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The Grimm Reaper


The Grimm Reaper is the writer of the 'Darkness Duology', 'Immortal', 'They Come at Night... Mostly!' and 'Only Bone Deep'. Among others.

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A freak accident leaves Princess Twilight Sparkle blind. With magic unable to help her see again she is resigned to her fate as a shadow of her former self.

Sadness and depression strike hard and fast nearly every day. But luckily for the disable princess, she may stumble across an organisation that could help her to see again. But miracles don't come freely, fortunately, she may have a guardian watching over her.

:: ORIGINAL VERSION FEATURED 9/6/2014::

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 147 )

gonna wait till more comes out to read.

I am sooo gunna wait for more of this! :pinkiehappy:

will twi become an alicorn again?

Ah. 13 ponies, that's a unlucky number... for the Princess'. They are going to fail.

This story intrigues me. Please continue writing. Or to be more upfront.
MOAR!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage:

These guys seems like a fusion of Organization XIII and the Espada.

ha ... organization 13

I request moar of this!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

... I can say that although the idea is interesting the execution was far less. Everything seemed rushed, no build-up between any of the characters problems, and no room for the reader to breathe. This would have been much better if it was stretched to several more chapters instead of just one.

Celestia... :facehoof: You idiot... after 1000 years of banishing, and you seriously did not learn one thing about it? I think Twilight should be teaching you about friendship, rather than 'you teach' her...

i have to point out that things cannot be good in relation to the crystal empire right now. i don't care how you see it cadence might not declare war on equestria but considering the crystal empire looks on twilight as one of it's saviors and considering above all else it's prince is her brother. definatly looking at a full trade embargo, closing of border traffic in and out. expoditing ambassadors and other figures, to be frank celestias hold on the crystal empire (it's not really part of equestria if you look at where it is, it's out of the kingdoms borders so essentialy it's it's own nation.)

I find this story to be rather astonishing! Keep it up old chap. I am sure this story is going to be a smashing success!:moustache:

hey man, you have any ideas what is the uploading routine you gonna have? like 1 a week or 1 every 2 days or something?

wow this story is really interesting and i'm actually curious on where this goes :moustache:

Organzation XIII, woot, woot! :twilightsheepish:

Im looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up.

Wait how did her wings dissapear? Oh BTW good chapter

Oh no.... Twilight needs to get out of there... she does not want to be the thirteenth vessel.....

Sorry, not read it yet. but that description..... shudders*....

..This world has been connected..

UPDATE RAPIDLY PLZ!!!:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

BTW GREAT STORY BRONY!

organization 13 twilight shall rise

I thought this was gonna be weird... I like it!

Comment posted by TheResistance deleted Aug 27th, 2013

Ummmm ... A few valid questions.


1) How in the hell did she lose her Alicorn status?

It was formed by her own Magic. Even if you are on the team that believes that Celestia knew what the spell was. That doesn't change the fact that it was Twilight and the EoH that did it. So her loosing her Alicorn status makes no sense. Loosing politcal station is one thing (see below), but her loosing her wings makes no sense.

2) She was a Princess for how long? Compared to the Centuries if not Millenium from Luna and Celestia. Twilight was a Princess for a much shorter time, if anything they are to blame not Twilight. And they are the Physical Deities of their planet. They have power over the sun, moon, and stars. Along with power many times higher than a normal Pony.


If they wanted to they could deny the sun and moon until the ponies dropped stupid talk of Democracy. Or release one of the many horrors they have released without warning the ponies above it [and the EoH wouldn't work on a Orderly / non-evil being that destroyed for a natural reason.] Hell release the creatures that the Princesses had to lock away in Tartarus because the EoH couldn't hurt them. Let the ponies see what the Princesses save them from on a daily basis.

I just don't see two Dieties stepping down from the throne for as Celestia pointed out a form of government that would destroy the planet [paraphrased], and lead the ponies to ruin. And to blame Twilight rather than themselves for putting an inexperienced Princess who made the same mistakes that they most definitely made when they were younger in a much more war torn Equestria. Makes no sense.

Although even if they take the [we aren't Tyrants] route. They still can let the citizens deal with the horrors they keep away from Equestria and they'd come crawling back to them. Or when their civilization has nearly been destroyed by their stupidity they could step in, defeat the threat with their epic Goddess Powers, and take up the throne again.

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Those are my only two problems with the story and don't make sense to me.

That beings said I'm adding it to my read later list and will be checking up to see if the next chapter. It's not really a bad fic. It's well written, has a good build up, and is decent. Other than those two things that just don't make sense it's an enjoyable dark fic. I can't wait to see what happens later.

Okay, you just made me register in the site... And it's all because of something most likely stupid.
If he's Zero (and if it's his number) and there are twelve of them not counting Twilight....
Then.... Let's count: 1 - Zero, 2 - One, 3 - Two, 4 - Three, 5 - Four, 6 - Five, 7 - Six, 8 - Seven, 9 -Eight, 10 - Nine, 11 - Ten and that makes the Twelfth pony Eleven.
That would make Twilight number Twelve.
Am I wrong?
Oh and by the way, love your stuff. Need more.

3115171 There used to be thirteen, but he was... shall we say banished for misconduct within the organisation. He was number 12.

Is Twilight joining some expy of Organization XIII?

3116397 Ah, plot device... Nice, I like...

A fav for now, since I really want to see where this story goes.

WOW
the cover art is just, AWESOME!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:
DEFINITELY GONNA READ THIS... tomorrow :twilightblush::twilightsheepish:

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GONNNA READ IT NOW!!!!!!!!!
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*after finished*
too short :'(
but please continue :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

This is an amazing story, I can hardly wait for what comes next.

Owwww celestia burns doesn't it :pinkiecrazy:

Excuse me, I need a moment to compose my self... Ah right now where was I. Oh, right the story, ahem MOAR:flutterrage:

are the chapters always going to be this far apart? they're good in quality, don't get me wrong, but this interests me so much that i don't like having to wait for new chapters.

MOAR:flutterrage:...... plz :scootangel:

When I read that Twilight was 13, I can't help but think she's going to be used as a puppet. And then get cloned, to make another puppet. Then make friends with that puppet, and then at the end the puppet dies, and no one remembers her. So she ditches the organization to try stop Xemnas from having Kingdom Hearts but gets in a fight wi-

I'm sure it's not like. :pinkiecrazy:

I'm curious about the process for joining now...

The numbers keep making me think about kingdom hearts. And the name "The Fallen" makes me think about Transformers: Revenge of the Fallen

First time ever I felt this weird feeling in my stomach while reading a story.
Good job. :twilightsmile:
Also, wow, I completely forgot about this story. I hope updates are going to be more frequent from now on.

Not sure about spike and the mane 6 disbanding plus I'd of thought the others would've put up a bigger fight. But I can see the possibility of rivals fights etc

Looking forward to this story big potential!

Good story keep it coming!

Meh, not so much in the feels really. She pretty much showed up, said I'm ditching you, and left. Maybe if you had given a bit more dialogue with why she was abandoning her friends instead of just saying she was leaving them because of Celestia, maybe give a more personal reason on why she didn't want to be friends with them instead of 'Yeah, because of Celestia I'm became friends with you (and ignoring all the time spent together) and because of her I'm leaving you' maybe something more akin to 'I'm leaving you Applejack because of this reason, I'm leaving you Rarity because of this reason' and etc. Your way kind of makes her seem like a child having a fit and is just taking it out on the rest of the Mane Six. I recommend taking a look at the story 'Faith and Doubt by Defender2222'.

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