Dash the Stampede was the legendary outlaw known for destroying any city she visited. Supposedly she is 12 feet tall, master of the elements, a demon straight from hell, a gunmare who has never missed a shot, and wearing an outfit that is one of a kind. And with a reward of 60 billion double bits on her head, and an ego just as big, everyone wants to find her and turn her in. It has been 12 years since she was last seen, and the reward was never claimed, and she has been long forgotten. But in the tiny oasis town of Ponyville, there lives a pegasus who remembers the tale. And when a group of 100 outlaws arrive in the tiny town, wanting the land for its high value, they want to take everything. So when everyone save a rainbow haired pegasus is willing to surrender to these outlaws, will the long lost outlaw come out of retirement for the good of her town and her friends? Or will her past come back to haunt her?
Crossover with Trigun
(The image does not belong to me. All credit goes to the creator, Evion on Deviantart.)
First attempt at a crossover fic
Came for the Cover Pic, Stayed for the (D)Vash.
SWEET! I liek it!
Keep up the good work.
11 likes, 28 views, 0 dislikes, 10 favs, and 1 watch. That is a new record for myself, especially since it has been less than a half hour from getting this story approved. At this rate it might be featured
And if it is, it will be my first ever feature!
(I will update this counter regularly. And the story either weekly or monthly or perhaps every other day)
Honestly? Been waiting for this one since a friend had a Freudian Slip talking about Trigun several months ago. :D
I just finished watching the whole series and I got to say, out of character.
Other than that I like it. Its about time I found a Trigun crossover. Although you should have made Vash instead of using RD. But that is my opinion.
Do what must be done!
~Rokkurin
I bucking want to hug you tightly for making this come to life!
you sir made this work
Oh yeah, totally watching this one.
OK, first let's touch upon the grammatical errors in your description:
Correcting the red text in order:
1. Delete this comma.
2. Delete this comma.
3. tall
4. straight
5. and wearing an
6. pegasus
7. its
8. Delete this comma.
9. pegasus
10. Question mark instead of a period.
As to the story itself...
You're missing periods at the end of almost every paragraph. There are also a LOT of other errors I don't have the time to point out. Get a prereader, or learn to proofread your own story.
I think you tried to push this one out in a hurry so you could "first" the Trigun crossover idea, based on your thread on the forum, even though you missed the mark by about a year and a half.
Making it anthro cheapens it. It shows that you're unwilling to deal with the challenge of figuring out how ponies can use guns. Plus, it's incomprehensible why you would go anthro with this, when you could just go fully humanized and then not have 'mare' and 'stallion' in the same paragraph as 'fingers'.
This feels like you're trying to distill the essence of Trigun, vaguely ponify it kindasorta but not really, and are generally in far more of a hurry than is healthy for your story.
Won't track, won't upvote but won't downvote either. Will recommend you go back over this thoroughly and consider a complete ground-up rewrite. As it is now, this story sorely lacks in quality.
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There are other Trigun crossovers on this site. There aren't many, but they've been around a lot longer than this, and have higher quality because they aren't as rushed and forced as this.
Skygun, for instance. I started it over a year ago. It's unfinished, but I intend to get back to it fairly soon.
Oh, and please note that I'm not putting this story down because it's "competition". Writers write similiar stories all the time, it happens. My problem with this guy's story is that it's very rushed, wasn't proofread, and is full of errors and things that just don't work for me.
A very interesting story. If anything, I vote for it anthro, but you still decide on that one.
That hurt me a lot to do that. I'm sorry but I had to down vote this. To me, it feels like you're not capturing the Trigun side of this.
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its fine, im still building it up. But I can understand why it was hard.
This sounds good, and this time, if it was Vash, she finds a nice place to relax and not have to get shot at every other ten seconds.
Also, Vash is called the 'Humanoid Typhoon' because everyone keeps destroying everything while he get's blamed for the damned mess.
3752442 To me, it would be better if you just put Vash in here instead of it being Rainbow Dash, but its your story. You do what you think is best. I have no right to stop you.
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Oh, I specifically meant a fic with this title. :D
Anthro... whatever. I still feel it to rushed! and the others... they know somehting
please keep it anthro i would really hate to see it hunamized, please please. this has been great so far dont change a thing.
Im not too bothered either way, Anthro. human, its near enough the same!
Dude love the story and i love Trigun so this is the story for me total upvote and track
Holy crap. a 10:1 like to dislike ratio. I'd say that's pretty damn good. Thank you all for liking this story.
3932499 am woundering her twin sister is lighting dusk
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Not sure. Life is making it hard to write. But when ever I get a chance I write in a little notebook ideas/outlines for the next chapter, or a new story.
SUCH A LONG TIME
Take it off hiatus? Pwetty pwease?
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I will, once I get another chapter written, edited, re-written, re-edited. And I find time to do so. Final year of high school, 4th quarter. You know the drill.
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Ah. Fair enough. That certainly excuses you. For now. But I will be watching... In the creepiest way possible. Be prepared...
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Oh really? Hope you don't look into my "hidden files" it contains a hard copy of about 5 years of 4chan chat form the /b/ boards. and mixed in is some story. Good luck!
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Challenge accepted. Now if only I had a friend who was actually useful for once and knows their way around computers... *ahem* yeah, I can totally do it. I wish...
Come on mate, why the long hiatus?
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College.
6224708 Ahh, well then I completly understand. I hope you are having fun at college. Cheers mate.
Is the story going to continue or is it going to be canceled i do not want it to be canceled i want it ro be continue