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False Door


If you like feeling awful, you've come to the right place.

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Apple Bloom cleared her throat with a grim expression. “This may not be what you wanna here but those matching cutie marks are a breeder bond. It means they're destined to be each other's special someponies and um… breed… a lot.”

Hear

“Is this a joke? Pickle finally asked. Breeding? Just breeding? With my sister?”

"Is this a joke?" Pickle finally asked. "Breeding? Just breeding? With my sister?" Add quotations.

It's a nice start over all. Are these OC's? I can't place the names from anywhere.

Lmaooo they got the Alabama cutie marks.

Looking forward to more.

Wow, you are really getting pigeonholed huh? I still like this story, but its sad that no one is commissioning your more experimental style.

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Yeah. Life is funny. I certainly didn't have 'build an incest monopoly' on my bingo card when I imagined being a commissioned fanfiction writer. I want to take every job but also I should work on my own stuff some time. I should take a break one of these days and finish Fall of Rainbow Dash before everyone forgets what it's about...

“I probably can,” replied Pickle. “But you're probably just going to be some stay at home broodmare though.”

I think that would be the most disrespectful thing someone has said in one of your stories

I absolutely love your bookcovers lol.

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Yeah. But he could be right.

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Can someone put the meme that says he's out of line but he is correct

Applebloom just being casual with the applecest

Nice chapter. I think it's great that you incorporated the fact that most ponies wouldn't find it acceptable.

Bullies are the worst. I hope that Hailstone colt gets his wing clipped on a tree branch and is told he can never fly again.

They're gunna have to move aren't they

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nah, let him have the equivalent of stubbing his toe and shortly before it stops hurting, he stubbs it AGAIN for the rest of his life

I love this it looks so good I can’t wait for the next chapter

I've been cooking for over twenty years and never heard of Jojo potatoes.

Then I looked it up and found out they're just ordinary potato wedges lmao

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I've been saying 'jojo fries' for years but I also had to look it up to make sure it was actually a thing and not just some weird inside joke I adopted in highschool.

Their mother seems way to into this now. Can’t tell if she’s being helpful or if she’s enjoying the idea a little too much

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She's just trying to make the most out of a difficult situation and soften their early transition into a confusing and unorthodox lifestyle.

Absolutely sexy, great work.

Very very good absolutely amazing. I can’t wait for the next chapter. This story is so intriguing and interesting. Very good job. Keep it up.

Beauiful. More wholesome than the average incest story. Well done indeed.

A very nice incest story, and taken a lot more seriously than most. It was nice to see them gradually coming to terms with it, and I’m glad to see that it wasn’t rushed at all.

My only complaint, perhaps, is that the sex scenes were a little too short if it’s meant to be a actual clop … and too long if it’s not meant to be clop. Puts it in a weird no-man’s-land between serious romance and full-on clop. That said, what clop is there is really nice … I just wish those scenes could be extended a little and fleshed out with more detail.

Oh, and speaking of more detail… One detail I was really missing was any mention of Barley’s teats. The shower exploration scene would have been perfect for that. But especially in the last clop scene, where she’s pregnant and on her back … her pregnancy-swollen teats should have been really prominent there — a perfect time to let Pickle suck them a little on the way to eating her out, or to show them jiggling as he fucks her. Then again, maybe this taste for teats is just a ‘me’ thing and others would hate it.

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Many of my clop stories feel like plot with clop instead of the other way around and honestly I kind of like that. It lends it a strange realism. And also I agree that leaving out that detail was a missed opportunity (though it was one I missed intentionally.)

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