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Blueshift


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Twenty-five years later, Apple Bloom is an adult pony. She's married with two lovely foals, and is the respected mayor of Ponyville. However she never got past the heartbreak she felt when her two best friends moved away all those years ago.

All this is about to change though. Tonight is the first Ponyville school reunion and Apple Bloom is determined to finally put the past to rest and have the best night ever. What could possibly go wrong?

Cutie Mark Crusader School Reunion go!

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 84 )

Good Diamond Tiara and Silverspoon? Me gusta! I love them, they're just silly fillies in school and grew up just fine. :pinkiehappy:

this is execellent job

EVERY SINGLE GODDAM THING THAT CAN GO WRONG WILL

Wonderful story. :pinkiesmile:

Aww, a very sweet, or rather, bittersweet, story. I usually avoid sad stories like the plague, but this was really nice. It was nice to see the future of the CMC, and the whole backstory of the setting of the story is really fascinating. I'd certainly want to hear more about that. Nice touch with all the previous generation references. Most of the time those are used as the past, but the future? Now that's an interesting turn.

And the last part was a very good move: Not revealing exactly what Applebloom's mark was. It goes well with the strange, metaphysical, almost Doctor-Who-esque ideas.

All in all, kinda depressing at points, but heartwarming all the same.

omg. so fucking awesome. so sad. just... so well written. Seriously, you're awesome.

Beautiful story. Not too short, not too long.

hm twist not givin a half a fuck, dinky guarding a god, sweetie is bein boring, and silver spoon charity worker
what the fuck? :derpyderp2::derpyderp1::rainbowderp::rainbowhuh::pinkiecrazy::facehoof:

this story made me cry.:raritycry::raritydespair::pinkiesad2:

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In a good way I hope!

This is just... wow.

Cleverly/Wonderfully written

:pinkiesad2:
It's... Beautiful.

I... Just give me a minute.
:raritycry:

Alright, now that I'm not so damn tired, here's an actual comment.
I just watched a movie and read a book that had their plot stretched so thin you could break it by blowing bubbles at it, so I was weary when you started throwing out Celestial Guards and 'The War' (that was mentioned once), and the fire that consumed Sweet Apple Acres. However, you pulled it off. Maybe it's the magic of pastel ponies, maybe it's the writing style, but you pulled it off.:eeyup:

Dat ending.:raritydespair: (Show me the cutie mark!:twilightangry2:)

:fluttercry:
This is good...

That was amazing and emotional (the height of my description and praise)
No really, incredible

I truly cried while reading this. :fluttercry:

It's a really good story, and although a little sad, it's still... good. I don't even know what to say.

Very nice. Full of emotion and interesting little subplots in the background.

HNNNNNNNNNNGHmustknowwhatcutiemarkis.

Finally, I managed to see this story's ending! I know I had read it up to the second chapter, but never did manage to read the ending. I can now say, with tears in my eyes, this is one of the best fanfics I have ever had the privilage to read. Thank you. :fluttercry:

I'm going through most of your library, but I had to stop on this one to comment.

One of my basic tenets when writing is that stories about ponies are stories about people. They may be oddly shaped people, in pastel colors, who can fly or use magic, but they're still people. The best parts of this story, what set it apart from any other fic that deals with disasters or wars or whatnot, is that it focuses on the people -- how the events affect them and how they are changed.

It's a spectacular story. Again, thank you for it.

Wow, only 3 chapters and you were able to put so much emotion into it. This is one of the most fantastic fan fics I have read. You, sir, are one hell of a writer.

Dinky Hooves. Celestial Guard.
:raritystarry: Awww yeah.

A Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara shipping? :rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp::rainbowderp:

Didn't see that coming Applebloom, huh?:applecry::applejackconfused:

Wonderful. Just wonderful. :raritywink:

I'm always disappointed when people live in the past, forsaking the beauty in change that the future brings. Unfortunately, it's a trend I've noted in myself as well... I can relate.
That said, good work. :twilightsmile:

I do believe this is the least nonsensical Blueshift story I've ever read.

Beautiful, I love this. Sad and heartwarming!

MARMITE! every few months I try it again, convinced that I can swing around to accepting it. It Is Just As Abominable Every Single Time. I wouldn't give the stuff to mine enemies' dog.
But BlueShift- I'm going to like this, I can tell.

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I never liked it until I had marmite and cheese pinwheels. Then I understood.

Get some pastry, spread marmite over it, sprinkle cheese, then roll up and cut into segments. Cook. Eat.

:pinkiehappy:

653340 A man who can learn to accept marmite should have no trouble finding absolute peace of mine in everything he does.

Solid and engaging writing style, much like every Blueshift story I've read so far. No tears for this one, but I can definitely empathise with the feeling of time passing, things changing irrevocably, the happiest moments of one's life growing more distant, relationships and opportunities lost forever, and the sense of guilt of not having appreciated them while they still existed.

One thing I don't like, which I've seen in other stories as well, is "implicit epic history" -- where you have great wars and disasters in the background of the story but they're not elaborated on. If it's truly epic, it should be told. Otherwise, it feels like a cheat; trying to make the world deeper and complex without actually doing the work. I'm guessing this is a matter of taste, though.

I think the ending may have been too abrupt, but with that aside, this was a great glimpse into the fillies' futures! I still don't see how Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara could become a couple, it just seems so unlikely and random, but that's just me.
Overall, very emotional and insightful; i really enjoyed!!

I apologize if I missed some vital text, but was the statue of Twilight or someone else?

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Wow, that suddenly became blindingly obvious. I was wracking my brain for pointy-hatted characters. I though Twilight just had a Starswirl hat on :facehoof:

Absolute success at good writing here
also, dinky as a royal guard, that's nice work there

I really want to know what Apple Bloom's cutie mark is, but the cliffhanger there is a good touch.

I notice that you changed Chapter 3 today... Was it just proofreading or was it something more important?

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Proofreading. Forever proofreading :pinkiesad2:

"While the story is written from her point of view and asking us the sympathise with her, we should instead feel sympathy for her."

What's the difference between sympathizing and feeling sympathy for? I'm having a hard time understanding the sentence, can someone please explain for me?

I could actually relate to what Applebloom was feeling when she's doing a 1 on 1 confrontation with Silver spoon. Like I use to be bullied by this jerk and it's one of the reasons why I moved to a different school and country. So it's been 1 year and 4 months since I've seen him. I chatted with one of my friends who is still studying in the same school were my bully was, and he told me he actually changed for the better.
Overall good pacing in the story.:trollestia:

I'm 14... wait a fucking second, I'm 15. :ajsleepy:
Anyways, I loved the story, made me cry. I really appreciate you writing this fine piece of work. I guess i could really connect to it. And it's so true. I might be young, but i guess if I looked into it as me being in kinder as in they being little fillies and then now, i guess i have a similar reaction.
Thank you for making it. Thank you so much. It always hurts me to get hit so badly by this realization, but i guess I have to get a grip sooner or later.
Thank you.

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As in the story is making us feel sorry for them (not Apple Bloom) but instead we should feel sympathy for her (Apple Bloom).:applecry:

Diamond Tiara slowly moved closer. "I'm sorry if I ever hurt you Apple Bloom" she whispered softly. "You're a good pony."

Somehow, at least in your little universe, you made me not hate that character As much

I liked the story, didnt like aaple bloom and generally enjoyed myself

And what is celestia doing in a school reunion?

I aat up in my bed, siting there for 10 minutes just sobbing. No fucking joke. Maybe even longer, I didn't keep track of time. :applecry: I am so sad. I am still crying a bit mow so any soelling mistakes us me tyioing with blurty eyes. 5/5 cries for you
:applecry::applecry::applecry::applecry::applecry:

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Aw well, in a good way I hope!

:fluttercry: that was an amazing chapter. :heart:

wait so who was the statue

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