felt you did it quit well, really.
~Skeeter The Lurker
3654681 Because I can?
Nice concept, but you really need to get an editor to give it a once over. Some really clunky language and grammar in places, the wrong words used in a few places... Good try, I'll keep an eye out from more from you.
3654940 Is good, make no mistake about that. Has room for improvement, sure, but everything does. Pony on :3
And - yep, editor, prereader would be godsent.
Would have been better with actual ponies and not some human pony mutant...
Welp, that happened. I'll try anything at least once.
English may not be your main language, but you didn't really have that many spelling errors. I did notice that you kept using past tense a lot, even for things happening in the present, so you just need to work on that. Also a couple of missing words, but there is enough there to piece together what is trying to be communicated. The story overall could have worked fine if they were human, but it's your story, i'm not going to judge. Don't let nobody give you crap for what you want to do.
Egh... The grammar is not strong with this one.
I will be happy to edit this for your if you sent me the document.
If there's someone who could edit this story, I would appreciate it.
3656646 Maybe later
3656646
I may be able to. PM me the original GDoc and I'll take a look.
Why is it I dislike anthro so much yet I continue to read them? Hmm...
3665590 Your name is the answer.
3665625 alekhagrawal.files.wordpress.com/2011/01/barney-stinson.jpg
The story it's self was alright, but... You rushed the clop. Not giving a long enough time between orgasms. I mean, you made it sound almost as if they came as soon as they began touching each other. I love the story though.
I think the same as 3671794, but I guess that's because it is your first story.
Other then a few minor gramical errors it was great.just work on your pacing and fix those minor grammer errors and you my friend have real potential as a clop writer(sorry it there is any spelling mistakes im writing this on my phone)
Are you going to update a new chapter soon?
4185770 Whoops, sorry for the late reply, I had been travelling a lot, so I haven't logged in in a long time.
Hummm, well, I have given some thought to adding a second chapter, but not yet. I'm currently working in a new story.
Okay, review time ^^
To start out, I like this story, you portrayed the two Princesses very well :) I just love how close the two became in this story, its very, heartfelt I guess the word is.
There are some mistakes here and there but other then that you did a very great job on this story :)
I honestly hope to see more of this, I like how you wrote this out :) legit.
Keep it up my friend, your friend.
~ Dustchu
4325772 Thanks again for the comment.
I did my best to give that, heartfelt, feeling.
4330906
You're quite welcome my friend :)
Yes you did, it was awesome~
Incest is Wincest when its between sisters.
i.imgur.com/tfZQS.jpg
Sensitive not sensible.
I like this. Good job!