Last chapter up. Not too pretentious I hope.
It all needs one last grammar / spelling scrub. Looking forward to clicking my first completed button. Then I'll dig into the PG story hammering about my head.

1462673 it was funny. Very early in writing down the action scene I envisioned her playing through stoically.

Good work my friend, I often peruse the mature section for gems like these. Im a fan of stories that dont need to censor things like sex, makes them feel more adult, more realistic (minus the colorful flaming ponies).

1463437 good eye. I'll fix those tonight.

1463286. Thank you! I was really nervious about posting this.

Calling this more or less in the can.

If you read the first chapter before the 15th give it another read. Its had a major rewrite since then.

So are you gonna make a sequel? It doesn't really feel finished, Twilight hasn't read the book and we haven't got to see where Rainbow and Mac are headed. are we gonna see a little Zap Apple running around the farm?
Overall I enjoyed the story, the sex at the beginning escalated kinda quick but I blame the Cider , the Creation story and the fire ability was Awesome ! but the story was pretty short. I liked the interactions between RD and the Apples everything felt in character or at least what you would expect the characters to respond ( I don't know why some people have Aj get angry or freak out in Mac ships )
Anyways... fav'd, Thumbs up, and hoping to see it in MacDash fiction soon

1492339 "are we gonna see a little Zap Apple running around the farm?" That is amazing. you made my day.
Yes, actually that is on my to do list.

I do intend to stay inside the "Red Fire" universe. I have a whole series of shorts planned around Twilight and that book. Something akin to the old Storyteller series.

At this moment(literally) I am trying up a story(E for everyone) revolving around the Scootaloo and an OC.

1492411 Awesome looking forward to it!
Zap Apple seems to be the popular name for a MacDash foal, I think Bronius Maximus did a "what would you name their kid?" thing in between chapters of Breaking Barriers ( update damn you!)
If Mac has anything to say about it we're gonna need about 2 more names
next thing you know Equestria will have Apple farms in the Sky, after all Big Mac proved you can plow a Rainbow (couldn't resist)

haha after reading tou comment on my wall i looked to see if there was an updated and here it is...at first i tought..."he's to gonna make a sequel right?"
glad you said you are going to hahaha...still a pretty good job. A fine love story like this is something to be in awe XD

Good luck and hope to see more of your work

ps: i knew where the fire part was gonna be HA!...sry massage to the ego :P

um remember that whole Zap Apple comment, well I got bored and made this today th06.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2012/298/6/7/zap_apple_by_tbone11-d5iy10k.png
Hope you like him!

1499017 "ps: i knew where the fire part was gonna be HA!...sry massage to the ego :P"

Well, it was a pretty obvious use of "chekhov's gun". I'm happy it didn't come across as too cheesy.

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Nah it was at a perfect time like a short cliffhanger

1549294 Thank you. I spent the better part of a day mumbling to myself to get that passable.

After so much thinking for a review. This was all i can think of:i.imgur.com/CeWQS.jpg five RD out of 5 BM xD

1566695 What confuses you?

Well, I gotta say this is, (I think, I might be mistaken!), the first story I've read that gives an explanation to what
happened to their parents.

So this is why Dash didn't freak out and left with the doctor. And now I'm curious, are you going to do
a story for each of them, but have them all connected to each other? Because that would be awesome!

1665123 There are a few. "Need" takes a much braver approach to the story. I lost my own parents at a young age in a farm accident. So I have to admit some projection into the narrative. Which is also why I killed off their parents somewhat fantastically. Though I didn't realize that till after I read "Need". I don't think I could do a Pinky story. Rarity would be interesting, if I found the right gimmick. I already have a Twilight story in the works, but I'm not going to really start in on that till "Clastic Glow" is done.

In a random note: I was out on the farm today for the holiday and I took a picture of the spring house that started the whole story. I was just staring out the window last winter and daydreamed the seed to chapter one. Here is the the spring house

1665448 Oh well, that's a shame. I think you could do a good job for all of them. (Certainly much better than I could!!)
I don't mean along the same lines as this one, but more like the one with SoarinShy.

And random is good. Being random makes people keep their wits about them, or so one of my training SGT's told me when I came out
with bits of random information!!!

So here a random note from me: For some reason, lately I have only been reading shipping/romance stories that are doing at least the
mane 6, and some background characters as well.

But it is your choice and I respect and understand that. Here, have another stalker.......WATCHER, I mean watcher!!!

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Octavia: If that orchestra of limeys were immortalized just for playing while their boat sank, I'll serenade the Ragnarok from atop the gates of Tartarus.

MOAR??

I want to know what does that book says!!!!!! NOW!!!
sorry, I'm just curious! please don't kill me!!

1492487 AHAHA!!!

Please make a very elongated version... make it very long and go farther past that hospital scene... if that's alright with you

I loved it now Twilight will know the truth about it all I can't wait to see what happens next.And I'm so happy Big Mac is ok.