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Dash Attack


Aspiring film editor. When I write I shoot for awesome and nothing less. Anti-censorship and pro free-speech.

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Cover art done by my good friend Dmman892. Written before "Testing Testing 1,2,3"

Because she never took a mandatory test in flight school, her job as a weather pony and her dreams to be in the Wonderbolts are in jeopardy. Not confident in her study skills, she buys an expensive potion from a mysterious magic salespony. He told her it would "give her more brains" and "potentially" make her smarter. What he didn't say was that it would turn her into a multi-headed monster.

While her friends try and track down the peddler that conned her, Rainbow must find a way to deal with her new "companions" and try to prevent any more from spawning. Will she be able to turn back, or will she adjust to life as a Hydra? Either way, she still needs to pass that exam if she wants to keep her job.
All the while a single questions lingers in her mind - they let monsters join the Wonderbolts, right?

Rated T for Transformation. Also teen for some non-minor decapitations that don't result in death. Think of that running joke in Men In Black where the guy's head explodes and grows back.

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After finding out she never took a mandatory test in flight school, her job as a weather pony and her dreams to be in the Wonderbolts are inn jeopardy.

Seriously?

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Wile her friends try and track down the peddler that conned her, Rainbow must find a way to deal with her new "companions" wile trying too prevent anymore from spawning.

I think it's more a matter of what you didn't do, which was get an editor, or proof-read your own work.

Lots of to/too confusion in the desc. :trixieshiftright:

My eyes are bleeding at the use of 'too' instead of to in the description!:pinkiesick::twilightoops::facehoof::derpytongue2::pinkiecrazy:

Please have get an editor or proofreader, or at least a family member check the grammar.

I will give you points for original idea. :twilightsmile:

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Good good. :3 Also you have another instance of "Wile" up there, which of course needs to become "while" >.>

Yeah stomping into town like a kaiju in a snit ain't going to work. How many heads' she gonna get, and are they all going to be different personalities (guydash notwithstanding)? Cuz' that's been done to death.

Intriguing start, you got me wondering how this will all pan out. :yay:

I can see the newest hydra in town getting into a bit of trouble before things figure themselves out. Well, assuming she's even let into town. She may very well have to find some cave in the Everfree and live as a hydra until her friends figure out some cure.

And what about Red? If Dash changes back into a pony he will go away, so will Dash be okay with "killing him off" by changing back? :raritydespair:

Anyway, good stuff, you have my attention.

Let's just fix this, shall we?

After finding out she never took a mandatory test in flight school, her job as a weather pony and her dreams to be in the Wonderbolts are in jeopardy. Not confident in her study skills, she buys an expensive potion from a mysterious magic salespony. He told her it would "give her more brains" and "potentially make her smarter". What he didn't say, however, was that it would turn her into a multi-headed monster with the ability to spawn even more heads whenever decapitated.

While her friends try and track down the peddler that conned her, Rainbow must find a way to deal with her new "companions" wile trying to prevent anymore from spawning. Will she be able to turn back, or will she adjust to life as a Hydra? Either way, she still needs to pass that exam if she wants to keep her job. All the while a single questions lingers in her mind:

They let monsters join the Wonderbolts, right?

Rated T for Transformation. Also teen for some none minor deceptions that don't result in death. Think of that running joke in Men In Black where the guy's head explodes and grows back.

Watch for typos. I saw an instance of "wan'ts". Excuse my blandness, but what the bloody fuck (ouch) is a "wan'ts"? I assume that you meant to type "want's" which is wrong, and is always wrong—unless one of your character's names is "Want". If you do that, I'll gouge your eyeballs out with a rusty spoon. It's the correct "wants" is in my version.

I love the idea. I was drawn to the word hydra in your Shameless Self-Promotion Bureau thread, however you used a thousand and three exclamation marks, which made me almost not look at this story. Appearance goes a long way in this site, after all, as in life, and you looked immature from the multiple exclamation marks. Take that as you will.

I'll get around to reading this later, probably. I'll toss a favorite on there and probably not read it until whenever the second chapter gets out and reminds me of its existence. Yes, I'm aware of the "read later" button. I like using the favorites button. Don't judge.

-HB

3586205 It's not going to go overboard. She's not going have like 20 heads by the end of this, that would just be silly. Then again.... this is a random comedy so... nah it won't get that crazy. Or will it?

As for your other questions...

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3586242 I'll take that into a count next time. I've just been really excited about posting this fic. I finished it days ago, and have just been waiting for it to go through editing (As you can guess I'm not the best at spelling.) However, I try to make that up for that by hiring good editors and writing and coming up with cool ideas. In the end it all evens out. :twilightsheepish:

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Alright. I've seen the pre-editing of some of my favorite stories and cringed. Once I ran like a little girl from the screen. Remember to run your description past your editors, though. The title is great, but if the description is full of errors, it ruins your first impression.

Fuck it, I'll give you the full spiel. Use it later in life. It's too fucking late at night for me to turn off my filter.

The three most important parts of a story, amusingly enough, are the title, description, and picture. After all, if you can't draw anyone in, it doesn't matter how well written your story is, does it? Not to say that the story doesn't matter, but if you have an amusing or sexy picture it is more likely to draw in an audience.

Also, some newer readers might not even read stories without cover art. I know there was a time that I decided any story without cover art was not worth reading, and if they had custom art, it had to be good. How wrong I was, but I digress. I love the cover art, by the way. I chuckled, and that's difficult to do when I'm on the interwebs. Usually I just exhale slightly harder than normal.

-HB

3586319 My one of my best friends drew this. He's the one who got me into the fandom. He's a really talented artist. He never stops drawing.

Comment posted by aCB deleted Dec 6th, 2013

3586334 Thanks for the help CluelessBrony. You've been a really big help tonight.

aCB

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Thanks for the help CluelessBrony

Did you misspell my name or are you trying to insult me middle school style? :rainbowhuh:

3586380 It's late. I misread your name. My apologies. I'm going to bed before I make any more silly mistakes tonight. But seriously, thank you.

Oh, Celestia, yes! I love this idea! Now I eagerly wait to find out what direction you take it in and hope that direction is intriguing.

3586386 In your description did you mean "deceptions" or decapitations?

This sounds fun.

How many heads will she grow?

Think of that running joke in Men In Black where the guy's head explodes and grows back.

As long as the original head doesn't get removed that is, we should be fine.

It's clear that this is quite a traumatic experience for Dash. I mean look, she's even started talking to herself. :rainbowlaugh:

When she's able to turn back I wonder what will happen to the other head/heads…

future moral dilemma.

Gonna read this later, but I did notice a little thing in the description

Also teen for some non-minor deceptions that don't result in death.

should probably be "decapitations."
Unless you were referring to her being deceived by the mysterious con-pony?

Looks good so far. Neat idea, too.

You do have a couple of grammar and spelling mistakes, though.

Rainbow Dash sat in Snowstorms office,

Should be "Snowstorm's" with an apostrophe.

The two head turned around to the sound of a female scream

Should be the two heads.

This story is gonna be good.

3587039 Sorry for the late reply. I just wan't to say that if the original head does get chopped off, it will regenerate (alongside another companion).

Author creates the badassery that is My Mortal Big Brother.
Author forgets to proofread the description for one of their fics.

Yeah, that sounds about right.

3590099 Well I guess the moral is that nobodies perfect. Though next time, I'm defiantly getting my descriptions looked at before posting, so that I can be perfect.

(evil grin)

You had my attention. Now you have my interest. Proceed.

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I think Hydras have back up brain memory in their body in case of head is gone emergancies dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Pinkie_Pie_lolface.png

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Alright, but I hope you explain it in the story a bit so it's something like "the soul is kept in the body" or something, cuz the way I think about it all, the brain IS the person, we're all simply a few pounds of nerve cells in control of roughly 70 kilos of human body (which is actually kinda true), so removing the brain = removing the person :derpytongue2:
So yeah, a proper explanation might fix this issue for me :twilightsmile:

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Theoretically, the new heads are growing with some adjustments to the spinal column and brain. The primary head, when regenerated will likely do so in a manner as to replicate the head as exact as possible. This would likely develop as a means to keep the primary set of memories and lessons intact while obtaining as many other precautions (in the form of other personalities with their own opinions) as possible.

So, regeneration reconstructs the original brain structure as well as a new one. That way, if the original is just stupid, it now needs the consent of one that could be more intelligent. If the original was not stupid, now it has a new set of eyes to keep watch for whatever cut it off last time.

Sound like a sensible theory?

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I don't mean that. I mean it in the sense that, according to my whole understanding, if the original head is lost, the original Rainbow is lost. The real Rainbow we all know and love will be dead, and in her place will be a perfect copy.

3591675 That does percent an interesting moral conundrum. Like does each head have a soul. Does removing a head kill that soul. Would a regrowing the original "technically" still be her. These are some concepts I will definitely try to explore in future chapters. Until I know the answer myself, I'll make sure the original Rainbows head will remain safe.

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Well, one way I know of to circumvent it all, is to basically take my understanding, and replace 'brain' with 'soul'. That way, you can have all the decapitated heads you want (you sick bastard), yet keep the soul in the body, and thus never lose the original Rainbow.

Weee, philosophy! :rainbowkiss:

Funfact: this whole idea is kinda why teleportation scares me. Does it just move me through some dimensional shenanigans, or does it literally take me apart and rebuild me, and will I still be me?

Ok I'm liking this story so far I like the idea of the story can't wait for more

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Another alternative is not to limit a soul to being stationary. Perhaps a soul will move about from one piece of flesh to another. Once the head is rebuilt, it would then move into the reconstruction. Another would be that it never leaves either and is connected to both, only leaving the severed head when it ceases to function.

If you're still stuck in the mode of physical anatomy holding a soul, one could argue that the soul or at least a brain blueprint is reserved in the spinal column. This way it is still held.

As far as the whole "actually a clone" thing, one might want to view it in a manner of brain damage. If a part of the brain is damaged, the owner then will act differently, but will still be the same person. For a smaller example, thing of yourself (or someone you know) with caffeine and without. A change in brain chemistry that, when restored to normal, doesn't change who you once were. I know this isn't quite a "clone," but neither would the head if most of the memories are stored within the spinal column, instead of the head.

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I never said the soul was stationary, but then again neither did I say it wasn't, so you got a fair point. And the "actually a clone" thing is kinda hard to view as brain damage when in fact you're speaking of an entirely different brain. Also, I kiiiinda see a flaw in that brain damage thing. You say that when the brain is damaged, the "owner" will act differently. I find this a tiny bit odd, as the "owner" pretty much IS the brain. Anyway, lets leave the philosophical talk aside and quit jamming the comment section full with this stuff :derpytongue2:

While the implications about what happens to RD's other-selves when she turns back (if!) is somewhat disturbing, this looks interesting enough to follow... if simply for the fact that Rainbow Dash is now a god-damn Hydra!

Might want to pick up an editor though, I'm seeing a lot of typos and misuse of the words like 'too' and 'to'. Urgh, English...

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That's fair.

And, yes, I tend to ramble. I have this problem where I think way to much on the simplest of things.

Must say, though, I am interested to see where this story is going. Keep up the good work, Dash Attack.

wow, lot's of philosophy for a gag fic, not that I'm complaining, no fave just yet but I'll check back

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Yeah, that's kinda my fault, sorry :twilightsheepish:

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