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Sunset Shimmer is my crush!!

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This story is a sequel to The Trial Continues


Sunset has been through so much with The Fall Formal, The Battle of the Bands, and Anon-A-Miss. Now this story will take sunset through more adventures. She will find love, as well as make new friendships.

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The final installment of the trials trilogy. I foresee great things from you, keep it up!:twilightsmile:

I'm looking forward to seeing your take on The Friendship Games, Camp Everfree, the memory stone adventure and the other adventures Sunset will experience.

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Thanks Skyblazer9 glad to see you back. Arlynn the Dragon it's gonna take a few chapters to really get this story going so hang in there.

Your mission, Apple Bloom, is to get all the Rainbooms, The Crusaders and Trixie to come to the party some of you will probably spend the night. Mom had ok’d it, now I had an ok Christmas, I would like to have a better New Year’s Eve.” Sunset informed her.

Sounds like quite a lot to try and complete in a short amount of time imo.

“That’s what I deserve then.” Apple Bloom replied. “Stop talking like that.” Sunset shot back. Apple Bloom just stood there eyes wide in shock. She was surprised to hear Sunset say that.

Punishment or not, no one deserves to be outside in freezing temperatures.

Sunset shut off her phone and held it close to her chest and smiled. She was happy that her conversation had been a success. Now to tell her friends that she forgave them she was hoping an invite would help.

A good step down the long road of process.

A few minutes later Pinkie Pie called and said she would come too. Fluttershy texted and said she would come too, as did Rainbow Dash, but the bad news was she couldn’t get Scootaloo off her grounding for the party.

At least she's making some process. :twilightsmile:

“Mom, you are the best!!” Sunset exclaimed, giving Luna a huge hug that almost knocked Luna off the bed. Realizing what Sunset had almost done, Luna gave her a nasty look. Sunset cringed a little bit. Then both of them burst into a laughing fit.

Only a matter of time before things will be the way they were prior to the anonamiss incident.

Good work so far, but you're missing some commas.

Oh dear I can already foresee very bad things happening if Gilda ever does return to Canterlot City.

Great chapter by the way. :)

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Could you tell me where so I can plug them in.

“Yes mom.” Sunset sighed. Luna rolled her eyes. Sunset maybe from another world, but still had the attitude of a teenager sometimes.

I mean she is technically an adult in equestria.

“Mom you say that all the time. I guess here in about 4-5 months I have become a normal teen. I have a mom, two aunts, and a bunch of close friends. It is great when Equestrian magic isn’t messing it up. I hope tonight is just a normal New Year’s Eve.” Sunset said.

Don't jinx it if I were you.

The two girls headed upstairs chatting about the sleepover. Trixie said her first sleepover and she wasn’t sure what to do. Rainbow told her just relax and go with the flow.

Good to see those two are getting along now. :twilightsmile:

“We are gonna get her therapy after the holidays are over.” Applejack said, patting Sunset’s shoulder.

That's good to know. It always help. Myself included since i have for many years now.

“You’re right darling, I’m not big on video games but go ahead load up the PS 5. I mean it.” Rarity said.

Never thought I'd hear that from rarity.

“Darling there is someone out there for you. They just haven’t found you yet. You can’t hurry love, you just have to be patient.” Rarity said.

She's right, that's what I'm doing and I've been waiting patiently since the last girl I had eyes on for back in 2015. It'll be worth it once you find your special someone 😉

“I enjoy my little apartment, the beauty of your country and thank you for your hospitality. This Place is nice but it is still a prison. I wish to return to Canterlot." She said.

Oh boy, here we go again.

An underline will be where I see commas need to be, I'll point out where I sentence needs to be cleaned up.

Sunset Granny Smith, wore my behind out with a wooden spoon. That was nothing compared to how sore my arms and legs were from all the extra chores ah have had to do. SUNSET PLEASE!! DON’T PUNISH APPLEJACK BECAUSE OF ME!!” Apple Bloom cried again.

Sunset I can only say I’m sorry so many times.” Apple Bloom replied, her voice breaking.

“Then I’m tasking you with a mission. I had planned two parties one was for tomorrow night on New Years Eve, the other was going to be my Sweet 16 party. Mom is gonna have her sisters Aunt Celestia, and Aunt Chrysalis come over with Chrysalis’s new girlfriend Potion Nova.

Sunset stared down at Apple Bloom icily and spoke very seriously “I lost all my friends because of you little bitches. I lost your sister, Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy and Trixie because I accused her of being Anon-a-miss. I lost all of them.

No I would rather walk Vice Principal Luna.” Apple Bloom replied,

“The last thing I want to do is attend your funeral of one of the crusaders. Listen Apple Bloom, I have been where you are. I was talking about dying the night of the Fall Formal ask my mom. I scared her badly, like you are right now. Mom is taking you home and that is final.” Sunset said laying the law down to Apple Bloom.

Drop your or of one of the crusaders.

A minute later they both left and Sunset was standing in the kitchen and after a second she said “My little sun?”

Drop and, add a comma.

Sunset: “Listen I am sorry about accusing you of being Anon-a-miss. I couldn’t see the truth right in front of me. This time it was my fault and I apologize and want to ask if you want to hang with me tomorrow night.”

Drop and, add a comma.

Sunset: “Thanks Trixie I mean it. But why didn’t you say something?”

Sunset: “Ok Trixie see you then.”

Capitalize the K in OK.

“I hope they know I forgive them. I hope someone other than Trixie comes.” Sunset thought As if on cue Sunset’s phone rang and she saw it was Applejack.

Period after thought.

Sunset Apple Bloom and I would be happy to attend but are you gonna have enough room in the apartment for everyone?” Applejack asked.

Well I was gonna hold it in my room but now I am gonna see if I can get the living room and see if mom and her friends will hang in the kitchen. I realized it’s gonna get crowded in here.” Sunset replied back.

“Trixie. Sunset replied.

Hey she is my friend too. So none of that Applejack. Sunset warned.

“I know but sometimes she seems so arrogant.” Applejack pointed out.

“You just have to get used to her....Sunset started when her phone beeped. “Applejack I got another call, see you tomorrow night. Come around seven. Sunset said.

An ellipses is three periods.

Darling this is Rarity and Sweetie Belle told me about your conversation with Apple Bloom as apparently she was allowed to have her phone for this one occasion and yes Sweetie Belle and I will definitely attend. What time?” Rarity asked.

Drop the and after Rarity. Drop the as after Apple Bloom and add a period.

“Is that ok?” Sunset asked.

O.k. but everyone sees the ball drop, and I’ll hang with Celestia and Chrysalis and her girlfriend in the kitchen.” Luna told her giving in.

Either OK or Okay(okay if it isn't the first word in a sentence)


Also after the quotation marks, you add a comma, if you're breaking the sentence and adding a stressor(probably used the wrong term here) about who said what as part of a paragraph. Example: "Blah blah blah blah, yadda yadda yadda.", she said.

Princess Celestia called them over to the microphone. All three girls got up and walked over to the microphone. Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo stood there.

I didn't know the princess made it to the assembly :trollestia:
Joking aside, you might want to change that to Principal.

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I see that and changed thanks for the heads up.

“It’s time girls.” Celestia said. The Crusaders dutifully got up and followed Celestia single file out of the office; a police officer brought up the rear also as protection for the Crusaders.

For a second I was gonna ask why but it makes sense when you think back to what happened.

As they came onto the stage they could feel all the students' eyes boring holes into them. The Crusaders looked down at their sisters in the front row. Applejack just pulled her hat down enough so they couldn’t see her. Rarity looked to the side and Rainbow Dash just put her hand on her forehead to block her view. The Crusaders realized then and there they were on their own.

The deserve it for how much trouble they've caused.

I know what it was like to suffer, as I have done that. I just ask one thing do not torture and abuse the crusaders like I was. They have a long road ahead to gain trust back but they can start by gaining just one person’s forgiveness. It's a start.” Sunset finished.

That's good to know and glad she shared with the rest of CHS.

Diamond Tiara and Silver spoon cornered Apple Bloom in the hallway during classes. Apple Bloom took a step back; she knew this would happen.

Well those two are gonna be in trouble later.

Trixie ran across the gym to the supply closet and found the baseball supplies grabbing a bat she ran for the hallway. Telling herself this was risky as hell but she had to stop this.

And is likely gonna be in trouble like diamond and silver.

“Did I make a mistake this morning? I was trying to save my niece and by saving Sunset I have opened Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo to her abuse. It’s gonna be the aftermath of the Fall Formal again. Just not for Sunset this time.

It's not your fault celestia. These things happen whether we like it or not but sometimes I'll end good or bad, depending on what the situation is.

Celestia opened the safe and took out a couple of folders and then in the back a bottle of rum. Opening it she took two swigs out of it. After that she placed it in the wall safe, and then put the folders back in. She put the picture back up and hated herself for being weak like that. Sh ealso knew she should get rid of it too. Still she very rarely ever used that.

Dang

After that and her cup of tea. Celestia let herself weep and let some tears fall, for she had opened a can of worms. Now the crusaders were the targets, not her niece. Now all she had done was shift the abuse. “How0 can this possibly get worse?” Celestia thought.

I'm afraid not Celestia.

“I mean Gilda has vanished and she knows that she is not to leave the palace grounds.” His guard said.

Figured she'd escape.

“This is unfortunate. I was hoping not to have to clean up this mess. I will tell the syndicate. We will handle it from here.” They replied.

Hope whoever that is we'll find out sooner than later.

Poor sweet Apple Bloom...and oh no! Gilda, leave Trixie alone!

Luna walked around her desk, sat down with her hands together and looked like she was praying. In the end Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon were suspended for a week. Trixie was suspended for two weeks. Luna had taken a seat after everyone but Trixie left.

They deserve it after what happened even if trixie tried to help but what she did was just crazy imo.

Shortly after that the bell rang and Sunset quietly gathered her stuff and left Trixie tried to follow her. She went down the hall a little bit and into Luna’s office. Trixie realized then that she had lost her best friend.

She went too far this time and tbh I don't blame Sunset at all for what just happened with her talk with trixie.

She got to the stairwell and started to run for the roof. Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo looked on in horror. APPLE BLOOM WAS GONNA COMMIT SUICIDE!!

Yeah, I think she needs serious help now, like therapy to be precise since that part just now scared the crap out of me!

After a second of hesitation, Apple Bloom took both Sunset and Applejack’s hand. With a pull she was pulled off the ledge and into Applejack’s waiting arms.

That was too close.

“What? Is it the scars? You want to know how I got them?” Gilda asked.

Well Gilda is back, and she of course had to say the line the joker would say.

Ooh, G5 intro, like it

Not mental health, although she would see the school guidance counselor the next day. The kind of help Apple Bloom would need would come from the Rainbooms, The Crusaders, and even Trixie. It was the kind of help Sunset needed after the Fall Formal. She needed people to have her back.

Yep, it'll prove that they want to help her eve after what she and her friends did on mystable.

“HAHAHA!! I have them.” Gilda said, exposing her shoulder to Trixie with the scar of the bullet wound from Chrysalis.

Oh my!

“Now if I know you can be trusted. You can come with me.” Gilda said, extending her hand.

I got a bad feeling about this.

Trixie’s phone pinged down at the docks. That was where Mulder and Scully took off for. Chrysalis just sat back wondering what Trixie was doing down there, if she was there. More importantly what was Gilda doing down there?

Wonder why she's at the docks of all places? Must have have to do with Gilda.

“Celestia you did what had to be done. None of this is your fault. It was the fault of three snot nose brats who went out of their way to hurt your niece. This was not your fault. If you want to blame someone, blame The Crusaders; it was their idea.” Chrysalis told her.

Chrystal is right, this wasn't your fault.

“You need to stay right where you are.” A voice came from the darkness. Slowly two men in black suits came into view and in the middle was a grey haired man with a trench coat and a cigarette in his hand.

Well, they're caught now. But it's obvious it won't be easy.

Trixie thought for a minute then replied. “He said Maretime Bay, Bridlewood, and Zephyr Heights.”

Mlp G5 references eh, nice.

Трикси на минуту задумалась, затем ответила: “Он сказал, что Маретим-Бей, Бридлвуд и Зефир-Хайтс”.

And here is a reference to the G5, and the chapter is not bad

“Well it’s official, Pinkie Pie knows everything.” Rainbow Dash remarked.

I wouldn't really say everything.

Their relationship had been a rocky one. But Trixie did help her by going to the dance and just hanging out during study hall. Little did she know what happened with Trixie and Gilda’s encounter earlier that week.

And that she'll find out soon enough.

Sunset looked around as her mom and Chrysalis joined the crowd. There was Applejack, Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo. Also with her mom was Aunt Celestia and Aunt Chrysalis with her girlfriend Potion Nova. Then Sunset’s eyes came to rest on the two biggest surprises: Princess Twilight Sparkle, and Trixie.

Wait trixie showed up, I did not expect that but doubt she'll reveal what happened with Gilda.

“That is a gem from right near Ponyville. It’s very special and I enchanted it. You can look into it and see Equestria any time you want, but not in real time. It's similar to what you call a snow globe in this world. You stare into it and it shows you Equestria. A different place each time.” Twilight explained.

Well that's interesting.

“Now Sunset my gift to you is this.” Luna said handing Sunset a big manilla envelope. Sunset sat there looking at the envelope and then opened it. It was a piece of paper and on the top it said: “CERTIFICATE OF ADOPTION.”

Happy birthday sunset. :twilightsmile:

“Retrace her steps you’ll find out who.” The Cigarette Smoking Man said and finished walking away.

Looks like we got a mystery on our hands.

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