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This is explicit enough it should be mature.
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I just feel like if I made it M it would be false advertising since I don't actually 'show' anything. It's a hard T or a soft M. Perhaps it's best to err on the side of caution but either way, someone's going to feel mislead.
*washing machine flashbacks*
couldn't be me! no!
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I do think its correct rating is the awkwardly in between status of M rated, without porn tag:
the saddest, loneliest setting where many people don't see it or don't look at it.
But I think I could not in good conscience upthumb this with a T rating on it.
This is very good comedy though, imho.
I LOL'd at Twilight Sparkle's help, and giggled at every scene. Reads like something I would write.
I will be shocked if the mods don't elevate this to "Mature," though. Either way, hilarious.
Really nice comedy about really oblivious children, sex jokes work best on oblivious ponies, heh.
Also, that cover art has got the vibration(and the need to repeat again and again) vibe on it, pretty cool!
Fuckin' hilarious 🤣
Uncomfortable childhood memories return…
Well then
Also, did rarity “know?”
I’m gonna agree with the above, this is like a soft M
Ah, yes. Every girl remembers her first time discovering the wonders of vibrating machinery. Very relatable, and very funny.
I was honestly expecting the employee to come out and say "Hey kids, with all those bits you gave us, we were able to fix up the ride" but the fact Twilight came by and screwed things up unwittingly was a nice surprise though I did think my idea was better.
That ending honestly reminded me of the Lily's garden advertisements.
Also I'm getting Ed, EDD, And Eddy vibes from them trying to get quarters for their favorite past time through schemes.
Overall, a surprisingly funny and wholesome story about discovery and appreciating the good things while they last.
I give it a broken kiddie ride out of 10.
Ngl, i laughed harder than i should
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Rarity might piece things together at the laundromat but I like to continue the running gag I had in 'The Princess of Purple Apples' where Rarity is absent minded and oblivious to what's going on with her little sister.
Maybe I'll bump the rating and ad clarification in the long description... after it falls off of the featured list.
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Originally I had an idea about the ride generating so much traffic that it was able to rejuvenate the rundown part of town into a thriving business plaza but it wasn't really something I felt I could fit in the timespan of the story. Also realistically it's harder to keep the real reason for the ride's popularity a mystery if it becomes a town wide phenomenon.
Also, Eddy would totally sell tickets to someone else's ride.
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I enjoyed the story a lot, it's very silly. But, yeah, this goes above the line and should be marked as mature.
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I don’t think they are going to repair it once they got enough money, because they are bound to notice that it started to bring in tons of bits AFTER the ride broke.
So only an oblivious yet talented character can do that, and they had to do it really quickly so that the girls can’t sabotage.
Insert Twilight.
In before this gets bumped up to mature, thumbs up favorite!
this reads like South Park does Ed, Edd, and Eddy
and i mean that in a good way
Overall, it’s ok. There’s some plotholes, such as if the ride could’ve been fixed by magic, why could’ve the shop pony paid a unicorn to fix it sooner? Moreover, we have to speculate the implications that ponykind could find some shame in the idea of sex for it to be common to tell fillies not to participate in such things; while also not caring about same-sex marriages, like we humans so often tend to do.
And let’s not forget the implications of Angel Bunny drinking wine.
However, reading this takes me back to a time when I personally discovered the joys of vibration(s) in certain areas of my body. Curiosity surely kills the cat in these novel conditions at that age.
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The store owners never even knew the ride was broken and no one cared to tell them. I think the CMCs are aware on at least a basic level where babies come from and are perhaps even aware that that's something that's supposed to happen behind closed doors. The problem is that they are unaware that what they're doing has any connection to that stuff. No one has explained this component to them. (Which probably happens a lot since it's not critical to reproduction.) Apple Bloom is on the verge of developing shame and seems to know that some of this stuff they probably shouldn't be doing. I thought that would be an important element to create conflict in the story. As for Angel... I dunno. Bunnies love raisins. Raisins come from grapes. Grapes make wine.... Something, something... It's fine.
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putting aside the Angel Bunny and Wine thing, it's not important.
What I mean about shame about sex is, if the other adult ponies feel some kind of shame toward sex, enough to tell fillies not to do it (and rightfully so), it should be implied that the adult ponies running Equestrian society should implement that kind of shame in their politics; yet it's cannon that no one gave a single damn about Lyra and Bon Bon getting hitched; the same cannot be said for a selection of the Bronies when the news broke out. I personally really don't care, I am seeing an absolutely WONDERFUL guy, I honestly didn't know guys like him could ever exist; hearts in my eyes every time he's able to "cum" over and visit 😅😍
Nonetheless, it's a slice of life story, takes me back to the night when I got a sudden urge to do the unthinkable at the time.
Super Troopers anyone?
This is very sensual, love it