That's So Flurry

Caladis

Caladis #1 · January 25th · 7 · ·

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The story being told from the perspective of a 12 year old is cute.

Sollace

Sollace #2 · January 25th · 2 · ·

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Oh this looks like it's going to be fun!

spoonlol

spoonlol #3 · January 26th · 4 · ·

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You know, I enjoy accidental incest as much as the next guy, but the way this story was going and how it’s written made me wish it really was just Shining abs Cadance that drank the poison.
Like they’ve be so wrapped up in each other flurry would have had to perform all they’re royal duties before realising they were being a little too lovey dovey.

That said, this was still tones of fun and your characterisation of Flurry is adorable

technofan

technofan #4 · January 26th · 1 · ·

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Ope, random incest baby. Oh well, what can you do. At least flurry heart seemed excited to get a cousin.

Triv_

Triv_ #5 · January 27th · 1 · ·

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I'm cackling

vectorVll

vectorVll #6 · January 27th · · ·

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I love the fact either that they did not teach flurry heart about the birds and the bees or flurry. Heart is waiting innocent to really understand the situation. Plus she never takes it really seriously about what happens because this would be the remote episode of MLP except with all the incest. Larry Hart will feed them a love. Potion mistaken identity. We would all laugh about everything in Twilight with mysteriously end up having the kid and the audience would wink in the writers with wink at each other. If you don't think that would happen, go back to the episode where rainbow leaves pinkie pie and rarity in the desert with no money and rarity specifically says we had to do things to get back here.

False Door

False Door #7 · January 28th · 2 · ·

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Flurry as a tween has a decidedly less pornographic vocabulary to describe what she's seeing and a narrower understanding of sex than an experienced adult does. She's also a lot more squeamish about not only seeing it but even just describing it in her narration.

NopeSplosion

NopeSplosion #8 · January 31st · 5 · ·

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I loved the premise. I was enjoying it till it dawned on me that it’s the only chapter. I was looking forward to more delicious drama unfolding.

Oh well. Fun, short read.

False Door

False Door #9 · January 31st · 4 · ·

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I could see this being a series of standalone episodes similar to my CMC Mayhem Trilogy.

NopeSplosion

NopeSplosion #10 · February 1st · 3 · ·

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If you do write it, I’ll be looking forward to it.

Keeping it in Flurry’s perspective is what I think, an important element. Seeing mature adult matters through somewhat innocent eyes is an interesting viewpoint.

Shachza

Shachza #11 · February 5th · 1 · ·

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I woke up with a frown on my muzzle and a whatever the opposite of a song in my heart is. Silence? Burning flowers? That sound an empty ketchup bottle makes when you squeeze it? Yeah… that's it.

I completely lost it. Had to stop reading and laugh for like a minute. I didn't just read this; I heard this. Tbpbpbpbpbppppp....

Also, the rest of the story was surprisingly wholesome, in a kinky kind of "Flurry's gonna' be in soooooo much trouble" way.

False Door

False Door #12 · February 6th · 3 · ·

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Lol. I'm glad someone appreciated this moment as much as me

Shakespearicles

Shakespearicles #13 · February 15th · 1 · ·

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How could this- Wait, the wine. The love potion. Oh no. But also yay, my potion worked! But also, oh no.

“Was it good for you, Meat Chunklet?” asked my aunt, dreamily from beneath him.

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An everfree rat

An everfree rat #14 · February 18th · 1 · ·

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This was not what i came for.
I came for twishine porn.
Now imkilling myself laughing and think the porn doesnt belong! Cudos you amazing bastard!

Wolfeh05

Wolfeh05 #15 · March 5th · · ·

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Lol this being from the perspective of a 12yo kid was funny and a breath of fresh air.
However, I find it strange(probably because I don't have any siblings, dunno) that Twi and Shining decided to eat a meal made for romantic purposes. It felt a bit icky from the start

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