The year is 3001 in the land of Equestria, just a few months after Luna returned from the moon, and a wedding is happening in Canterlot, on a day that would go on to be known as the Canterlot Invasion. Queen Chrysalis has infiltrated Canterlot along with many other changelings, and are poised to strike
In another realm, far, far away, an ancient evil, a Necromancer known only as Death, would be finally struck down, with seemingly no hope for returning back to life.
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It’s been a long while since I’ve written a new story, and I’m unsure if I’ll finish this story before I run out of motivation, but I’m going to try my best. This is a rewrite of one of my oldest and, I feel, worse stories, and I wish to show off the improved writing skills I have. Hope you all enjoy.
I like this already creep them out, all of them~
I love this story you are a amazing Writer. You must have created a lot of books before this. Or did he go on to some kind of Writer. College.
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I’ve made a lot of stories before, of a lower quality I’d say, but the main reason why I’ve improved so much is doing text based DND with friends for the past few years. It’s helped me refine my writing style and storytelling.
Keep it up, I love the way you're writing the dialog so far
Well I for one hope you don’t run out of motivation to finish this story. Because I’m loving this so far. Just this first chapter alone has peaked my curiosity something fierce.
Is she stupid!?
That is another huge mistake as well.
Hmm yes interesting indeed. And also very confusing as well. I’m assuming these mysteries will be revealed as the story goes on? Or is there some lore we should know from some other source?
I am loving this! thank you for righting this:D
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Most of it will serve a purpose (maybe), but some information included in opening readings will just be extra information that exists just to support other information. But most figures mentioned by name will have some importance, either to the story, or the characters within it. Most. Like the mention of Alaric is just to show to further tie this lore to real history.
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Thank you.
So… They know he’s death now?
ooooh Buggy Raven this time~
Definitely enjoying it so far.
The hive mind, ok these changelings are like that
Why not go all the way and make Death a lich?
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This is only my interpretation. But from what I gather he was some sort of Lich/undead. Then he was killed killed by a group of Paladins if I remember correctly. Or am I thinking of a different story I’ve read lately?
Would need to either reread story or wait for authors comment.
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Yeah, he was a Lich/Necromancer and was slain by a group of paladins right before he ended up Equestria. I mostly called him a Necromancer because it’s the more broad title, and more accurate. Where in my lore, a Lich would be a form of immortal Necromancer who put their soul into a container. Raven never put his soul into a container, he was simply immortal due to his very nature, or, at least, ageless. That’s why I went with Necromancer and not Lich
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Naw I think they passed out because Raven breathe did not know what is a cutie mark
What is one year of work to one such as Death? A fair return for a respect almost never given to him?
This will be fun to observe:D
“If nobody’s standing around looking impressed, whats the point in having you all?!”
-The Doctor from Doctor Who.
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Death may make them stand in a corner
I’m a bit confused on why he had a change of heart so fast. But I probably missed something anyway.
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More explaining will happen over time, but I’ll just say that thoughts about destiny, and seeing ancient creatures still happy and finding companionship, it was important to him.
Also he is not the most mentally stable creature so he can change his mind very quickly for reasons that might not make sense to the more mortally minded.
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I think I get it.
I was assuming immoral really old= stubborn and unchanging. But he likes observing things if the PreviousChapters, were anything to go bye, and I imagine for someone who is very interested in the world around them. It would be the exact opposite. they have more experience so They’re more willing to change.
Is that right? Do correct me if I’m wrong.
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For some immortal beings, they would remain stubborn and unchanging, much like Chrysalis is, unable to see anything except her own want for revenge. Raven has meanwhile always had more of a scientific mind, if he sees something, he’s willing to change his theories and views in order to fit it, so to say. To him, immortality was the shedding of care for the mortal and the embracing of the immortal, things like knowledge and science. But seeing the two Kings, who are older than him, being happy together, plus the Crusaders wearing him down, plus all the comments on his destiny, plus the experience of having his essence ripped apart in a dream, it all added up to a sudden shift in view on what immortality means. Most of this has currently remained unsaid in the story, but it will be fairly shortly, as the Crusaders would be very confused about his change.
I’m assuming death is a Lich so he’ll probably just re-materialize next to them.
Then, let’s see how many times he will die in this story :D
Current count: 1-(deaths by Celestia)
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And here I am trying to figure out what the hell just happened between Celestia and Raven...
I would like to say that this is 100% his fault. He did not only give Chrysalis an army in the promise. He's now abandoning it both to fuck off and do something else. Top 10 most irresponsible deities or mortors or gods?
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All according to kaikeku. Everything will moved as the supreme being's desires.
Term "crusaders" here is ironic, once being a synonim of "paladins".
This necromancer got a ton of skeletons in his closet...
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Blue oni - red oni.
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All according to cake.
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No clue.
Necromancer->Apple farmer
What a job change!
But he cannot complain about it, can he?
You’re lucky to get a job in this kind of zombie economy.
I make the same kind of mistake, but I make it more often.
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They saw themselves in each other it both angered and frightened them
Wowie this fanfic is like philosophy on crack, and I love it.