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A handsome stallion and a shy mare may finally take a big step. A big step into each other's life. Perhaps this could be a hoof in the right direction for both ponies, perhaps to spend their lives with each other.
The two's hearts throb for one another ,but shyness has kept the wall between them firm. Will this night finally tear it down and allow the bud of love blossom?
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Seven views? Seven bucking views? This is blasphemy!
I don't usually favorite anything, preferring to read things once and then drop them, but this deserves way more than seven views, so I'm making an exception just to increase this thing's popularity!
Okay, admittedly, I do see a few things worth mentioning. It's Ponyville, not Pony Ville, and both letters are capitalized when referring to Applejack as AJ. Also, Apple Bloom is two words, not one.
Damn, this is rather well written. I'm impressed, have not read a FlutterMac in a long time and glad to read one that is as good as this, can't wait for more
I know, the grammar police are after me for that one. Most of it was written during school and I was hurrying.
Haha. But thank you for commenting and favoriting. 
A few errors, but other all not bad. Damn, poor Flutter's, this is getting crazy. The mortal can be killed, shit.
The italics resembling thoughts is a typical writing style, but putting the italics in quotes just confuses everypony. I suggest that be changed.
Remember to caplize the m and the s in Mane Six, it's important, other then that and a few errors, well written.
Damn, Flutter's got her ass kicked by the lighting, this is insane
Quite well written. There was no real need to divide it into so many chapters, though. Also, is it not over yet or did you forget to hit the Mark As Complete button?
Wow....everypony is so nice in Equestria, it's hard to see them get mad or serious when reading fics like these, how odd. Hopefully the Goddess of the Sun can hear Big Mac's parayers, poor Flutter's sometimes even the Gods can't do everything
A few errors, but nothing major.
Napkins......do ponies eat napkins? Huh.....anyway, a few errors nothing major but you did call Pinkie a boy at one point, may want to fix that, this is short but enjoyable nonetheless
I just noticed...don't you think being struck by ligting would have injured a pegasi more then it did Flutter's? And remember to caplize the d in Rainbow Dash, and of course the same for Mane Six, other then that the love for the two felt abit rushed, not bad that...shall read on
Very cute, odd how Spike just disappered though, huh....very nice chapter, few errors but nothing major
Ah, the CMC. No matter what they do it's funny or it will cause a lot of damage
A great family bonding moment, I very much enjoyed it. A few errors here and there, nothing major
A few more errors then normal but not to bad. The odd thing is writing Fluttershy a bit cheesy is canon, that messed up. Ha, they ate and ran now that's bucked up. Who knew the Gods were listening to their prayers
Poor Flutter's their love is not going as slow as I thought but it's well made
Feels like I'm watching a bad written play.....how sad but cheesy.....damn. Anyway, remember to seprate when others speak and be more detailed when telling of OC'S, you don't have to go into detail like backgroud but apperance and gender would be nice
Eh, this chapter was honestly not that great but I can deal
Damn, talk about tragic but real....shit, this is getting good, though it Apple Bloom, not Applebloom, and it's AJ, not Aj, other then that a 9/10
Wow.....all in all not bad at all, of course it's nothing new to see it have a happy ending but I have no clue this was rated Teen, it should have been for everyone, but anyway, you did a really good job, a 9/10, very much enjoyed it
Interesting. A few things, though. First of all, both letters in AJ should be capitalized. They're initials (more or less).
Second, using the term "Mane Six" seems a little jarring. I mean, we know they're the main characters, but it breaks immersion. Plus, when you used it, there were only the five of them. I'd suggest using a term like "the girls" or something of the sort.
I was starting to write my own story, but I decided to read a few stories so that I got an idea on how to write the stories. I found this one, and I'm surprised its really well done, probably better then my story
If that note had stayed any longer in his mouth...
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Wait I don't think she was actually struck by lightning, she just fell to the ground.
2103880 Good point, still a fail though
I wish all security guards were like that.
Heart... Imploding... GAH THIS IS AWESOME!!!
Do you mean "11:00 in the AM?" 11:00PM is almost midnight.
I was wondering what they were doing...
... Last night....
Okay, mindblown again.
I like this story, are people giving it thumbs down because it is Fluttermac?
Is there a SAD tag on this? There should be a SAD tag on this.
LOVE. ALWAYS. BUCKING. WINS.
2105361 Probably, though it may be because of grammar.
*Squee*
Ha,ha. Thank you everypony. Much love. I'll try to make less mistakes in my next story because I just hadn't realized how many there really were.
Next story perhaps Spike will get more text time.
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I know total mind fuck right
2190073 Still good, though.
The story had a good outline butI think out was a little rushed and lacking in details. You need to get more into the characters heads. otherwise though it was a fun story.
What's a hoff? I think the word you were looking for was "hoof."
I don't think Fluttershy's that... emotional. Everypony in Ponyville already knows she's super timid, so that sounded a little OOC. I've seen a lot of instances that people over exaggerate Fluttershy's shyness, and she also doesn't refer to herself in the third person. Iron Will is the only character to do that...
Other than that, great chapter! It's really cute, and the storyline is great!
Big Mac is shy, but he's not completely fragile. When Fluttershy didn't sit next to him he wouldn't start crying. I get that he is capable of feelings (obviously) but he's not gonna start sobbing. They haven't been together all that long, if I recall correctly.
And then happily ever after happened
2102691 agreed
2443269 Trixie talks in third person too
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What? You forgot me???
I'm sorry! It won't happen again!
Good.
Oh yeah...
i'm intrested so far so good
Dawwwww
D'awwwwwwww so cute!!!!!!!!!
Cute
