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I'm a brony who loves making fan-fictions and give my opinion on movies I've seen.


Deadpool randomly comes to Equestria and the ponies try to figure out how to send him back to his world, but two previous villains teaming up to take over Equestria is in the way. So, it's up to Twilight and her friends to stop and defeat them, along with the help of Deadpool.

Anthro tag: Pinkie Pie is the only anthro (Chapter 5) in the story, ...or is she! (Spoilers)

Credit goes to King of Kings for editing chapters 1 through 4.

((Second story to get featured. I'm on a roll. lol))

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 223 )

Well I'm sold, 10 bits says Deadpool "gets it on" with Pinkie Pie:trollestia:

Though it would be nice to know how Deadpool got to Equestria in the first place, then again this is Deadpool we're talking about here.

Mutters That Deadpool Didn't Kill Gilda

This is the sort of thing that would be really good if done by a good author.

2291950 are you saying, I'm not a good author?

2291934 Relax, Gilda will return. This is just a piece of what's to come for everyones hated griffon >:)

"Are you saying I'm not a good author," said Dashzilla93.

You see, the problem, one of the at least, is that you used the word said too many times. Using said too many times makes it seem like everyone's speaking in monotone.

Then, you didn't describe much. There's a few sections but for the most part it's all dialogue. That's bad.

Lastly, the Pie in Pinkie Pie has to be capitalized.

Dear sweet Celestia, that 4th wall is never going to recover. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: I like!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

2292555 Thank you for pointing the problems out. Now I can finally fix them :twilightsmile:

Gilda... Stop asking Deadpool to shut up. He never will! Many have tried... None succeeded.

“You know what, forget this! You’re just as annoying as Pinkie Pie. I’m out of here”
Thats Gilda, part bird, part cat, ALL chicken:trollestia:

There are a lot of grammatical errors, a lot of repetitive words, your not being as descriptive as you should be, and it seems a little fast paced even after the fight scene. If you want I could be your editor, if you don't have enough.

2298225 sure, I don't mind, but the reason it's fast paced is because I have more chapters in mind. also, grammatical error! dang it, why can't I get those right.:twilightangry2:

2299105 Just PM me on how you would like to go about this, the me-being-one-of-your-editors thing.

You should write more please :twilightsmile:

I can't wait to see what happens when deadpool meets the gang, or better yet celestia, I smell sitcom

Fact:I Have No Idea Who Deadpool Is But From What He Says In The Story He Sounds Funny:pinkiesmile::rainbowkiss::twilightsmile: Random Fact: I Got Bored One Day And Made Glados's Son If She Had One And He Was A Pony And That Is My Account Picture

Yes! Update on the best 4th wall breakers in the known and unknown universes! You have made my evening good sir!

Alright, it was… Queen” BONK

Ah, the dastardly evil Queen Bonk of Bonkovia. Deadpool stands little chance against her.
I like this but you may want to watch out with your paragraphs. You should at most have only one speaker per paragraph otherwise readers get confused. There were other slight mistakes, such as a lack of capitalization of the Dash portion of Rainbow's name and a few missing punctuation. Ohter than that, great stuff!

2631774 thanks for the info. can you point out the missing punctuation so I can fix them, please.

I love this story. It's funny, and awesome at the same time. Please continue.

No one steals diamonds but me” Nice One:trollestia:

Wait... Does this meeeean.... Are we gonna see Cable, T-Ray, and other guest stars?! :D

Is it wrong to think Pinkie Pie getting shot is funny?:pinkiesick:
Maybe... But she thought is hilarious:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

2771978 oh, more will come, but I won't spoil :trollestia:

dear god there are two dead pools now! and its pinkie seen it coming but wow.:pinkiehappy:
this is good please continue this.



With Pinkie practically being like Deadpool and now having a healing factor, she would make an EXCELLENT member of the Deadpool Corp.
PINKPOOL The Mare with the mouth

added a new feature to one of the chapters. I think it's a perfect addition :pinkiehappy:


43 like. thanks everypony. You all rock. Chapter 5 might be a while, cause with another villain appearing (being that this one is minor and very well known), I'm trying my best to make this chapter as epic as possible. And believe me when I say epic: it's Deadpool, what do you expect? :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

gotta love the deadpool and pinkie action :yay: :pinkiehappy:

You totally nailed Deadpool's character perfectly keep going deserves more views

2912694 oh I'm working on it. I'm just taking my time with the next chapter. as deadpool always says... :rainbowhuh::rainbowhuh: um... I have no clue.

If you want to know moar obout DP go watch on youtube pewdiepie's videos obout him. I hope i helped :twilightblush:
Btw AWSOME STORY i woud look foward to reading it :pinkiehappy:

you nailed his personality spot on

dead pool is hear to kick ass and take names

“Who am I? Do you know who I am? I’m the Juggernaut” shout Juggernaut



2931080 I could've used that for the story! lol. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

2927917 oh I have the game. And I'm learning a lot :3 it'll be awhile for chapter five. :pinkiehappy:

Deadpool is a Marvel hero who will laugh at you if you chop off his head. Close enough.

2349135 eRGH mAH gAWD iT'S cAPtAINcAPiTAL!

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