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Crowquill Symphony


The stallion before you looks to be on the heavy side, a bit too fond of rich food and hard liquors. He twirls the pen in his hoof, eyes half-lidded as he scans the page. "Sup." He says.

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A chance meeting in town, an exchange of glances, and the beating of two ponies hearts...

Rainbow had never given much thought to finding romance, or even going on a date with a pony. After a chance meeting in town she finds herself thinking of a life with a simple farm Stallion; One Big Macintosh. At the same time, Mac finds himself thinking of the rainbow maned mare.

Read on and learn of the two as they trot a path of love...

And now for something far less formal. It's a romance fic, Rainbow Dash and Big Macintosh. Feedback appreciated. MINOR INAPPROPRIATE CONTENT: Alcohol, suggestive situations, more alcohol, and profanity.

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Comments ( 62 )

"It was just the cider."

Doesn't matter, got tongue.

YES ive been waiting for a decent rainbowmac:pinkiehappy:

I liked it. It was pretty good.

Odd that there were plenty of capitalization errors early on in the fic. The detail was ok, but it all got better as the story progressed. :twilightsmile:

The fic was long and nice, and did its job well as a oneshot, from the beginning of the relationship to the end. It's a good read for anyone who wants to read up on some good ol' Dash 'n' Mac from once upon a time to happily ever after.

Grammar errors happened sporadically here and there, but only threw off the fic mildly. It's not bad, but the fic could easily be better. However, it's clear you have potential and you can always get better the more you write. :raritywink:

My advice? Explore emotions more. Characters are more relatable when you express their feelings in depth so that the reader can sympathize. You have the characterization down, though. So all you need to work on now is description and emotion. One last tip is to exchange description for a character's point of view if the subject is from their perspective, like Rainbow Dash describing something vaguely.

I give this story 4 stars, with an extra half for MacDash. :eeyup::heart::rainbowwild:

Keep writing.

:) awwwwwwwwwwwwww that was awesome

If I ever get hitched, when they ask me if I do I'll just say "Eeeeyup."

Wait...you're telling be that there's a good MacinDash ship fic out there and it's complete?
What manner of witchcraft is this?
Seriously, dude this wonderful. This my third favorite shipping pair. I like how both mature and immature Rainbow acts in this fic; she's still in character, but she'd be willing to give it all up to live the life of a simple farmer. They come together cause opposites attract and I like the part with Berry being a violent drunk. I can actually relate to this fic. My dad got into a fist fight before his wedding and his photo has him with two black eyes.

Peace Out.

Sehr sehr sehr interessant!
And not at all surprised at Fluttershy's fighting prowess. It's the quiet ones...

I want an sequel! Particularlly focusing on Gilda's redemption.

An easy 5 stars.

We've already seen Fluttershy throw bears around like it was nothing. A couple of drunk mares? No problem! FLUTTERSTOMP!:yay:

MOAR!! THIS IS MY NEW LIFE FORCE

Huzzah! A straight fic!

Wow, I went into this with no expectations, and I was pleasantly surprised! That was really, really good!

pretty good 4/5 stars

"Eeyup. That's cider."

This line made me forget how to breath for a good long time, the process being taken over by laughing.

75008 Manly :rainbowdetermined2: DAAAAAAAAaaaaaaaaawww:yay:

75554 I know right, what a Rarity (haha, stole that from Cereal, or was it Seth? I never really look. . .). :raritywink:

Danger is her middle name? I like that, it's a good touch. Curses on the Mare-do-well episode that's from though. . . so much potential, then the bad writing smacks us in the face. :derpytongue2:

I'm sure you know where your errors are grammatically and such, but I'm to tired to analyze the actual writing. Nothing jumped out at me though, so great job! I really enjoyed this. :twilightsmile:

NEED MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! till then...take ALL my stars:eeyup::rainbowwild:

i reallly hope that IF possible there can be a seqeul

......rainbow danger dash? What the.....:duck:

Hey, I enjoyed this. 5 Stars!

Magnificent fic!
MORE!

I blame the nuke

I admit, I'm not really much of a fan of MacDash, but here it just kinda...works. Don't really have that much more to say about it that hasn't been covered already.

Pinkie Pie breaks the fourth wall in writing too. :pinkiehappy:

Aww htat was a cute fanfiction :), cant wait for whatever your next one is.

aww so cute... also lol fluttershy fighting :flutterrage:

I like that you made her middle name "Danger":pinkiehappy:

Great piece, Comrade. I only spotted small mechanical errors, but that's just nitpicking. Four and a half shattered skulls out of five.

I loved it from beginning to middle! Very well written.
The end seemed a bit weak to me.
But still.
D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWW! :heart:

He was nervous, even if no he kept the same stoic expression he always wore.

I assume you meant to delete that 'no'?

This story had a lot of potential for good conflict, but you ignored it each time something juicy came up. Applejack could have had a problem with them getting together, Rainbow Dash could have had family that didn't agree with the pairing, Mac could have had second thoughts about getting hitched after being with the mares at the bachelor party, Berry and the other mares could have teamed up with Gilda to try and crash the wedding. . . honestly, this could have been better.

Spelling and grammar were fine all throughout, the mechanics were good, and you handled characterization well, but the plot, as I said above, was weak. I also think you could have described Rainbow Dash's fear of being tied down to an Earth Pony a bit better. I won't argue too much about what shipping couples you like, but Dash and Mac are almost polar opposites, and neither really have what the other would probably want in a mate. The story would have deeper if you'd touched on their differences a bit more.

Overall, decent read, but I can't give it more than 3 stars. That said, I look forward to seeing your future attempts at stories. Merry Hearth Warming!

The story would have deeper if you'd touched on their differences a bit more.

Sorry about that. Here I am criticizing your story, and I can't even proofread my own posts.

I Very, very good story, possibly the best freestanding fanfic I've ever read. But I do have one small gripe with it, though. I think the story could do without Gilda, or it would need to be reworked so it doesn't come across as 'suddenly, out of nowhere, Gilda!'. And the dialogue between her and Dash was very short, and I think that Dash was a bit too accepting of Gilda. I know that if one of my own, old, friends who I realised was a collossal dick and all round not nice person showed up out of the blue right before I was about to get married, a simple 'I'm sorry, let's be friends' wouldn't cut it.

But other than that it was an absolutely top-drawer story!

Very nice! :eeyup::heart::rainbowkiss:

Any chance for a sequel about RD & Big Mac's life together (kinda like applejoy) as well as Gilda's Redemption?

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Maybe. Not sure yet. But maybe.

:yay: The world needs more RainbowMac.
I think anyone could be paired up with Big Macintosh and it would be epic.
Yes. That means incest pairings, too.
-Pinkie :pinkiesmile:

any chance off a next chapter, i remember reading you might so just wanted to ask, thanks :D

This is a great fan fic. This is so a fave!

this was ok, I felt it was too rushed, if it was broking down into a few chapters and more detail added about the growing relationship it would have been great.

I have so many feels for this.
THE FEELS. :heart:
I should probably be sleeping, but I need to read everything MacInDash

:rainbowkiss::heart::eeyup:

short but sweet. i like it.

Read it a second time. HOW DID IT GET BETTER?:rainbowhuh:

75773 Her middle name is Danger.

More Mac-Dash fictions? :yay: < YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!
:rainbowdetermined2::heart::eeyup: = Best Couple!
WAIT! Twi had a relationship! Wut? :rainbowhuh:

How many times do I have to read this before it deteriorates in quality?

When I see :eeyup: with :rainbowderp: it makes me happy :)

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