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Xenonic


Xenonic lives in the north of england and so has never seen the sun. She would put that she's a girl but there are no girls on the internet so she won't.

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Fluttershy and Big Mac have long been friends - alike in their shyness and love of nature, they live a clean and happy friendship, where nothing is hidden from view.
Right?

Teen tag for mild sexual references

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 57 )

However...that ass. :rainbowlaugh:

This is good. Are there more chapters? it says complete. :pinkiesad2:

2275697 'Fraid so. I couldn't think of where else this would go if I extended it, to be honest. And thank you!:twilightsmile:

Damn, now I can see all the stupid spelling mistakes. I really cannot type today.

Such a cute little story, it would be nice if the story extended for more chapters! But nice story nonetheless! :ajsmug:

2277776 Well, could you tell me what you'd like to see if I extended it? Because, tbh, I can't think of anything.

That was a nice, quick read. I couldn't find anything wrong, spelling or grammar-wise.
But like another commenter pointed out, this story is criminally underdeveloped. It seems like a single scene in a larger story. We saw them get together after a brief, comical misunderstanding, and prepare to do something significant, but then that significant thing never happens. I'm expecting to continue on to a cute scene with Mac watching Fluttershy repair the doll, and awkward, charged conversations, but no, just the "completed" status. Heck, I'm not sure if this really is a Fluttermac story; just two friends meeting up, and one member commenting the other is physically attractive.
You have the potential for a sweet Fluttermac story, but leaving it in this practically unfinished state is a huge wasted opportunity. I hope you'll change your mind.

Love it!
I can't wait for more!^^

I like where it's going, wherever it's going.:eeyup:

Hooray, you continued it! I'm so proud of you... kinda. Well, I'm glad you continued it.

I think it was a great idea for you to continue at this pace, especially with Fluttershy not yet realizing her true feelings for Mac. I see to many Fluttermac stories, or any stories really, going from "Wow, his mane is pretty when caught in the light like that" to "Babiez NAO." Gradual personal awakenings are always fun to see happening, even if we do know where they're leading to.

Plus, you made Rarity a shipper. That's a personal favorite of mine.

2315183 Yeah, I know. I wanted to make it as realistic as possible, and I've read so many fics where Rarity is essentially "now KISSU", so I wanted to make her a little more caring.

Well this is turning out to be an enjoyable read. Please continue.:twilightsmile:

So cute! You hardly ever get to see the characters develop feelings for each other… this is a welcome change!

I liked every bit of it really. You're going at a good pace. I can't say what I want to see next because you're doing fine!

Hooray, an update! My favorite Fluttermac story this month is still around.

I like the chapter, though the meeting was a little cliche. I really am looking forward to more interactions, and remember, don't rush the romance!

Excellent chapter. I see only one problem: how can you receive change for bits, when they are single monetary units? That and the grammatical error

She had an air of innocence about her that not even Apple Bloom live up to.

Great job on giving some backstory, as it will probably come into play later as the story progresses.
Looking forward to the next chapter.

2449155 In the Cider Season episode, Flim and Flam try to sell their poisonous cider for a couple of cents, so...:applejackunsure:

2449155 I think it's better now?

2451241
Good point; I had forgotten about that. Makes me wonder………

2451264 The grammar has been corrected, yes.

Oooh, now we see where this fic is going! Most Fluttermac fics just have them fall together on a random day, but you've made an exciting event be the catalyst. I'm more interested than I was before.

I am currently so drunk that the mood music blew my mind whiel I read the chapter!!! :rainbowwild:

I foresee a lot of AWKWARD ahead. Prepare for defecation impacting oscilating machinery.

More, for the love of god more:flutterrage:

There's nothing more romantic than not paying for your meals to go do fun stuff instead!:pinkiesmile:

It's 11:30 pm where I am and I just woke the house up with the way the skimped out on the bill :rainbowlaugh:

Aww, that was a nice story! Beautiful ending, and I'm glad you took my advice and finished it.

Fluttershy was unusually energetic, but I figured it must have been the alcohol doing that. Hopefully, they'll both remember this in the morning.

It was great! At first I was like YES! Then I was like NOOOO! Then I was all YES!! again.

I'm a lurker, not a stalker but I'll keep you in mind. :pinkiesmile:

2731838
I thought the idea of lurking was no commenting on things.

2732341 No, in this case it's only commenting and not writing any stories of my own. I don't even comment that much.

Shut up! :rainbowwild:

2732478
Oh...
I didn't think I deserved a shut up...:fluttershysad:

Now they need to tell their friends and family.

That was a simple and sweet ending, this panned out to be a great read! I look forward to your future work! :ajsmug:

DINE AND DASH! WOOOOOO!!!!:pinkiehappy:

2732526>>2732478 Ladies, ladies, please. Calm yourselves.

What? That's it?
NOOOOOO:flutterrage:

2745353 I may do a bonus chapter :raritywink:

I really enjoyed it. Was a really sweet story with a good ending.

i love it so far and am really excited to read on:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

3018624 You're welcome! :pinkiehappy: I enjoyed writing it, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.

Comment posted by fortheloveofchaos deleted Oct 1st, 2013

normally, she would have wondered into the kitchen

should be wandered, methinks
also,

However...that ass. Mac allowed himself another look and chuckled quietly.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: Big Mac you sly devil!!!:eeyup:

as she milled over the day's events

mulled

mischeavous

mischievous

interupting

interrupting

I'd fix it for the end of the week

did you mean before?

friend of an admirer

did you mean a friend or an admirer?
sorry for all the corrections but do you have an editor? I do love this story though, it's a really good idea :pinkiehappy: just....errors...must be....corrected...:applejackconfused:

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