(Story to be rewritten. For now, read the semi-prequel My Mortal Big Brother Wile Wasp and the other spies aren't the starts of the show, they decent size roles in that story. Plus, the events of MMBB may impact the world of the rewrite, depending on how events unfold.)
A experimenter gone horribly right, Wasp was spliced with pony DNA has an egg. He and his hybrid twelve siblings do mission that their drone brethren can not. They each create original disguises, and have unique talent's and powers that make them special. His just happens to be making weapons out of his front hooves.
At some-point in his three years of life, Wasp fell in love the the pony Octavia. Since to love someone (or some pony) other than the queen is an alien occurrence to normal changeling, Wasp never recognized his feeling until it was to late. Now his sister Cocoon has staged a coupe against their mother Chrysalis, and has deemed him "unfit" to lead the hive into a golden age. Now Octavia has been captured, and Wasp himself is being hunted by both equine enforcement agencies and the hive. He must find a way to save her, even if it means a hundred ponies and changelings must die. But even if he can vanquish his enemies and save his mare, would she be able love the real him, even after he broke her heart before any of this started.
James Bond with some Devil May Cry elements with some Taken on top.
This story has some adult themes but nothing too major. Also, errors have been spotted in some of these chapters. Please PM me anything my editors miss so I keep the quality of the story.
Faving, just because I like the description so much!
Will read later.
You need an editor bro, but I loved it! Like and fav, fav and like, dislike and unfav, then fav and like again!
1934277 I had someone proof read this already.. If you want I can have someone else check it tomorrow.
1934288
Huh... I saw plenty of mistakes there.
You wrote Solder instead of soldier, it's foal not foul, I think I saw a sue there when it should have been something else... Can't recall. Oh well, it's one hell of an awesome idea! Looking forward to more!
1934368 I'm glad to hear it.
>sex
>gore
>teen
Not Mature? Lolwat
1934486 It's not clop if its off screen. Giddy Giddy Goo. If the violence gets to hardcore i'll amp the rating, but I'd rather keep it teen.
1934498
If it's off-screen, you don't need the Sex tag.
I'm still waiting for someone to find my Star Wars Easter egg. Here's a clue, it's from one of the six movies. Hope that helped.
Hmm, morphing hooves, a bumblebee cutie mark on a genetically enhanced changeling, romance action, and all sorts of other things! Oh, and of course, most important of all, cheesy one liners!
Summed up in one word:
Faved.
Ha! Found that star wars reference!
"Whatever floats your boat your highness." no. 13
"Whatever floats your boat your highness." Han Solo
1935489 Good catch, unfortunately this is not the reference your looking for. That's really funny though and complacently unintentional. For that you receive more points than if you found the correct answer.
You beat the author, Congratulation.
Besides dismissible mistakes as knew/new and due/do... you refer to number 13 as 12 in the author's notes...
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You win six facehooves out of five
Looks like this could be good, though. Just needs some homonym editing, really, and it'll be golden.
1935807 Note, to self. Find a new proof reader. I'll run this threw someone else latter today. Also, six out of five. That's harsh man. I'm glad you still liked the story despite the errors.
So Venom is blank flank?
1936880 Oops. I had his cutie mark in mind last night. I forgot to add it in. It should be there now. It's a Cobra.
How do I already have 5 dislikes? This is only just the set up. This story is just getting stared. I was going to right more Harky next, but now I want to show those haters who's boss. As soon as my cold get's better, I am going to write and edit the shit out of chapter 1.
Not bad I will track for now. Fav later if it somehow keeps my attention.
1942319 Hope I earn it. Rest assure I won't disappoint. Check back around Monday. Depending how bad my cold makes me feel, I should have the the next chapter completed and proof read by than.
Will do. And I really don't think your spelling and grammar were that bad. If they were i would've told you. See I'm a grammar nazi when I want to. I've actually stopped reading storie cuz of grammar... So no pressure.
a Blank Flank...!? Quick, infiltrate the CMC to learn their secrets!
There's a handful of grammar errors throughout it, but it's nothing a proofreader can't fix. The story is good so far and the characters you have portrayed up till now are interesting enough. I shall await next chapter
1953050 i.qkme.me/35lvbx.jpg
Prediction:
RD to disguised Changeling: "Are you a spy?"
Changeling: "... Yes" >pistolwhip
...
I kid!
This is good (so far). At least on par with any spy/infiltration movies and shows I've seen.
1957226 D̡̛i͜s͟c̵̀ò͜r̕͘d GET MOVEING!
Hmm one question.
Do they are anthro or something? Because you used few specific poses and "hands", and im little confused.
1998585 There not anthro and they don't have hands. If I said they had hands, it was a typing mistake.
....what.
What....
WHAT.
Those where my reactions through the entire thing.
Also, another pony-changeling crossbreed. Wasp is so screwed.
1999438 The gene pool is screwed.
Oh, wow... Though this bring up the question... would this normally be a problem with Changelings, or is the fact that Wasp has pony DNA what made this possible?
Of course something like this was bound to happen sooner or later given Professor Kindheart's research...
1999482 I'll explain everything in the next chapter.
this..... is interesting...
Welp he's fucked
Oh boy
2059176 What's happening? I'm scarred now. That was freaky.
That picture alone is enough to earn you a like from me
2060338 I'm glad you like it. You don't know how hard it was to find a picture that fits my story. I'm going to have to replace it once IO finishes the my OC cover art, but that won't be for a wile now.
Well. I spoke too soon last chapter. Shit just got a hell of a lot worse.
2060484
I hope he'll come back and save her but...... doesn't look that way, oh well I can't wait to find out what happens next
2062121 As of right now he doesn't know she's in danger. He does't even know he being targeted by his own family. Him and every other agent Brain has deemed unfit lead the hive into a new age.
2062164 I know he doesn't but we do and I can speak irrationally if I please (translation I completely ignored logic and thought he knew)
I understand you may need a proof-reader.....
Well, I'm totally up to the job! On one condition. Could you proofread my story? I mean, if it's okay with you.
I'm so lonely.
2070635 I'll make you a deal. I'll read your story and point out any errors I can find in terms of grammar in spelling. In return, I want you to PM me any mistakes you can find in this story. Give me a link and I'll take a look.
Okay, I said that I would read this, and besides the grammar/spelling errors, this is really good! Onward to the next chapter!
Alright, this is really getting my attention. I like the portrayal of Wasp. Commence reading of chapter 3!
2073556 Do you mind PM those errors to me so I can fix them. If there are to many, send me the biggest mistakes.
2070949 I find this deal fair enough.
So the reason there are down votes is grammar? That's harsh.