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1981885 The name you're looking for there is "Eros", and he was Greek, not Roman. "Eris" was the Greek goddess of discord.

Can't wait

Commence read.

An ending? It seems not. A beginning it hides.

2114241 Is not every tale nothing more that the background upon which the next play is acted?

2114298 Now to await the knowledge brought forth by these scenes.

At first I was confused, as I thought this story to be complete, but now I understand.

And am filled with foal-like anticipation.
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First off I applaud you for having clop with story and it's beautiful.
Second of I like how you made Mac be important in some situation or way.
Overall I can't wait for more stories from that hippo-campus of yours!

2209153 Most of my writing is based around my desire to build a background of folk-lore for Equestria. Check out my other stories. They are all cannon to each other. Except Houyhnhnm's that's a stand-a-lone short. The book Twilight gets at the end of Red Fire is a returning element.

2213500 Ha! Didn't even realize I did that. It's funny the little things that get worked into your sub-conscience. Mel Brooks is a huge influence on my ideas of comedy.

Amazing fic the first few episodes were awesome, the chemestry between mac and dash felt legit and i loved theart he had in deafeating the enemy.

Now the ending was a sorry to say it was a let down. wasnt this story about mac and dash? what happen with them ? now Celestia is involved? ok... i can understand why but it shouldnt be the focus that is for mac and dash.

overall good story but the ending... was meh I really couldnt care less about Celestia and luna's family.

lordzid

ps: im here for the ship not just the clop part that wasnt bad at all to be honest really well explain

Lordzid

2258666 Thank you.

Eclipse is not properly part of this story. Think of it as an "after the credits" bonus reel.

I do have an actual sequel to this story in the works. But, I have an action story I want to do first.

why an ending? It must now be... a 131,876 word long story! that would be nice...

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Thank you.

This was the first story I ever shared. I had done a little writing in the past in the realm of sifi, but none have seen the light of day. It's funny you mention expanding it. I just revisited this story a week ago, and winced at how rough it is. Seeing that I want to use this story as a start for a small series, I really need to rewrite the whole thing. The story was immensely rushed and underdeveloped.

I have a theory of their "Mother" being a pony called Empress Eclipse :D

I loved it all it was awesome beyond awesome. I can't wait to see what happens next in the sequel I was happy to see there mother I wonder what there father look like.

This was a fun little read, you might want to get a proofreader, or more, to look over your work before it is officially posted. Also, it's a good idea to go through what already posted, you can find some errors that way