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Sub-Par author with a somewhat light-hearted and silly writing style.

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Beauty Split was looking forward to the move to Ponyville and getting to spend time with her old friend, Diamond Tiara...Until she sees that Diamond has changed for the worse.

When Diamond Tiara's old friend, Beauty Split, moves to Ponyville, she would love nothing more than to reconnect with her old friend...

Until she discovers that Diamond isn't acting the same as she had been before.


Thanks to BanditThePonyDog, Texus, Raiden jaeger for pre-reading and giving their opinions on Beauty Split.

Cover art from: http://miz-jynx.deviantart.com/art/Friendship-Splits-493312983

6/11/14- FEATURED! THANK'S EVERYPONY :D

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 151 )

go to Chaotic note and go to his stream. :pinkiehappy:

i want to this continue

Interesting premise please continue.

Remember, remember the 17th of November... What the fuck did I just write, and why? Man... just remember this.:twistnerd:
Remember her.

This is well worth reading.

You must go on

This is such a good idea for a story!! Can't wait for the next chapter! Well done :pinkiehappy:

I really enjoyed this and want to see were it!

Okay no I'm interested

*Clears throat* :flutterrage: Moar! Please?:fluttershbad:

4479957 I dont thin he hears you. Let me try:

:flutterrage: MOAR!!! Please... :fluttershyouch:

I demand....
MOAAAARRRRRplz....?:fluttershysad:

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4478801
How did this start?:rainbowhuh:

Oh and uh, fucking love the story so far.

Ahhh yes this story i was reading befor, i remember^^

Well you suprised me and if i remember Featherweight right, then the reaction fit him somehow.:pinkiehappy:

With the rest of the chapter the whole story is more interesting then befor, i don´t know if you should make her know that Diamond Tiara is a bully, or that you should maybe make her a overnight decision.
I could even image Split having a little fight with Silverspoon, maybe because she want to be the best friend of Diamond. I don´t know wich way you should turn first, but i am sure i like it either way.:twilightsmile:

I don´t know why but i like Silverspoon, just saying:pinkiehappy:

4481457 Sheep city, presented this idea to me in a pm. I told him to go for it. He then sent me a message containing some of the story.
Nice live stream last night.

4481523
Oh thanks. Also what's your skype really? There's too many Avery claras

This is looking really good.:pinkiehappy:

4481621 Bro, just calm down and get oovoo.

4481644
is that a new emoticon?

4481810 no, it's similar to Skype but free to use and my windows 7 can run that and a game at the same time:pinkiehappy:

4481858 That's the only way I will talk to you:coolphoto::derpytongue2:

4481903
idk. It's just that i already have skype and other IM programs to manage.

4481980 ok, fair, we could just pm but its up to you:pinkiehappy:

Oh PLEASE continue it!!!! I LOVE IT!!! :raritystarry:

One question I have for anyone that read this would be your opinion on my OC. As in, does she seem like a likable character? Just wanting some feedback on my current OC writing skills. :twilightsmile:

:fluttershbad:o god the pun the pun!!!!:fluttershbad::pinkiecrazy:

You see, you unlock this door with the key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension. A dimension of deliciousness. A dimension of chocolate. And most importantly, a dimension of mind. Your moving into a land of both creativity and taste of things and ideas.
. . . . . . .. . . . . .. .. . NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

Unlike RD and Gilda, Beauty finds out almost at once what kind of person Diamond's become, and "how can one so young be so far down that path?"

And this leaves the question, what the heck happened to turn the filly Beauty knew into the DIamond Tiara we dread?

4482128 Yeah, Beauty does seem fairly likeable! It's hard to write good OCs, especially to have them star in their own fics, so I'd say you did fine.

My interest, you have it, please continue. :twilightsheepish:

This is cool :rainbowkiss: Next chapter please!

4482128

yeah, pretty likable. at least she isn't being bullied by DT and SS, becomes a CMC, is good friends with the mane 6 in some way through the CMCs, all of that Mary Sue stuff, like you said. well designed OC. :raritystarry:

Personally, after Babs, I don't think Diamond Tiara would react well to losing ANOTHER friend.

I'd like to see where this goes. :twilightsmile:

(gets out the popcorn) This is gonna be good.

MOAR!!!!:
>Ecocat<

anxious to see where this is going :pinkiehappy:

I feel that the story is happening in a rush, you are droping the point just in the story that has about 3 000 words, make more content in between, a couple of classes, encounters in the town before the true is reveal with a bit of denial at the beggining, also look for a pre-reader.

Hmm curious interested to see where this goes.

And now to play the waiting game...

Interesting... really interesting... Can't wait to see how Split will react when she learns about how Diamond Tiara is behaving.

Good you fixed it, also i really want to hear what applebloom has to say.

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