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SwiperTheFox


This sneaky fox, always clad in a blue mask and gloves, has long been a bane of unwary travelers with loose accouterments.

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Fluttershy discovers a cheerleader outfit, a nice gift from Angel that literally fell out the sky. She's already been worrying about her upcoming date with Big Mac, their one month anniversary, and she wonders what to do. Fluttershy decides to put the outfit to its proper use. Meanwhile, the Cutie Mark Crusaders are up to no good as usual.

This is inspired by the many "Pony X Discovers/Makes/Uses a Y" stories that have proliferated lately such as those by Art Inspired. It's also inspired by a particular image posted by Braeburned on /mlp/ as well as a classic piece of 80s pop. Thanks for reading.

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Right off the bat--maybe change the title. It's a bit of a personal preference, but I don't like it when people don't have the creativity to come up with a name that doesn't just spell out the plot of the entire story for you (and you totally have the creativity to make something awesome).

Also, this line:

Tell your special someone that they’re so fine— they’re so fine, they blow your mind!

Oh god, my sides.

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Thanks for commenting!

So, about the title... I don't really like it either. However, I want the reference to the "Fluttershy Discovers Gummi Bears" and other such fics to be clear.

I'm not sure what kind of title to have. Any suggestions?

And what do you think should be happening next in the story?

1501617 Oh, I see. If you're referencing that line of fics, I don't think it should be changed.

And as for progression... what if the cheerleader outfit turns Fluttershy into a super preppy and annoying cheerleader-stereotype, ultimately scaring Big Mac off? (not forever, of course--just long enough for her to run off and terrorize someone else until they can yank the costume off her)

"Come on, Mackie!" Fluttershy shouted into the poor stallion's ear. "Take off that yoke, it ain't no joke!" Rearing up on her hind legs, she chanted, "Fluttershy needs sexy-time! Fluttershy needs sexy-time!"

Or, maybe Mac gets a little too into the whole "cheerleader" routine and goads Fluttershy into actually doing a cheer for him. She starts crying and runs off, and Mac has to chase her down and apologize. (By the way--if you want this story to have clop, I'm going to mandate that FLuttershy wear that cheerleader outfit during the deed.)

Meh, that's all I got for now. I might happen upon something tomorrow, but right now my head has a romantic evening planned with a pillow, and I'd hate to be the one to disrupt those two lovebirds.

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Both of those ideas sound nice.

Uhhhh... hey... the main point of the story is that she makes him be the cheerleader. I suppose I could reverse the names for those ideas and do them anyways? :rainbowwild:

And have a good night! :rainbowkiss:

1501971 OH GOD. I was about to log off, but then you responded. Do it. I wanna see big Mac's muscular thighs rippling under a frilly skirt.

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Alright! I have some ideas about how to pull that off, and I'll write them up tomorrow after work (or maybe during, if I'm able :raritywink: )-- it'll be awesome! :ajbemused:

:facehoof: Please... don't do it... Please god damn it... No... No please... Buck it.
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Well. That was certainly a change of pace. I loved how you resolved the whole thing. Raidioactive dessert...:yay:

Oh god not you and your sexy writing again!

I LIKED IT!>:yay:

Why so many thumbs down?

The buck did I just read? And why am I laughing to hard?

Me: What....where the hell you come from? What's with the robe and scythe? The fuck do you mean I died from lung callopse of reading a SwiperTheFox story?....the fuck you mean I'm going to hell?

Me: Huh.....alright, alright let's go.

Nah, for real though, perfect story, strange but I really like it and where the buck did Flutter's go?

GO TEAM FLUTTER'S!

A fan of 80s music I see...that is officially awesome.

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Thanks for reading you guys!

I suppose I got a ton of downvotes for making a fic that put comedy over clop (which may of tricked some people), but... well... I don't know. I'm happy at least that there are lots of fans of this as well. :twilightsmile:

1519434 Never a problem brother, we always got your back...well, I do, can't say the same for everyone else:derpytongue2:

Mus. Stop. Laug- oh who am I kidding:rainbowlaugh:

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I'm proud though, not ashamed! :rainbowwild:

This is fucking awesome... I admit, I'm guilty of a couple of those famous silly X does Y fics...

But I loved this... I have no problem with somebody poking a little fun at mine or other fics of this genre... :rainbowlaugh:

Nice job man. Hilarious.

Finally getting around to reading this :pinkiehappy:

*Begins reading*
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Flutterhsy in a cheerleader outfit? :trixieshiftright: Go On...

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Wait what? She wants Big Mac to wear...oh my :rainbowderp:

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Well, uh...:applejackconfused:

...*Finishes*

I just...I uh...

*Ahem* Okay, review time.

That was...quite amusing :pinkiehappy: Not what I was expecint lol, and I'm not sure if 'funny' was angle you were aiming for. But I quite enjoyed it. It was a good read.

Great job! :pinkiehappy:

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Thanks!

I found it totally hilarious while I was writing it, and it's great that you do too!

1565427 Hehe, indeed :rainbowlaugh: Was a great read.

The beginning was difficult to figure out what was going on but the ending was funny.

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Oh, trust me. The title does *not* spell out the rest of the fic. :rainbowlaugh:

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Hey, thanks very much for reading and for the fav! :raritystarry:

Uhhhhhhh... :rainbowderp:

That title makes you think one thing, but once you read it you're thrown completely for a loop. :applejackconfused::derpyderp1::rainbowderp::twilightoops:

Brilliant!! :ajsmug::derpytongue2::rainbowlaugh::twilightsmile:

Somepony give Mac a medal for that performance.
It takes a real stallion to so thoroughly crucify his own masculinity for his mare.

Loved the part when Big Mac was trying to explain things to Bloom. Priceless.

Omfg, Mac... I am honestly impressed at how far he was willing to go for Shy.
I'd be considering escaping through the window myself.

This was pure silliness and I loved it. :heart:

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